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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Wing-Less Honey Bee and the "A Book of Horror and Honor.
6 total reviews
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Ricky, I felt so sorry for the wing-less honey bee, her disability, and I was stunned when she looked into the blue waters and prayed for a friend like herself, but then she froze to death as Winter came on, yet finally a miracle happened and she found someone "to be with the rest of her life." Dove
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Dear Ricky, I felt so sorry for the wing-less honey bee, her disability, and I was stunned when she looked into the blue waters and prayed for a friend like herself, but then she froze to death as Winter came on, yet finally a miracle happened and she found someone "to be with the rest of her life." Dove
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Glad you did so much enjoy this as I so much and joy not only writing it and having to pass away but coming back to life the title The wingless honey bee and the Firefly was intentional but the thought of a firefly rescuing a soon-to-be-dead insect with his own body heat is just a chance thing.
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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Ricky: that is an interesting story about a wingless honeybee. Moving down the page I read the line, "Bee-Leave-It or Not." I thought that was a very good line. I would replace the question mark with a period there. It seems like your are making a statement rather than asking a question. I liked the resolution of the story and overall thought it was very good. -Robert-
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Hello Ricky: that is an interesting story about a wingless honeybee. Moving down the page I read the line, "Bee-Leave-It or Not." I thought that was a very good line. I would replace the question mark with a period there. It seems like your are making a statement rather than asking a question. I liked the resolution of the story and overall thought it was very good. -Robert-
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thanks
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You're welcome!
Comment from Poetic Friend
Beautiful story, Ricky. Any child or adult could enjoy this story. I did, particularly the ending.
I think you are missing a word in your title. Based upon your story contents, I believe the word is "Firefly". Please revisit your title.
Thank you for sharing your story, Ricky.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Beautiful story, Ricky. Any child or adult could enjoy this story. I did, particularly the ending.
I think you are missing a word in your title. Based upon your story contents, I believe the word is "Firefly". Please revisit your title.
Thank you for sharing your story, Ricky.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Yes
I write one that amazes occasionally.
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful Spring and new-life write just in time for the sunny season!! :) ;) The idea of the wingless bee is as intriguing as it beautiful! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) ;)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Such a wonderful Spring and new-life write just in time for the sunny season!! :) ;) The idea of the wingless bee is as intriguing as it beautiful! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) ;)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Glad your still got yours dear.
Now go get the Honey...
Honey!
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Awww ... what a delightfully sweet story! I was a little sad when she froze BUT you restored my faith in happy endings by alluding to her ultimate resurrection. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Awww ... what a delightfully sweet story! I was a little sad when she froze BUT you restored my faith in happy endings by alluding to her ultimate resurrection. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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It's Sweet but not as Sweet as you Angel.
Angel Ricky
Comment from WryWriter
I think this story has captured the mind in what is a very good and original love story. I have suggestions that I would like to offer. The beginning starting with "Once Upon a Time... And in a place far away..." could be changed as this has been used numerous times in children's stories. I would begin with something more original. Also, I wouldn't have the bee die, just maybe near death as children readers who may have lost a family member would wonder why their family member couldn't come back to life like the bee. Depending on the age of the reader, death of a main character could be quite an intense experience, especially for the very young reader. I also think this story would do very well as a book--have the two lovers go on adventures together. I really enjoyed reading this original short story and would like to see it continue.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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I think this story has captured the mind in what is a very good and original love story. I have suggestions that I would like to offer. The beginning starting with "Once Upon a Time... And in a place far away..." could be changed as this has been used numerous times in children's stories. I would begin with something more original. Also, I wouldn't have the bee die, just maybe near death as children readers who may have lost a family member would wonder why their family member couldn't come back to life like the bee. Depending on the age of the reader, death of a main character could be quite an intense experience, especially for the very young reader. I also think this story would do very well as a book--have the two lovers go on adventures together. I really enjoyed reading this original short story and would like to see it continue.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Why thanks for your time and comments but you don't touch something that can sting!
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LOL!
