Tempting Treats
Hard To Resist!5 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your temptation write and unfortunately we do pay for being tempted when we reveal what it has done to our figure on a beach! But there again we can buy a bigger size, good luck with the contest, you answered the brief here with your write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
I enjoyed your temptation write and unfortunately we do pay for being tempted when we reveal what it has done to our figure on a beach! But there again we can buy a bigger size, good luck with the contest, you answered the brief here with your write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your nice review, I'm always glad to hear from you.
Comment from Six-Star Writer
I think all year should be diet time, not only summer. There are far too many obese people in the world. It's sad, but true. Not a pretty site. And because of these people's lack of discipline, it ends up costing thin taxpayers like me a lot more, given the ailments obesity causes, and the fact the government ends up having to foot the bill for medical problems that are too pricey for obese people with limited--or no--health insurance to pay for.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
I think all year should be diet time, not only summer. There are far too many obese people in the world. It's sad, but true. Not a pretty site. And because of these people's lack of discipline, it ends up costing thin taxpayers like me a lot more, given the ailments obesity causes, and the fact the government ends up having to foot the bill for medical problems that are too pricey for obese people with limited--or no--health insurance to pay for.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. It was meant to be humorous and make people smile, I'm sorry it seemed to upset you so much. Honestly, it isn't easy for many people with weight problems to lose, especially those who suffer with debilitating pain and other health issues. Unless you have experienced their struggle, you can't possibly know how hard it can be. I do understand your point of view however, your frustration. Thanks again for reading.
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I'm sorry. Maybe I don't understand. I've always been thin. I should be more sympathetic. Have a nice night.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I feel your pain. Just go for it this year, and once the Fall begins, then it will be easier to discipline yourself again. (But start right after Labor Day because before you know it, it's Halloween...then Thanksgiving...then Christmas.) I wish you luck in the Fall. For now, though, I simply wish you JOY. Dig in! xo
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
I feel your pain. Just go for it this year, and once the Fall begins, then it will be easier to discipline yourself again. (But start right after Labor Day because before you know it, it's Halloween...then Thanksgiving...then Christmas.) I wish you luck in the Fall. For now, though, I simply wish you JOY. Dig in! xo
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. It's so nice to hear from you. :)
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My pleasure! xo
Comment from kiwisteveh
Practicality wins out over pride every time! Better go through the wardrobe and chuck out all those outfits that will never fit again!
Cute and humorous piece that zooms down the page with (mostly) a snappy rhythm, short lines and strong rhyme.
"is ice cream with chocolate syrup" is never going to fit your meter. There are a couple of other places where this goes astray, which leads me to think that maybe you carried on two or three verses too many. There's a 'temp' that should be 'tempt' as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
Practicality wins out over pride every time! Better go through the wardrobe and chuck out all those outfits that will never fit again!
Cute and humorous piece that zooms down the page with (mostly) a snappy rhythm, short lines and strong rhyme.
"is ice cream with chocolate syrup" is never going to fit your meter. There are a couple of other places where this goes astray, which leads me to think that maybe you carried on two or three verses too many. There's a 'temp' that should be 'tempt' as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thank you for helping with some of my errors. I truly appreciate the help. :)
Comment from LisaMay
Terrific handling of the temptation theme! I like your descriptions of a familiar theme that many will relate to... summer slimming is such a challenge. Maybe you know that 'cottage cheese' is another way of describing what cellulite looks like? So having lots of it is not good!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
Terrific handling of the temptation theme! I like your descriptions of a familiar theme that many will relate to... summer slimming is such a challenge. Maybe you know that 'cottage cheese' is another way of describing what cellulite looks like? So having lots of it is not good!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Hahahaha...youre right! Thank you so much for reading.