My Serenity Shell
It's the simple things.14 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
I enjoy your poem about the serenity shell. It made a lot of sense to me because I have a couple of things that bring serenity and memories back to me in full force. And I hold them dearly.
I did enjoy the rhyme part. I'm a die hard rhyme and rhythm poet. Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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I enjoy your poem about the serenity shell. It made a lot of sense to me because I have a couple of things that bring serenity and memories back to me in full force. And I hold them dearly.
I did enjoy the rhyme part. I'm a die hard rhyme and rhythm poet. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much for your review, Patty. We all need to keep a hold on serenity in our lives!
Comment from rockmann
Good job. I really liked your effort and hope you do well in your contest. Everyone has something that soothes them, relaxes them, makes them smile, and glad to see the little shell works for you.
With it's comfort to touch.......its, no contraction.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Good job. I really liked your effort and hope you do well in your contest. Everyone has something that soothes them, relaxes them, makes them smile, and glad to see the little shell works for you.
With it's comfort to touch.......its, no contraction.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review and especially for catching my naughty apostrophe that sneaked past my usually eagle eye. I applaud you for being the only one to comment on it. I think correct use of punctuation is important and am pleased to see that it is for you also. Thank you very much.
Comment from Neonewman
Another great, well-crafted entry for this "an object" writing prompt. I enjoyed the serenity this piece brought forth as you told your story and what the shell means to you. Best of luck in the voting polls, you definitely have my vote.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Another great, well-crafted entry for this "an object" writing prompt. I enjoyed the serenity this piece brought forth as you told your story and what the shell means to you. Best of luck in the voting polls, you definitely have my vote.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much for your support, Steve. I appreciate your review and your vote. I see my story is doing quite well in the poll... I think the link with nature having a calming effect is a common experience.
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Absolutely! It was just such a feel-good piece.
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Thank you :)))
Comment from Janetsue
I enjoyed reading this so much. I used to live across the street from the Caribbean Sea and after each storm, I would rush to the beach and find all kinds of sea shells, sea glass, and driftwood washed up onto the shore. Your poem has brought back such good memories. Best wishes with your wonderful entry! --Spangle
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I enjoyed reading this so much. I used to live across the street from the Caribbean Sea and after each storm, I would rush to the beach and find all kinds of sea shells, sea glass, and driftwood washed up onto the shore. Your poem has brought back such good memories. Best wishes with your wonderful entry! --Spangle
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I liked hearing about your seaside memories. Thanks for reviewing.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is such a precious, sentimental poem! Obviously, this little shell holds a special place in your heart! I have a petoskey stone from the shores of Northern Michigan in Lake Michigan which I then polished by hand. It has ancient coral in it which creates various patterns. Whenever I feel stressed, I rub it between my fingers and it always brings my great comfort! Thank you for sharing you little shell! :)
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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This is such a precious, sentimental poem! Obviously, this little shell holds a special place in your heart! I have a petoskey stone from the shores of Northern Michigan in Lake Michigan which I then polished by hand. It has ancient coral in it which creates various patterns. Whenever I feel stressed, I rub it between my fingers and it always brings my great comfort! Thank you for sharing you little shell! :)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review. Your stone and my shell each have comforting powers... contact with nature echoes in our hearts.
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Absolutely! xoxo
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow. I have one sixer left, and I am giving it to you, because, I think this nonpredictable poem, is outstanding. I read your notes beforehand and did not know what to expect. But, that made it all the more special, when I read it, and did not know when and where the rhymes would go. I love that you did not pin it down to a formula. It is all the better for it. From the introduction to the ending line, this is marvelously done. It is as if you are speaking to me personally, of an object, and all the meanings it has for you. I love the last stanza the best, with its rhymes of 'proportion" "contortion" and "distortion" as well as the meaning of these words used together. How we magnify and exaggerate, our interpretation, of the source of what an object can, and does mean, to us. The message is clear; when you hold your serenity shell, then all is well. I could talk about more examples, but I think you get the gist. This spoke to me, and I am grateful, that I experienced your poem. Thank you.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Wow. I have one sixer left, and I am giving it to you, because, I think this nonpredictable poem, is outstanding. I read your notes beforehand and did not know what to expect. But, that made it all the more special, when I read it, and did not know when and where the rhymes would go. I love that you did not pin it down to a formula. It is all the better for it. From the introduction to the ending line, this is marvelously done. It is as if you are speaking to me personally, of an object, and all the meanings it has for you. I love the last stanza the best, with its rhymes of 'proportion" "contortion" and "distortion" as well as the meaning of these words used together. How we magnify and exaggerate, our interpretation, of the source of what an object can, and does mean, to us. The message is clear; when you hold your serenity shell, then all is well. I could talk about more examples, but I think you get the gist. This spoke to me, and I am grateful, that I experienced your poem. Thank you.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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You really get me Jesse. I am grateful that you review my work and understand it so completely.
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It feels good, when I get the gist of a post well enough, that the writer thanks me for understanding. You wrote a very creative piece.
Jesse
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the value of a simple object can bring to our lives. There are a few items my two older grandkids love to go to when they visit me. A little sailor man carved fromy wood, a seashell that has the ocean sound within when you hold it to the ears, and my piano.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about the value of a simple object can bring to our lives. There are a few items my two older grandkids love to go to when they visit me. A little sailor man carved fromy wood, a seashell that has the ocean sound within when you hold it to the ears, and my piano.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review. Those items you mentioned are packed with special memories.
Comment from Cybertron1986
I found your piece to quite validating. It acknowledges both the human condition and the struggles that is life. I love how you draw that negative emotion and distill it through the simplicity of the nature that surrounds us. It's refreshing and deep, and needful to remember. Reading this piece, I feel like I just took a breath of fresh air. Beautiful. Thank you for a great share!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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I found your piece to quite validating. It acknowledges both the human condition and the struggles that is life. I love how you draw that negative emotion and distill it through the simplicity of the nature that surrounds us. It's refreshing and deep, and needful to remember. Reading this piece, I feel like I just took a breath of fresh air. Beautiful. Thank you for a great share!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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What a wonderful review! Thank you so much. I am pleased my poem evoked this response from you. My little shell does indeed cast its spell.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I love shells. We had good friends who lived just blocks from the ocean when I was a kid. We lived on the desert. I loved going to visit, sometimes renting an apt they owned for a week, and being able to just walk to the ocean. I would collect a ton of shells. This is a lovely poem about the effect one shell has on a life. Seeing so many parallels between it and living. Very well done and I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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I love shells. We had good friends who lived just blocks from the ocean when I was a kid. We lived on the desert. I loved going to visit, sometimes renting an apt they owned for a week, and being able to just walk to the ocean. I would collect a ton of shells. This is a lovely poem about the effect one shell has on a life. Seeing so many parallels between it and living. Very well done and I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your lovely review. Where I live, there seem to be fewer and fewer shells on the beaches to collect...everyone must have them at their places!
Comment from Lobber
As a Pisces I agree there's a built-in serenity in any solid object that comes from an aquatic world. I say "solid" since I think holding a squid or sting ray would give you a different feeling-,Lobber
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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As a Pisces I agree there's a built-in serenity in any solid object that comes from an aquatic world. I say "solid" since I think holding a squid or sting ray would give you a different feeling-,Lobber
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Hey Fishy, thanks for reviewing. I don't like touching fish... certainly not interested in handling a sting ray! But shells are OK.
