Crossing That Bridge
It was a long time coming, but she's earned it...11 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
There is everything to love about this story. For such a short story, I felt I had all the knowledge I needed to understand the who's, what's, how's and why's.
The story was entertaining. I like strong female characters (overcomers). I fell in love with Bradley ... such a sweetheart for looking out after his friend, even though she was doing well on her own. You did exceptionally well with Gerald's characterization also.
Your dialog was exceptional, slow and smooth, giving an air of being in a well-to-do restaurant.
I love the deepness of the thought the narrator had when Gerald called her Kathy, 'I never could decide on the 'real' Gerald - this one or the 'Katharine' one.'
This is really a great contest entry!
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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There is everything to love about this story. For such a short story, I felt I had all the knowledge I needed to understand the who's, what's, how's and why's.
The story was entertaining. I like strong female characters (overcomers). I fell in love with Bradley ... such a sweetheart for looking out after his friend, even though she was doing well on her own. You did exceptionally well with Gerald's characterization also.
Your dialog was exceptional, slow and smooth, giving an air of being in a well-to-do restaurant.
I love the deepness of the thought the narrator had when Gerald called her Kathy, 'I never could decide on the 'real' Gerald - this one or the 'Katharine' one.'
This is really a great contest entry!
TTTT
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful comments and exciting review!! You have made my evening!!
Comment from J W Warner
I think this is an excellent contest entry, outside the proverbial box of tales about lost loves, lost friends or lost opportunities. Nice twist to end this short piece, definitely not how this sort of scene ends. Good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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I think this is an excellent contest entry, outside the proverbial box of tales about lost loves, lost friends or lost opportunities. Nice twist to end this short piece, definitely not how this sort of scene ends. Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, JW -- much appreciated!!
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I'm sure you put a lot of time and effort into your story for this contest. I would just make a suggestion if that's okay. You have the word smile(d) in your story 4 times, you also have chuckled, giggles, and happy face. It might be better to use some other words. Either way, you did a good job. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I'm sure you put a lot of time and effort into your story for this contest. I would just make a suggestion if that's okay. You have the word smile(d) in your story 4 times, you also have chuckled, giggles, and happy face. It might be better to use some other words. Either way, you did a good job. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from rockmann
Well written. The conversation seemed so real, it was like we were overhearing what they were saying in a table across from us. Daddy knows best? Now with Katherine around. Nice to see a strong woman.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Well written. The conversation seemed so real, it was like we were overhearing what they were saying in a table across from us. Daddy knows best? Now with Katherine around. Nice to see a strong woman.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for your review!! Much appreciated!
Comment from Sylvia Page
This is a nice story of independence. Katherine writes a book which she has published and by her remark... "I'm not coming home this time, Gerald, and the money doesn't matter anymore." I feel that it is a best seller. Best wishes in the contest,
Sylvia
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This is a nice story of independence. Katherine writes a book which she has published and by her remark... "I'm not coming home this time, Gerald, and the money doesn't matter anymore." I feel that it is a best seller. Best wishes in the contest,
Sylvia
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Many thanks for your review.
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You are welcome
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done, blending the plot into the conversation and keeping a surprise ending. Good luck in the contest. These are interesting prompts and challenges Fanstory tosses to us. At least this one isn't about the big fish that got away.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Well done, blending the plot into the conversation and keeping a surprise ending. Good luck in the contest. These are interesting prompts and challenges Fanstory tosses to us. At least this one isn't about the big fish that got away.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This is such a wonderful surprise -- thank you so very much for your review and those lovely stars!! Have an awesome day!!
Comment from RodG
An extremely well-written short story. I truly enjoyed meeting Katharine/Kathy and loved how--in this reader's eyes--she evolved from a pompous princess to a admirable authoress in a single scene. I also like the other two characters, Bradley the foil and Gerald the faux antagonist. But it's the DIALOG that really makes this story work and that terrific ending. A great pleasure to read. Rod
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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An extremely well-written short story. I truly enjoyed meeting Katharine/Kathy and loved how--in this reader's eyes--she evolved from a pompous princess to a admirable authoress in a single scene. I also like the other two characters, Bradley the foil and Gerald the faux antagonist. But it's the DIALOG that really makes this story work and that terrific ending. A great pleasure to read. Rod
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Wow, Rod, this is such a wonderful surprise -- thank you so very much for your review and those lovely stars!! Have an awesome day!!
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You are very welcome. Rod
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Oh, well paced, the story builds. At first I wonder if she has a drinking problem and instead slowly discover she's a strong survivor! Well done. I want to win, but I think you deserve to.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Oh, well paced, the story builds. At first I wonder if she has a drinking problem and instead slowly discover she's a strong survivor! Well done. I want to win, but I think you deserve to.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This is such a wonderful surprise -- thank you so very much for your review and those lovely stars!! Have an awesome day!!
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You're most welcome.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from kahpot
A shame the book is not real, as I get the impression from this very wonderful read, going by "Kathy's" demeanor and exit that this book is a best seller, ( money not important anymore)? a very descriptive and well written short story, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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A shame the book is not real, as I get the impression from this very wonderful read, going by "Kathy's" demeanor and exit that this book is a best seller, ( money not important anymore)? a very descriptive and well written short story, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful review! Have an awesome day!!
Comment from LisaMay
I love the linkages with wine throughout the story... and also that the reader isn't handed the story on a plate; we have to keep alert and pick up the clues as they are sprinkled for us to catch on to what the situation is. And the final revelation of Katharine's success as a published author is sweet indeed. Great story.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I love the linkages with wine throughout the story... and also that the reader isn't handed the story on a plate; we have to keep alert and pick up the clues as they are sprinkled for us to catch on to what the situation is. And the final revelation of Katharine's success as a published author is sweet indeed. Great story.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Wow!! This is such a wonderful surprise -- thank you so very much for your review and those lovely stars!! Have an awesome day!!
