You're Hurting My Feelings
I creep and I crawl that hard yard16 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This tells the story of life sucks a young snail, something hurting, none gives time, care and appreciates its life in the garden; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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This tells the story of life sucks a young snail, something hurting, none gives time, care and appreciates its life in the garden; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I never thought i would ever be writing a poem about a snail!! Thanks for your review.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
Well, I had no idea! All those great big feelings in that tiny little body!! This is the first entry I have seen for this contest, but it is a cute one. Good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Dear Mystery Poet,
Well, I had no idea! All those great big feelings in that tiny little body!! This is the first entry I have seen for this contest, but it is a cute one. Good luck!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Robyn. I had no idea I was going to write about a snail, but it just crawled into my mind and started talking to me. Do you think I need a shrink???
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay, the 'serious' stance that you take from the beginning had me 'off' a bit, but then, as moved through your offering, I had to start chuckling to myself... such a great job! :) :) This has got to do well at the polls as it is GREAT!! ;) :)......lettuce pray.... LOL! Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Okay, the 'serious' stance that you take from the beginning had me 'off' a bit, but then, as moved through your offering, I had to start chuckling to myself... such a great job! :) :) This has got to do well at the polls as it is GREAT!! ;) :)......lettuce pray.... LOL! Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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That lettuce has nibbles taken out of it by now. Praying did it no good. I'm glad you persevered with it and got some humour out of the poem. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Mystery Writer: I wasn't too sure when I saw the picture, but I have to say this was a really entertaining piece. The narrative from the snail's perspective was quite good. I led many lines but this one is great: "My trail I'll have to crawl alone." I'm sorry if inappropriate but I laughed out loud when I read that. My problem is I was never sympathetic to the plight of the lowly snail. Great Job -Robert-
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Hi Mystery Writer: I wasn't too sure when I saw the picture, but I have to say this was a really entertaining piece. The narrative from the snail's perspective was quite good. I led many lines but this one is great: "My trail I'll have to crawl alone." I'm sorry if inappropriate but I laughed out loud when I read that. My problem is I was never sympathetic to the plight of the lowly snail. Great Job -Robert-
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Hi Robert, I like to champion the underdog ...umm.... undersnail. So, you did a snail trail snigger... you won't be the first or last i imagine. Hahaha.
I'm pleased you enjoyed it and thanks for reviewing.
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You bet. I loved it!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Snails, there must be a reason why we eat them? He he he, I loved your plea here from the humble snail minding its own business in our gardens chomping through all our flowers! Of course he has feelings too! A wonderful endearing write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Snails, there must be a reason why we eat them? He he he, I loved your plea here from the humble snail minding its own business in our gardens chomping through all our flowers! Of course he has feelings too! A wonderful endearing write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I'm pleased you liked this one, Dolly. I never thought I would be championing a snail! Poetry takes us to some strange places.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a funny poem and I loved the play on words. I think it was very clever the way you used the appearance and characteristics of the snail in your poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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This is a funny poem and I loved the play on words. I think it was very clever the way you used the appearance and characteristics of the snail in your poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I am pleased you found this amusing. I never thought I'd be writing a poem about a snail! Thank you for your good wishes.
