Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

What a great way to turn a negative into a positive and honoring your son. I hope Heaven is as you dedcribed it, it sounds wonderful. Very nice job.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019

Thanks and I hope this inspire you as much as it was enjoyable for me to write have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Of course my, friend. A book would be a wonderful thing for you and your family. I can't even begin to imagine what a parent goes through losing a child.
God bless
Steve

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019

Thanks for your thoughts and inspiration Miss neo and I've actually done this with a fictional book called Faith about a woman who commits suicide after losing her fiance in a war I think I wrote about 25 chapters of that is in my profolio...
*(Buried of course)
Rick

reply by Neonewman on 20-Jul-2019

My pleasure, Rick.

Comment from Brenda Henderson

Excellent

"Every time a bell rings an angel gets his wings." Said Clarence the angel to George Bailey in the Frank Capra classic film "It's A Wonderful Life." It sounds like bells are ringing all over Heaven and earth for your Beloved one and only son Jay. From the sound of things he really did live a wonderful life! May GOD continue to Bless and Keep You and make His Face to Smile upon both You and Yours. Eloquently written. Beautifully expressed. WELL DONE!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019

thank you Brenda for this beautiful review it was very touching especially when you put in the quotation on the Capra movie It's a Wonderful Life I haven't released this yet in spin here for about three weeks because not only is a touching to me but I used it as a tool to educate people that aren't just writers here but people who are interested in dating me and I think they're more interested in my money of course and some twice their age.
Ricky

reply by Brenda Henderson on 01-Aug-2019

You're very welcome!

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

Interesting overtones in every stanza here. I spied some different doctrines about heaven or the afterlife and could not say for sure what your background was, but the spiritual reunion that is described certainly resonates with anyone who has lost a loved one. "Rainbow-white clouds" is an interesting idea, as if rainbows ought to be included everywhere even when clouds are white in sunny weather. I am all for that, too. I think I would change the punctuation in the last line from "For Time is now wasting?" to "For Time is now wasting..." in order to suggest that there is more to come.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019

Thanks I'm glad you enjoy this my thoughts on heaven or partial gift partially through tragedy and loss of a song and then it's committed suicide a month later of a wife they say that God will not accept suicide victim my wife stopped her medications and died from a second heart attack after I brought her back from the first so I tend to disagree on that theory it's probably cathartic to a Catholic Church I believe God will forgive every being if he's true and honest right down to the rapist to the suicidals continue to read there will be more coming I'm getting great feedback as to continue it as a book and I do have a Mensa material especially when it comes to Jason and his life.
Rick

reply by CrystieCookie999 on 18-Jul-2019

Wow. Yes, suicide is difficult to deal with. The last book I read was by a leader of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints named Elder M. Russell Ballard, who wrote a little book called "Suicide: Some Things We Know, and Some We Do Not." I lean toward your feelings, exactly.

Comment from Janetsue

Excellent

It is easy to tell that your heart went into this writing. Losing a child has to be one of life's darkest moments. I encourage you to continue writing for several reasons: it is cathartic, it is productive, and you will have something to hold in your hands expressing your love so beautifully.

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 Comment Written 18-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019

As a living donor myself wanting to donate a kidney and as a past and still living donor my son safe for lives his actual death listed in New Jersey March 31st 2003 what in heaven April Fool's Day April 1st and not until the very last heart and lungs were taken out the machine turned off did he pass anisole rise I don't add those things all the time into my editor's notes cuz they're a little hard for people to understand but I simply if I explained he wasn't organ tissue donor I State these words to learn more about organ tissue donation simply contact my dear friend Larry s moretti the LSW The Gift of Life Philadelphia Pennsylvania app 1 800 donors one and thanks from the bottom of my broken and my son Jason's donated heart he will be visiting all four of his reciprocals even though one only lived eight years of course angels can do many different things.
Rick

reply by Janetsue on 18-Jul-2019

You are so right, Rick. Angels are lights of goodness, and you have touched readers deeply with this posting about your son and the living donor situation. Big hugs, Spangle

reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019

Thanks and right back at you.
Ricky

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A very well composed spiritual poem and yes, I do think you could expand this into a book. I have reviewed a lot of your work and think you have plenty of material for one.

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 Comment Written 18-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019

Thanks I honor your request look for the future book within the next three days and of course it will amaze every person on this site still preaching the choir here at fanstory.
Rick