Our St. Petersburg Vacation
At The Beach Story contest entry17 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Dragon,
Quite a snarky, er sharky tale. LOL. Now if you hadn't purchased that dollar necklace who knows what the outcome would have been? I suppose your next gig is riding Brahma bulls at the rodeo but maybe you can do it from underneath.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Dear Dragon,
Quite a snarky, er sharky tale. LOL. Now if you hadn't purchased that dollar necklace who knows what the outcome would have been? I suppose your next gig is riding Brahma bulls at the rodeo but maybe you can do it from underneath.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Lol. Thank you for the great review, Winslow. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Have a great day, friend.
Ron
Comment from LyndaS
HAHAHA!!!! Wow, Ron, this was excellent. Very well written. I followed right along with every word. VERY visual and a great story. I think action is difficult to write but you made it look effortless. I loved after someone yells "shark" that you're thinking...great, now my beer's going to get warm. LOL! The back story of the necklace is also priceless. All in all a terrific write. I have no fixes for you at all. Good stuff, my man. Lynda
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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HAHAHA!!!! Wow, Ron, this was excellent. Very well written. I followed right along with every word. VERY visual and a great story. I think action is difficult to write but you made it look effortless. I loved after someone yells "shark" that you're thinking...great, now my beer's going to get warm. LOL! The back story of the necklace is also priceless. All in all a terrific write. I have no fixes for you at all. Good stuff, my man. Lynda
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant six, Lynda. Yeah, couldn't bear to have his beer get cold. Lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Have a great day.
Ron
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Oh, I plan on it.
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Great, I am glad to hear it.
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Glad? Ha! Glad will be a sad runner up. And get that smile off your face, boy.
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Hehehe
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HA HA! Alright. I gotta get busy. Things to do. Men to tease. You know...
Comment from LisaMay
And now I am exhausted. What a heroic response to rescue your daughter. Life without her daddy might have caused some distress but you were intent on recovering cheap shit. Meanwhile she was back at the beach, trampled to death stomped into the sand and suffocated by the hordes. Her boyfriend lived and was so upset he attached himself to your family for the rest of his life.
My baby way soakin' in the rays, (should 'way' be something else such as 'was' or 'lay' ?)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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And now I am exhausted. What a heroic response to rescue your daughter. Life without her daddy might have caused some distress but you were intent on recovering cheap shit. Meanwhile she was back at the beach, trampled to death stomped into the sand and suffocated by the hordes. Her boyfriend lived and was so upset he attached himself to your family for the rest of his life.
My baby way soakin' in the rays, (should 'way' be something else such as 'was' or 'lay' ?)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the great review and for throwing the contest, Lisa. I had a blast with it. I went and fixed the goof you found. Thank you for that too. Yeah, I wanted to go a different route than I know most folks are going to in this contest, so I had to go way over the top with it. Lol. I appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this silliness. have a great day.
Ron
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, no one will accuse you of a lack of imagination. I can't wait for the sequel--involving snakes on a plane. Who do you pick to portray you, Bruce Willis, or Samuel L. Jackson?
By the way, what ever happened to the dip-shit?
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Well, no one will accuse you of a lack of imagination. I can't wait for the sequel--involving snakes on a plane. Who do you pick to portray you, Bruce Willis, or Samuel L. Jackson?
By the way, what ever happened to the dip-shit?
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Lol. Either one of them, they're both about as old as I am. Haha. The dip made it to shore and managed to squeeze in some awesome sex with the daughter before dad got back. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars, Lee. Thank you, friend. Have a good one.
Ron
Comment from ShyWri
Hahahahahahah! You wish. Maybe you watched Jaws (and sequels) twenty times too many (like all the rest of America.) This is a great piece of fantasy writing. PS The Atlantic beaches need a man like you right now. Thanks for the story. PPS I love the bit about the necklace; that's what makes this five star writing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hahahahahahah! You wish. Maybe you watched Jaws (and sequels) twenty times too many (like all the rest of America.) This is a great piece of fantasy writing. PS The Atlantic beaches need a man like you right now. Thanks for the story. PPS I love the bit about the necklace; that's what makes this five star writing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Shy W. Yeah, I had to come up with the most ridiculous thing I could think of for him to need to need to be hanging onto this shark like this. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars, SW. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. Have a great day.
Ron
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You're welcome.
Comment from Poetic Friend
It's amazing that the main character is thinking about a beer and dollar store necklace in situation as a potential shark attack. I must admit, you brought humor to such a potential tragedy.
I like your approach that you took towards the contest. Most people probably would write the beauty of sand, water, and atmosphere.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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It's amazing that the main character is thinking about a beer and dollar store necklace in situation as a potential shark attack. I must admit, you brought humor to such a potential tragedy.
I like your approach that you took towards the contest. Most people probably would write the beauty of sand, water, and atmosphere.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Poetic Friend. Yeah, I knew most the entries were going to be as you described, so I had to come up with something far-fetched. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great day.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Well, I can certainly understand why he'd not retreat until he had that one-of-a-kind treasure back in his possession! I mean, those Dollar Store baubles are SPECIAL! What an exciting adventure! Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Well, I can certainly understand why he'd not retreat until he had that one-of-a-kind treasure back in his possession! I mean, those Dollar Store baubles are SPECIAL! What an exciting adventure! Good luck in the contest.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Lol. Yeah, he had to be sure to get that back. Thank you for the great review, Rachelle. I really appreciate the stars. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Have a great rest of your weekend.
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Silliness is my favorite part of any day. Thank you for your contribution to that! xo
