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God Omnipotent Omniscient Omnipresent Does Deeds

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Comment from Alchera
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"Almighty God only acts good, He takes no drastic actions, and puts us never in problems, and imposes us no pains or sufferings, for man acts wrongly and invites his own sufferings; God only loves His best creation man, and He is not a magician and acts no miracles, He does not act only for a particular or specific man, home, family or institution, you know, God is Divine, Gracious, and acts divinely and creates and gifts man a mortal state and status, that's why you think so," Samuel told Daniel and ended his discussion". I love this best and you are completely right!
God is for all men of goodwill and of whichever religious creed! Well written and thought throughout its story lined content!

 Comment Written 30-May-2020

Comment from sunnilicious
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God is great. We must fear God, especially because we are sinners. Nature is where we can easily find the changes and fury of God. This was a wonderful essay. Well thought out. Clearly written. Excellent work :)

 Comment Written 01-May-2020

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Yes, God has a Master Plan. We may not understand all of His actions, but He is in control. You expressed your thoughts and feelings well. Thank you for sharing. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

Comment from robyn corum
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Al,

The Bible teaches us that God is no respecter of persons. Blessings and evil fall on everyone - the good and the bad. This was an interesting discussion. Thank you!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

Comment from Coco Jane
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You have a lot of good ideas in here. I struggle with your use of comma splices. So many thoughts in a single loooong sentence!

The first sentence changes tense. Maybe use "Why DID God turn..." instead of "Why has God turned...." The last sentence also changes tense: "Told" is past, and "ends" is present.

Daniel's second question is also not a sentence. It should read: "Why does God take...and put...?" The lack of structure makes your ideas run together and IMO muddles them. Smaller "bites" of thought might be more easily "digested" by a reader.

This is not really fiction since it lacks conflict and resolution. Consider letting Daniel have the last sentence, commenting on what he has learned from his father in this discussion. Then we see a change in him.

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 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Great! Thank you for your suggestions, I have edited accordingly. Please read the work again. And please check if the work is now pleasant to read. I would like to nominate a vote in your favour for writing this good review.
reply by Coco Jane on 06-Apr-2020
    I see the corrections in tense.

    I still struggle with the very long sentences which are actually comma splices. I am an English teacher and feel most comfortable with concise writing.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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A well-written piece of fiction and nonfiction. I can see why you have received All-Time Best Status. You did a great job and I didn't find any errors. Take care and stay well. Shirley

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020

Comment from barbara.wilkey
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You have read my work and I happen to find this and decided I should read some of your work. I have often asked during this what is going on. We have this virus growing rampant through the world and then we have earthquakes and tornado. It seems almost like too much. Then I have to remember God is in charge and He will handle it.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020

Comment from RShipp
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Kids always have the best questions to ask about things ... even thier God are dead on adn characteristically to-the-point..

"He is not a magician" So true.

Enjoyed.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020

Comment from Opeyemi Diamond
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This fiction is beautiful. I like it. It all acknowledges that God is Almighty and He does as He pleases. His acts sometimes are mysteries to man. His ways are different from our ways and so we tend to wonder why He does some things. He does good and not evil, that's His way. I quite agree with you.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020

Comment from WryWriter
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I really liked this work. Too many don't understand that God doesn't do things to harm His creation, but ever works toward what is best for mankind. Unfortunately, He is blamed when things don't work out the way man (with his limited knowledge) thinks it should. Enjoyed!

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019