The Golden Dragon
Story/Poem for a contest14 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
I have got to give you a more than deserved six star review friend. Your story telling is ability is showcased in this well written, nicely rhymed story in poem. The visuals offered up to the minds eye are bloody awesome and action packed. Very impressive!
I do have one tiny suggestion.
She dives into a somersault
with only little sound. 'only' seams out of place here, how about 'very' instead.
Like I said it is a mere suggestion and in no way takes anything away from your refined write!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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I have got to give you a more than deserved six star review friend. Your story telling is ability is showcased in this well written, nicely rhymed story in poem. The visuals offered up to the minds eye are bloody awesome and action packed. Very impressive!
I do have one tiny suggestion.
She dives into a somersault
with only little sound. 'only' seams out of place here, how about 'very' instead.
Like I said it is a mere suggestion and in no way takes anything away from your refined write!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and giant sixer, Hither. Yeah, I wasn't too impressed with 'only' there either. I went and changed it. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind words, friend. Have a great day. Thank you again.
Comment from LisaMay
Well, we certainly got a story AND a poem. I really enjoyed how this played out in it's stealth and action. All very murderous but THOU SHALT NOT STEAL gets punished big time in this story. And I do like that it is a woman with the leading role.
Spelling correction:
assurring(assuring) he'd die slow.
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Well, we certainly got a story AND a poem. I really enjoyed how this played out in it's stealth and action. All very murderous but THOU SHALT NOT STEAL gets punished big time in this story. And I do like that it is a woman with the leading role.
Spelling correction:
assurring(assuring) he'd die slow.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review and for finding the misspelling, Lisa. I'll go fix that now. Not sure why the spell correct didn't catch it. The picture was what inspired this piece, so I made her Daddy's little murderer. Lol. I'm glad you liked the piece, Lisa. Have a great day.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An epic write filled with great rhymes and descriptions and the story is alive and kicking here, much enjoyed and deserves a six, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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An epic write filled with great rhymes and descriptions and the story is alive and kicking here, much enjoyed and deserves a six, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the excellent review and gig sixer, Dolly. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this lengthy piece. Have a wonderful day. Thank you again.
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Well deserved, love Dolly x
Comment from Karen Luciana
Hello,
This poem is an excellent piece of writing. The rhyme and rhythm are extremely well-done. I find the story that goes along with the prose to be quite interesting. Keep writing and posting. You have talent, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Hello,
This poem is an excellent piece of writing. The rhyme and rhythm are extremely well-done. I find the story that goes along with the prose to be quite interesting. Keep writing and posting. You have talent, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and the giant sixer, Karen. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked this lengthy piece. Have a great day. Thank you again.
