The Cure
A story of a man who took a chance7 total reviews
Comment from john mallahan
What a harrowing commentary! Love watching the commercial that touts that "are we taking something for our brain?" that amounts to, the bennies of jellyfish. Why is it the scientific community (or should I say medical community) refuses to admit that all our cures our out there! TG the medical world is now grudgingly admitting the bennies of cannabis...
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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What a harrowing commentary! Love watching the commercial that touts that "are we taking something for our brain?" that amounts to, the bennies of jellyfish. Why is it the scientific community (or should I say medical community) refuses to admit that all our cures our out there! TG the medical world is now grudgingly admitting the bennies of cannabis...
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for your review. Have a great day.
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Very nice short story. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and your imagination. I could also see this story expanded into a somewhat longer version. I realize you were limited by word count.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Very nice short story. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and your imagination. I could also see this story expanded into a somewhat longer version. I realize you were limited by word count.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much Sandra for your kind review. Glad you liked it. Have a great day. Brian
Comment from Patty Palmer
Very good! You caught my interest from the beginning. It was a well thought out story. And a great amount of imagination! Good luck!
Wouldn't it be wonderful if your idea of the jellyfish really worked? Anyone for a boat trip???
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Very good! You caught my interest from the beginning. It was a well thought out story. And a great amount of imagination! Good luck!
Wouldn't it be wonderful if your idea of the jellyfish really worked? Anyone for a boat trip???
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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I think a lot of cures are in the ocean. Thank you for your review. Have a great day.
Comment from nor84
you might want to recheck the contest announcement. I believe the contest has a maximum word count of 800 words but when I ran this piece through Microsoft Word, it counted 906 words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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you might want to recheck the contest announcement. I believe the contest has a maximum word count of 800 words but when I ran this piece through Microsoft Word, it counted 906 words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Is it average because of the word count?
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Thank you for your review and noticing the word count.
Comment from beizanten
The story is too pack. You should made smaller paragraphs and make space between the paragraph. Other than that beautiful picture and pretty good and engaging story
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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The story is too pack. You should made smaller paragraphs and make space between the paragraph. Other than that beautiful picture and pretty good and engaging story
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank You beizanten for your kind review and advice. Much appreciate, Brian
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
it may be an idea to incorporate some line breaks into your work. Leaving clear lines between paragraphs can make for a cleaner write which is more easily followed on screen. Also many folk skip over blocks of unbroken text.
A rather fantastical tale here.
A few notes I made as I was reading through-
when I herd the voice of God. - heard.
from a dermatologists appointment - need an apostrophe in here.
he came rite out with it. - right.
about a $20.000 shopping spree - $20,000.
for skin cancer, It exists in the ocean- it.
Good little write.
GMG
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hi there,
it may be an idea to incorporate some line breaks into your work. Leaving clear lines between paragraphs can make for a cleaner write which is more easily followed on screen. Also many folk skip over blocks of unbroken text.
A rather fantastical tale here.
A few notes I made as I was reading through-
when I herd the voice of God. - heard.
from a dermatologists appointment - need an apostrophe in here.
he came rite out with it. - right.
about a $20.000 shopping spree - $20,000.
for skin cancer, It exists in the ocean- it.
Good little write.
GMG
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank You so much for your thoughtful and detailed review. Much appreciated
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Wow! Excellent story. If there was ever a story that should be a novel and a screenplay this is it. Talk about a big screen blockbuster this is it. I can see Mathew Macconauhey in the lead if not Ryan Reynolds. If this is in fact a true story you probably won't wish to pursue it but if not let me know when to get my popcorn. I would definitely want to see this film. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Wow! Excellent story. If there was ever a story that should be a novel and a screenplay this is it. Talk about a big screen blockbuster this is it. I can see Mathew Macconauhey in the lead if not Ryan Reynolds. If this is in fact a true story you probably won't wish to pursue it but if not let me know when to get my popcorn. I would definitely want to see this film. Great job!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much Brenda for your kind review. It gave me an incredible feeling. God less you. Brian
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You're very welcome!
