God Only Does Good
Spiritual Fiction; God is Good, even when you don't feel it62 total reviews
Comment from DeboraDyess
Hi again!
FIrst of all, let me say 'amen and amen' to your work! God is above us and yet loves us each with a passion we cannot even begin to understand.
Let's look at some things that can make this more of a smooth read. Yes, you should have your own style, but when repetition and synnonyms make it harder to read instead of more interesting, you may need to reconsider the number of repetitions and synonyms used. :)
"God is good all the time, father, you say so. Why did God turn our good land into a sand land, precisely to say, a non-arable, sandy, rough or dusty land, in a few hours, overnight?" Daniel asked his father, Samuel>>Each line of dialogue needs to have its own paragraph.
we are not entitled to challenge His Deeds as He did last night. >>Low would be a bit better is you said, 'like those He did last night.'
my dear son, God has right to protect >>my dear son, God has ('a' or 'the') right to protect
Samuel told his son, Daniel. >>You've used this a couple of times. The reader is smart e enough to know that Daniel is Samuel's son. If you continually tell them, they may feel like you're belittling them.
Okay, here's my take on the repetition...People are going to skim over it. You're going to lose interest by too much. Using two or three is fine, but there are places you've used 5 or 6 synonyms in a single descriptor.
Vary your sentence length to create visual interest and make the reading easier.
I love your heart and want others to read each word. There may just be a few too many. :)
Blessings to you! Thank you for your testimony. :)
Deb
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Hi again!
FIrst of all, let me say 'amen and amen' to your work! God is above us and yet loves us each with a passion we cannot even begin to understand.
Let's look at some things that can make this more of a smooth read. Yes, you should have your own style, but when repetition and synnonyms make it harder to read instead of more interesting, you may need to reconsider the number of repetitions and synonyms used. :)
"God is good all the time, father, you say so. Why did God turn our good land into a sand land, precisely to say, a non-arable, sandy, rough or dusty land, in a few hours, overnight?" Daniel asked his father, Samuel>>Each line of dialogue needs to have its own paragraph.
we are not entitled to challenge His Deeds as He did last night. >>Low would be a bit better is you said, 'like those He did last night.'
my dear son, God has right to protect >>my dear son, God has ('a' or 'the') right to protect
Samuel told his son, Daniel. >>You've used this a couple of times. The reader is smart e enough to know that Daniel is Samuel's son. If you continually tell them, they may feel like you're belittling them.
Okay, here's my take on the repetition...People are going to skim over it. You're going to lose interest by too much. Using two or three is fine, but there are places you've used 5 or 6 synonyms in a single descriptor.
Vary your sentence length to create visual interest and make the reading easier.
I love your heart and want others to read each word. There may just be a few too many. :)
Blessings to you! Thank you for your testimony. :)
Deb
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from Ashtar Zaidi
choice of words takes my breath away. Terrific piece!, wellwritten and passionate read praiseworthy, Thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~~~Ashtar
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choice of words takes my breath away. Terrific piece!, wellwritten and passionate read praiseworthy, Thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~~~Ashtar
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from January L'Angelle
I liked this story! It's message that God is good and all powerful. I can see where people misuse God's love and the negative repercussions that happen when they do that. The story was impactful! Well done. Respectfully, - January L.
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I liked this story! It's message that God is good and all powerful. I can see where people misuse God's love and the negative repercussions that happen when they do that. The story was impactful! Well done. Respectfully, - January L.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from faith bosire
Wow, this is a great piece of work. Candid indeed
Depicts God's true nature and goes straight to the heart.
This is wonderful keep it up. I love everything
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Wow, this is a great piece of work. Candid indeed
Depicts God's true nature and goes straight to the heart.
This is wonderful keep it up. I love everything
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, God does everything you mentioned and more. I enjoyed reading your little story. You presented it well. The question/responses allow readers to understand man's relationship with God and how He is the only one with ultimate control. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
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Yes, God does everything you mentioned and more. I enjoyed reading your little story. You presented it well. The question/responses allow readers to understand man's relationship with God and how He is the only one with ultimate control. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very interesting perspective and a wonderful presentation of it through word and vision! ;) thank you for sharing with us and allowing us to think about things a bit differently! ;)
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A very interesting perspective and a wonderful presentation of it through word and vision! ;) thank you for sharing with us and allowing us to think about things a bit differently! ;)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from WryWriter
Very well expressed work. Mankind is to be a good steward of God's gifts to him and guard against doing damage to the earth and sky. What God does is always right and just.
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Very well expressed work. Mankind is to be a good steward of God's gifts to him and guard against doing damage to the earth and sky. What God does is always right and just.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Your statement is true. God only does good. The problem arises when His ways are not our ways. We don't understand why certain things happen, but it is enough to know that God has a purpose.
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Your statement is true. God only does good. The problem arises when His ways are not our ways. We don't understand why certain things happen, but it is enough to know that God has a purpose.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Alcreator, I agree with you - God only does good. Man is the one who turns good creations into bad things. We are not free to do whatever we please, we are free to do what God would like us to do with His gifts and creations. Good writing. I'd give you a six, but I don't have any. Dove
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Dear Alcreator, I agree with you - God only does good. Man is the one who turns good creations into bad things. We are not free to do whatever we please, we are free to do what God would like us to do with His gifts and creations. Good writing. I'd give you a six, but I don't have any. Dove
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Sounds like an early climate change warning from God. I enjoyed reading it. It kept my attention throughout. I have no edits or adjustments necessary.
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Sounds like an early climate change warning from God. I enjoyed reading it. It kept my attention throughout. I have no edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
