I Didn't Know
A rock ballad for either a male or a female lead...34 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Yvette: First of all...this has to be a country song. I believe that because of the vernacular you used in the lyrics. (wond'rin', shoulda, ev'ry, it'd, room'd) In the south, contractions are king. For example, I might ask my buddy: j'eat yet? He would respond no d'you. I like d the departure and versatility. Great job. -robert-
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Hey Yvette: First of all...this has to be a country song. I believe that because of the vernacular you used in the lyrics. (wond'rin', shoulda, ev'ry, it'd, room'd) In the south, contractions are king. For example, I might ask my buddy: j'eat yet? He would respond no d'you. I like d the departure and versatility. Great job. -robert-
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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You can make it whatever genre you like, sir -- there's lots of the vernacular in rock as well...sometimes so much it makes the words difficult to understand. :) :) Thanx so much for dropping in on this one, Robert -- much appreciated! ;) ;) Songs are always a fun one for me as I can 'hear' the music (and the voice!) in my head... take care! ;) ;) Yvette :)
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You're right about rock and you're welcome for the review.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Excellent write, Yvette. I'm glad to see you came up with a song rather than just a poem like many did here. Also loved how you added "Repeat chorus" because to me, that's how most songs end, with a final chorus. The pic goes great with it too, and of course the font color changes. I wish you luck in the booth, Y. Have a great day.
Ron
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Excellent write, Yvette. I'm glad to see you came up with a song rather than just a poem like many did here. Also loved how you added "Repeat chorus" because to me, that's how most songs end, with a final chorus. The pic goes great with it too, and of course the font color changes. I wish you luck in the booth, Y. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping in on this one, Joan -- much appreciated! ;) ;) And I'm so glad you seem to have read a few others and liked this one -- makes me feel a little less apprehensive! ;) ;) Songs are always a fun one for me as I can 'hear' the music (and the voice!) in my head... take care! ;) ;) Yvette :)
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That would be 'Ron.' Lol.
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the contest Yvette. This was very enjoyable to read or perhaps I should say hum to as I read. It was well structured and the subtle changes were well placed. I do agree that there should be a guitar solo where indicated, it was definitely bring the whole thing together, again good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Good luck in the contest Yvette. This was very enjoyable to read or perhaps I should say hum to as I read. It was well structured and the subtle changes were well placed. I do agree that there should be a guitar solo where indicated, it was definitely bring the whole thing together, again good luck.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping in on this one, Ali -- much appreciated! ;) ;) Songs are always a fun one for me as I can 'hear' the music (and the voice!) in my head... take care! ;) ;) Yvette :)
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You are so welcome Yvette, glad to know I am not the only one who can do that. (smile)
Comment from susand3022
Hello Lady S! This is awesome! You think I can write poems? You can write SONGS!!!! I can't do that!!! I love the way you took the chorus so that it doesn't repeat exactly, that was cool... Way cool Lady S... Way cool... :) :) :)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Hello Lady S! This is awesome! You think I can write poems? You can write SONGS!!!! I can't do that!!! I love the way you took the chorus so that it doesn't repeat exactly, that was cool... Way cool Lady S... Way cool... :) :) :)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Hey, gotta know: is the 'S' for South? :) ;) Don't mind the blonde with her dumb questions first thing in the morning -- just curious! ;) ;) Yes, don't tell anybody... songwriting was my first love back when I was a teen! :) But, you know, that certainly doesn't pay as much as Physics and I was way too smart to be a writer! (this my dad beat me over the head with...not physically, of course!! LOL!) But I'm glad you enjoyed it...I think it's why my brain tends to try to find the 'melody' to poems as I read or write them... :) ;) Thanx and take care up there, Lady Susan!! ;) ;) Yvette
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South, Sunshine, Smart, Scientific, Splendid, Stunning, even Supercalifragilisticexpealicocious! Hell, I'm even going to give you Sharpe... and that's My middle name... ;) S can stand for many things... even Songwriter! :)
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Wow! :) I need to put you on speed dial for halfway through the school year when all teachers who actually expect their students to perform become stupid and.... well, it's best to just stay happy and smiling today and not think about those dark times to come...LOL! :) ;) Take care! :)
Comment from Colin John
Hi Yvette , a lovely lyrical poem and lovely words to boot,
Good luck in the contest . On this eye phone the verse is or seems eratic in its line set up. Is that intensional or just this way on this phone I wonder. Kind regards Colin x
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Hi Yvette , a lovely lyrical poem and lovely words to boot,
Good luck in the contest . On this eye phone the verse is or seems eratic in its line set up. Is that intensional or just this way on this phone I wonder. Kind regards Colin x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thanx for the review, Colin -- not erratic, just the phone adjusting to so much on the screen... :) :) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"I Didn't Know", is an extremely well-written and more than a little erotic piece . This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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"I Didn't Know", is an extremely well-written and more than a little erotic piece . This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thank you so very much for your review, Duchess -- I do hope it doesn't get ridiculously cold down there! :) ;) Take care and stay warm! ;) Yvetet
Comment from JudyE
This would make a great rocking song. Maybe you can find a group willing to add a catchy tune to it. The lyrics are really worthy of putting to music.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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This would make a great rocking song. Maybe you can find a group willing to add a catchy tune to it. The lyrics are really worthy of putting to music.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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LOL! :) Thanx for the vote of confidence, Lady Judy -- songwriting is my 'secret love', but I really don't know anyone in the music biz... :) ;) Take care!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I like the way this ballad ends on a positive note. After stanza 3 "I didn't know it'd hurt to walk away," I wondered. But then the narrator chose to stay and remind the lover every day why he or she loved the other.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I like the way this ballad ends on a positive note. After stanza 3 "I didn't know it'd hurt to walk away," I wondered. But then the narrator chose to stay and remind the lover every day why he or she loved the other.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanx so much for taking the time to really read and review this one, Darlene -- so very much appreciated!! ;) ;) Take care! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written lyrical poem. It seems to me the only one who follows the format instructions of the prescribed format. When we first meet someone we never know where the relationship may go.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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A very well-written lyrical poem. It seems to me the only one who follows the format instructions of the prescribed format. When we first meet someone we never know where the relationship may go.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, Sandra -- I'm glad you think it 'works' as I wouldn't want to have to re-do anything...you know, you get something in your head with music and changing it wouldn't fit..LOL! ;) :) Take care over there! ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you're venturing into new areas and into songwriting now. (Perhaps you already were.) I can imagine this being part of a rock opera and this is just part of it. Lots of pathos here as the singer expresses the importance of meeting the beloved one.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I like how you're venturing into new areas and into songwriting now. (Perhaps you already were.) I can imagine this being part of a rock opera and this is just part of it. Lots of pathos here as the singer expresses the importance of meeting the beloved one.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Shhhhh....songwriting is my secret love..even much of my poetry I 'sing' in my head. :) ;) Of course a song is only as good as the band and the front man/woman - the voice makes or breaks it! ;) ;) Thanx for the review, Helen, and have a great week, ma'am! ;) :) Yvette
