Wee Bumblebee
A Minute Poem16 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
a quest ... quickly, quickly, take the offending letter 'a' out of ...a quest...
the rest of your poem does not show any signs of the offending letter 'a'
This is a great challenge to undertake. Wishing you luck all the way to the contest win!
Best
Sylvia
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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a quest ... quickly, quickly, take the offending letter 'a' out of ...a quest...
the rest of your poem does not show any signs of the offending letter 'a'
This is a great challenge to undertake. Wishing you luck all the way to the contest win!
Best
Sylvia
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Sylvia... I did not realize it was there til you wrote this review!! I had written it earlier ... when on his quest... but a reviewer said I had only seven syllables, so I changed it. I honestly did not see it. Thank you so much. I will change it.
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I did not count the syllables though.
not try to stop him on his quest
You had one syllable short try this
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done on the challenge of this contest. A nice poem. Best not to bother bee least he take an instant dislike and pin you with his stinger I'd say. But they do a great service, these bees.
Good poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Well done on the challenge of this contest. A nice poem. Best not to bother bee least he take an instant dislike and pin you with his stinger I'd say. But they do a great service, these bees.
Good poem.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I wish I had a six for this one. I am growing very fond of Minute's, and this one is beautiful. Love the artwork, and the title. I really like that font, though the 'h's' are a little more difficult to make out.
You used no 'A's' within this adorable poem.
This is a great contest entry, and I do wish you the very, very best.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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I wish I had a six for this one. I am growing very fond of Minute's, and this one is beautiful. Love the artwork, and the title. I really like that font, though the 'h's' are a little more difficult to make out.
You used no 'A's' within this adorable poem.
This is a great contest entry, and I do wish you the very, very best.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thanks so very much!!
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My pleasure :)
Comment from john mallahan
It becomes even more apparent in our world, that we need the bee's to survive! The winds, the birds, the shackelry. I notice all kinds of bee's in my yard--then, suddenly gone. Did the summer burn scars from Alberta send them away? Only the beekeepers can know, viruses, go...
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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It becomes even more apparent in our world, that we need the bee's to survive! The winds, the birds, the shackelry. I notice all kinds of bee's in my yard--then, suddenly gone. Did the summer burn scars from Alberta send them away? Only the beekeepers can know, viruses, go...
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
But you used the letter "a" here? So you did not fulfil the brief? However, i really enjoyed your Minute poem, well written and fun write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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But you used the letter "a" here? So you did not fulfil the brief? However, i really enjoyed your Minute poem, well written and fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Very nicely done without using the letter "A". I like the advice you give here about just letting him "Fly when he's close by." All to often people don't do that and they pay for it later.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Very nicely done without using the letter "A". I like the advice you give here about just letting him "Fly when he's close by." All to often people don't do that and they pay for it later.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you!!
Comment from Patty Palmer
You did very well with this poem without the A One wouldn't even know that you were even trying to leave out the letter A.
great job!! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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You did very well with this poem without the A One wouldn't even know that you were even trying to leave out the letter A.
great job!! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much!
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you're welcome!
Comment from Lobber
Well, you've fulfilled the contest requirements admirably aaa well as paying tribute to the wonderful wee bumblebee. I'd say it a tribute to the lost A. - Lobber
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Well, you've fulfilled the contest requirements admirably aaa well as paying tribute to the wonderful wee bumblebee. I'd say it a tribute to the lost A. - Lobber
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Haha. Thanks so much.
Comment from The Death
Hi Melissa,
I got this one from your portfolio! ;) This is a wonderful minute poem. Loved the theme. I guess the first line of the last stanza needs one more syllable. Also, it's the only line which falls off the meter. Your words have excellent imagery. Excellent use of rhyming and fine flow. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hi Melissa,
I got this one from your portfolio! ;) This is a wonderful minute poem. Loved the theme. I guess the first line of the last stanza needs one more syllable. Also, it's the only line which falls off the meter. Your words have excellent imagery. Excellent use of rhyming and fine flow. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much Anupam. It?s listed in a contest, so I cannot sign my name. I REALLY appreciate the heads up on this!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the wee bumblebee and his quest to collect nectar from every garden flower for the honey factory, without using the letter 'a'.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about the wee bumblebee and his quest to collect nectar from every garden flower for the honey factory, without using the letter 'a'.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much, Sandra.
