Best Birthday Barbecue EVER
Anna throws me a barbecue with A-list guests50 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. You did a great job describing the setting and the guests that were invited. I could picture each one. I really love that the most important one was last--your Grandpa. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. You did a great job describing the setting and the guests that were invited. I could picture each one. I really love that the most important one was last--your Grandpa. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you Jan. This is was a fun write, i'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Really liked this story. It creates a magical mood without being far fetched. Love the people you picked out. Great pacing and flow; once Daniel showed up I could hardly wait to see who else was coming. I think it was great that your last and greatest hero was your grandpa. Excellent. Hugh
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Really liked this story. It creates a magical mood without being far fetched. Love the people you picked out. Great pacing and flow; once Daniel showed up I could hardly wait to see who else was coming. I think it was great that your last and greatest hero was your grandpa. Excellent. Hugh
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Hugh, i appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
These are people I wouldn't mind meeting myself. I love the Duke. My sister worked near the bank he used and he'd sometimes come at noon when she was in the court yard having lunch. Funny to think he did his own banking, just like a regular person. =} This was a fun read. Hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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These are people I wouldn't mind meeting myself. I love the Duke. My sister worked near the bank he used and he'd sometimes come at noon when she was in the court yard having lunch. Funny to think he did his own banking, just like a regular person. =} This was a fun read. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much. It was a fun write, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from tfawcus
There's no doubting that this is a creative approach to the challenge. Although your friend picked the guest list, you do show why the guests are important to you. I think you're in for a lively conversation in the relaxed circumstances of a backyard BBQ.
Just a couple of spags you may wish to look at before the contest closing date:
Settle down you're acting like a kid the night before Christmas. [needs further punctuation]
This was cool even if it was reenact or. [something missing here]
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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There's no doubting that this is a creative approach to the challenge. Although your friend picked the guest list, you do show why the guests are important to you. I think you're in for a lively conversation in the relaxed circumstances of a backyard BBQ.
Just a couple of spags you may wish to look at before the contest closing date:
Settle down you're acting like a kid the night before Christmas. [needs further punctuation]
This was cool even if it was reenact or. [something missing here]
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the two editing tips. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from doggymad1
Congratulations, you have worked wonders with this prompt. The simpler the title that harder it is to make it your own.
I thoroughly enjoyed it and wish you every luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Congratulations, you have worked wonders with this prompt. The simpler the title that harder it is to make it your own.
I thoroughly enjoyed it and wish you every luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Freda. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Rikki66
A well-conceived guest list for the grilling of a lifetime. there at the beginning, it sounds like a drunk Boone bringing mash and the Duke bringing bourbon. But, then comes grandpa to make it all right.
Rikki:)
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A well-conceived guest list for the grilling of a lifetime. there at the beginning, it sounds like a drunk Boone bringing mash and the Duke bringing bourbon. But, then comes grandpa to make it all right.
Rikki:)
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Yeah it might have got wild as we consumed moonshine and bourbon. This was a fun write, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Most welcome.
Rikki:)
Comment from Artasylum
Great Job! great, good luck in this contest, It kept me interested and I kept reading to get to the next conversation... thanks so much and looking forward. yours, fi
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Great Job! great, good luck in this contest, It kept me interested and I kept reading to get to the next conversation... thanks so much and looking forward. yours, fi
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Fi. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from JLR
You have selected iconic treasures from the past and with respect to all the Egoic persona you had on your wish list of attendees was, in fact, Grandpa. The one person, everyone wishes at some time in their life they had spent much more time with. Very good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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You have selected iconic treasures from the past and with respect to all the Egoic persona you had on your wish list of attendees was, in fact, Grandpa. The one person, everyone wishes at some time in their life they had spent much more time with. Very good luck.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello there Contestant,
May I come to dinner? I love barbecues and I love the company from the past. I am sure Grandpa was the best. Who brought the moonshine? Was it, Daniel Boone? It must have been a great party as I see it from the picture perfect scene you painted. Well done!
Best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Hello there Contestant,
May I come to dinner? I love barbecues and I love the company from the past. I am sure Grandpa was the best. Who brought the moonshine? Was it, Daniel Boone? It must have been a great party as I see it from the picture perfect scene you painted. Well done!
Best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Sure come on over and bring your appetite. Boone brought the moonshine. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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My pleasure
Comment from Wetbelly01
Oh man!... This was an exceptional read!
I definitely like your choices for guests!
The way you presented the story is awesome!
My compliments for a great piece of work!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Oh man!... This was an exceptional read!
I definitely like your choices for guests!
The way you presented the story is awesome!
My compliments for a great piece of work!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
