Nightmare
Once inside, escape seems impossible...13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This septolet, Nightmare, has the proper formatting and gives an example of some features of those dark dreams that have us longing for awakening.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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This septolet, Nightmare, has the proper formatting and gives an example of some features of those dark dreams that have us longing for awakening.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for your review, Bill!!
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Wow, I have felt exactly like this - how heavy was this one!! I had to give you a six for it because I understand the depth of it in a way that probably very few others would want to openly understand or possibly be able to decorate you! As a mother of boys and being surrounded by men always sometimes there is no female energy to take us and give us the softness that we crave, but more than that as writers our minds go dark - they must to find the light. We have positive energy to present to the world, but we sink inside ourselves so that not to push it off on others. When you have so much on your plate this overwhelming feeling of doom and darkness can creep right in. Thank you for presenting it and also for posting it. It took a lot of bravery to do so, I am always in awe of the many facets of your brain MRW, CQ and Beautiful Teacher - Yvette you have all the ingredients - all of them. Your depth is outstanding and your perseverance is golden. Your heart is big and full and you are certainly cherished openly by me! This was phenomenal! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Wow, I have felt exactly like this - how heavy was this one!! I had to give you a six for it because I understand the depth of it in a way that probably very few others would want to openly understand or possibly be able to decorate you! As a mother of boys and being surrounded by men always sometimes there is no female energy to take us and give us the softness that we crave, but more than that as writers our minds go dark - they must to find the light. We have positive energy to present to the world, but we sink inside ourselves so that not to push it off on others. When you have so much on your plate this overwhelming feeling of doom and darkness can creep right in. Thank you for presenting it and also for posting it. It took a lot of bravery to do so, I am always in awe of the many facets of your brain MRW, CQ and Beautiful Teacher - Yvette you have all the ingredients - all of them. Your depth is outstanding and your perseverance is golden. Your heart is big and full and you are certainly cherished openly by me! This was phenomenal! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Wow -- and here I thought this one would probably not go over well because it was 'darker'! :) I 'm so glad you really got what I was trying to convey - those dark nightmares where you really just cannot seem to MOVE!! ;) ;) I'm sure it probably won't do well in the contest...the somber/non-kitschy ones usually don't ... LOL! ;) ;) But I write what the muse demands at the time (even though some folks have already kindof not like it... LOL! :) Take care, Beautiful Lady, and thank you so very much for those wonderful stars!! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Mia Twysted
I like the picture you have painted here. It matches well to the one you have chosen to accompany the piece. I can feel myself dreaming in the night trying to avoid the images that are haunting me.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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I like the picture you have painted here. It matches well to the one you have chosen to accompany the piece. I can feel myself dreaming in the night trying to avoid the images that are haunting me.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review - so glad you understood the poem...;)
Comment from Patty Palmer
Nightmares are scary! The words you chose for your poem reminds me of being lost in a pitch black fun house. I am scared of fun houses. Good job!
God bless!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Nightmares are scary! The words you chose for your poem reminds me of being lost in a pitch black fun house. I am scared of fun houses. Good job!
God bless!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review...go have fun in the house! LOL!
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You're welcome!
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Well, I guess you wanted a reviewer to be disturbed by these words, and it certainly makes someone want to gravitate toward the light, as I usually do. I shun blackness, and everything associated with it, suck as dark and unclean behavior. Tattoos and piercings, for example. Or smoking (of any kind). Or foul language. Or horror movies.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Well, I guess you wanted a reviewer to be disturbed by these words, and it certainly makes someone want to gravitate toward the light, as I usually do. I shun blackness, and everything associated with it, suck as dark and unclean behavior. Tattoos and piercings, for example. Or smoking (of any kind). Or foul language. Or horror movies.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Words were simply to describe a nightmare and nothing more. Perhaps you've never experienced one...consider yourself lucky. Thank you for your review.
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I've experienced a lot more things than most people, but it's not about experiences; it's about what we choose to focus on.
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh my - this is a darkening poem. What darkness creeps closer? A sad thing to be looking down the corridor and finding it dark. What helps is a friend to go with you. A friend to hold the lantern - like our Lord.
Good poem for the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Oh my - this is a darkening poem. What darkness creeps closer? A sad thing to be looking down the corridor and finding it dark. What helps is a friend to go with you. A friend to hold the lantern - like our Lord.
Good poem for the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you for such a wonderful review -- the fact that it had such impact means a lot!!
Comment from Janetsue
You have brought out the horror of nightmares in an excellent way with this Septolet poem. I have had them, but thankfully, not a recurring one. That situation would make a person afraid to go to sleep at night. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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You have brought out the horror of nightmares in an excellent way with this Septolet poem. I have had them, but thankfully, not a recurring one. That situation would make a person afraid to go to sleep at night. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments !!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from fm wright
A truly well written septolet. I like the picture you used, which enhances your very fine choice of words. Couldn't see anything that I would change. I wish you the best with this contest entry.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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A truly well written septolet. I like the picture you used, which enhances your very fine choice of words. Couldn't see anything that I would change. I wish you the best with this contest entry.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for such a positive review!!
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You're so very welcome! It was easy to give your poem a positive review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written septolet about the dreams that take us into darkness where there is no escape from once we are inside. No one outside can hear our silent screams that echo endlessly.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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A very well-written septolet about the dreams that take us into darkness where there is no escape from once we are inside. No one outside can hear our silent screams that echo endlessly.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review, Sandra!!
Comment from LisaMay
This is a very well described situation of terror... it is everything that is scary in our fears: something in the dark creeping closer, hard to breathe, feeling held down, and screaming... screaming... screaming. The text is well set up with its diminishing size and the graphic suits the poem well.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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This is a very well described situation of terror... it is everything that is scary in our fears: something in the dark creeping closer, hard to breathe, feeling held down, and screaming... screaming... screaming. The text is well set up with its diminishing size and the graphic suits the poem well.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the detailed review - much appreciated!!