Sea Breeze
essence poem42 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I was happy to find a post that I had missed after digging into your attic. I admired your Essence Poem with its internal rhyme and could visualize the tree even without the parallel artwork. Have a peaceful, Easter weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I was happy to find a post that I had missed after digging into your attic. I admired your Essence Poem with its internal rhyme and could visualize the tree even without the parallel artwork. Have a peaceful, Easter weekend- Joan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thanks. You must have done some digging to find this one. Glad you liked it. Happy Easter to you, too.
Comment from lyenochka
This is an excellent essence poem and I am not familiar with the form but I liked the contrast of cold sea breeze with the tea tree. The first thought comes to mind is the warm tea drink. However, the tea plant that produces the drinking tea needs a temperate climate. (I'm such a literalist. Lol.) But it could be the melaleuca kind of tea tree which are real trees.
What I really like is the sound of the assonance and the internal rhymes. You managed to rhyme both lines word for word except for the second syllable of the six syllable line. Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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This is an excellent essence poem and I am not familiar with the form but I liked the contrast of cold sea breeze with the tea tree. The first thought comes to mind is the warm tea drink. However, the tea plant that produces the drinking tea needs a temperate climate. (I'm such a literalist. Lol.) But it could be the melaleuca kind of tea tree which are real trees.
What I really like is the sound of the assonance and the internal rhymes. You managed to rhyme both lines word for word except for the second syllable of the six syllable line. Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks. I really have no idea what or where that beautiful tree that is. I just thought the picture was perfect. There is a tea tree that grows in Austrailia. My Aussie friends tell me it's pretty cold there right now. These little poems must have internal and end rhymes, and they're tougher than they look.
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It looks plenty tough to write. You did great!
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh, this is a very nice Essence poem. I've not written one of this form, but I like yours. Having lived near the sea, it DOES seem like there is one lone tree growing out of the crags near the salty sea. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Oh, this is a very nice Essence poem. I've not written one of this form, but I like yours. Having lived near the sea, it DOES seem like there is one lone tree growing out of the crags near the salty sea. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thanks. The essence poem is harder than it looks. Glad you liked this one. The contest is over. Too bad it didn't win.
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I think the short ones are quite a challenge, Cindy.
Comment from LisaMay
The essence poetry form looks to be quite a difficult one, to fit some sense within such requirements concerning rhyme, but you have done it well. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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The essence poetry form looks to be quite a difficult one, to fit some sense within such requirements concerning rhyme, but you have done it well. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks. Yes, these little poems are harder than they look. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Now this is a poetic poem! Your structure and syllable count is spot in, but you also creatively provide a beautiful image as well! I can feel the chill and see the lone tree swaying with the breeze! :)
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Now this is a poetic poem! Your structure and syllable count is spot in, but you also creatively provide a beautiful image as well! I can feel the chill and see the lone tree swaying with the breeze! :)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks. I'm so glad you liked my little poem.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. This is an excellent example of essence poetry. I liked the picture with the poem but the poem carried the work. The poem read very smoothly to my ear. Nice work.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Hello mystery writer. This is an excellent example of essence poetry. I liked the picture with the poem but the poem carried the work. The poem read very smoothly to my ear. Nice work.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed.
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You're welcome.
Comment from celtic52
Good show. Image fits the topic too. Had to look up what a tea tree looks like and discovered they are located in Australia. Also read about the Coriolis effect there. Perchance you may reside there? This is a challenging format and you rose to the occassion!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Good show. Image fits the topic too. Had to look up what a tea tree looks like and discovered they are located in Australia. Also read about the Coriolis effect there. Perchance you may reside there? This is a challenging format and you rose to the occassion!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks! I'm so glad you found my little poem worthy of a six. In reality I have no idea what or where that lovely tree is. I found the picture on FanArt. Luck was on my side.
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You are welcome! I search FanArt too.
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you are welcome!
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you are welcome!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon - a well written essence poem in true form. Well worded and it reads without sounding contrived. Perfect picture. Not an easy form to write and you have done a good job. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Hello anon - a well written essence poem in true form. Well worded and it reads without sounding contrived. Perfect picture. Not an easy form to write and you have done a good job. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks. It's true these little poems are tougher than they look. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Bichon
A lovely entry into the essence contest. Your poem has an internally calm feeling within it and made for a short, but very sweet read. Best of luck with the contest
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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A lovely entry into the essence contest. Your poem has an internally calm feeling within it and made for a short, but very sweet read. Best of luck with the contest
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the stars and the good wishes.
Comment from Lobber
Hi there,
You've presented a very effective combination of poetry and visual. I like the lonely, old "tea tree" that rests near the sea. For me, based on "cold breeze" I would choose a different background color. While your "lime green" suggests "green tea" I would push for a "frigid blue" - Lobber
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Hi there,
You've presented a very effective combination of poetry and visual. I like the lonely, old "tea tree" that rests near the sea. For me, based on "cold breeze" I would choose a different background color. While your "lime green" suggests "green tea" I would push for a "frigid blue" - Lobber
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks. I'll take another look at the colors.
