Comment from Maria Millsaps

Excellent

I like your craftsmanship in this poem. It speaks loud and clear of broken romance and how scattering and shattering it can be. Thanks for sharing. Nice.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019

Thanks for the review, it was a fun write. Cheers.

Comment from Sheridan1

Excellent

This poem works well on it's own.
I'm not sure it follows the directions (but I may be wrong). My understanding is that the internal rhyme is to be in the same line.
That said - this is a worthwhile poem. It has a strong story with strong verbs in few words.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019

Thanks for the review. I thought that too, but the sample poem is like this. It was a fun write, cheers.

Comment from Lobber

Excellent

Ah, yes the pen IS mightier than the sword...of course it's not clear if it's his note or someone else's...but in the tight-lipped heat of emotion it doesn't really matter- Lobber

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019

sigh, they were his. Thanks for the insightful review, cheers.

Comment from Lance S. Loria

Good

Two lines, six syllables, middle rhyme and ending rhyme. Check ok. First line "loves" should be "love". The middle rhymes are not in same position of each line. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019

Thanks for the review and correction Lance. It was a fun write, cheers.