Best Birthday Barbecue EVER
Anna throws me a barbecue with A-list guests50 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Writer,
What a super write and what a great birthday party Anna threw for her husband. The ending brought tears to my eyes. If only this could be real but alas it can't, but wait a minute AI could make this a reality.
Good luck in the contest. In my opinion it should be the winner.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Dear Writer,
What a super write and what a great birthday party Anna threw for her husband. The ending brought tears to my eyes. If only this could be real but alas it can't, but wait a minute AI could make this a reality.
Good luck in the contest. In my opinion it should be the winner.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Winslow. I appreciate the six star rating and you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Debra White
Hi :)
This was such a lovely read.
It was full of warmth and Anna and Merle came over as down to earth, realistic characters. I love that the guest of honour was Merle's grandpa - a great ending to a real feel-good story.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the voting booth. Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Hi :)
This was such a lovely read.
It was full of warmth and Anna and Merle came over as down to earth, realistic characters. I love that the guest of honour was Merle's grandpa - a great ending to a real feel-good story.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the voting booth. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Debra. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Ulla
Awe, So the four best heroes of yours had been invited to your birthday party, but the biggest hero was Grandpa. How lovely was that. Good luck in the contest with a great story. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Awe, So the four best heroes of yours had been invited to your birthday party, but the biggest hero was Grandpa. How lovely was that. Good luck in the contest with a great story. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Ulla. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Scarbrems
And it was a fun read, too. Wouldn't it be amazing if you could really do this? This is a great interpretation of the contest brief. Just one note - 'Silly' doesn't need a capital 'S'. Good luck in the contest. Love your choice of guests!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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And it was a fun read, too. Wouldn't it be amazing if you could really do this? This is a great interpretation of the contest brief. Just one note - 'Silly' doesn't need a capital 'S'. Good luck in the contest. Love your choice of guests!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from annh
A fun read! I liked your eclectic selection of birthday guests, with your grandpa featuring last but by no means least. As you say, the icing on the cake. Enjoyed this. Cheers, annh :)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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A fun read! I liked your eclectic selection of birthday guests, with your grandpa featuring last but by no means least. As you say, the icing on the cake. Enjoyed this. Cheers, annh :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much annh. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Beautifully written. I was on pins and needles. It wasn't even my party and I couldn't wait to see who was going to show up next. I imagine that a number of readers will attempt to duplicate a similar birthday surprised for someone if not themselves. Great fun. Awesome read!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Beautifully written. I was on pins and needles. It wasn't even my party and I couldn't wait to see who was going to show up next. I imagine that a number of readers will attempt to duplicate a similar birthday surprised for someone if not themselves. Great fun. Awesome read!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much. This was a fun write and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You're Welcome!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I love the feel of your story. It seemed so personable and warm. You decided to pick people who meant the most to you, rather than go for who might seem more popular to pick. I like that about it.
I like the way you had your character's wife pick the guests and surprise him. It added depth to the story.
Great job on producing a genuine story that seemed realistic even in light of the fact that it was based on fantasy. The hallmark of good fantasy writing!
Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I love the feel of your story. It seemed so personable and warm. You decided to pick people who meant the most to you, rather than go for who might seem more popular to pick. I like that about it.
I like the way you had your character's wife pick the guests and surprise him. It added depth to the story.
Great job on producing a genuine story that seemed realistic even in light of the fact that it was based on fantasy. The hallmark of good fantasy writing!
Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Rhonda. This was my first stab at fantasy writing and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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It was great!
Comment from Janilou
All I can say is thank goodness I saved a six star rating for this absolutely exceptional short story. I loved, loved, loved it. The ending was WONDERFUL. I had no idea what to expect and what a fantastic surprise indeed.
Just the right amount of "mystery" surrounding the other guests too.
I will be astounded if you don't win the contest with this one.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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All I can say is thank goodness I saved a six star rating for this absolutely exceptional short story. I loved, loved, loved it. The ending was WONDERFUL. I had no idea what to expect and what a fantastic surprise indeed.
Just the right amount of "mystery" surrounding the other guests too.
I will be astounded if you don't win the contest with this one.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you Jan. This was a fun write and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A great image for your story.
-I liked how you organized
it, and made it like we
were right at home with you.
-It is casual and down to earth,
and the dialogue flows well.
-From the beginning, it seems
Anna has things well under control.
-But I think Merle had a few doubts!
-Then Dan'l Boone showed up, so
he went along with the ride, so to speak.
-I like how you show Merle's thoughts
after each guest appears, and you
also give great reactions from it, too.
-You keep us in suspense
regarding the last guest.
-I love the lead up to it, and
the ending is priceless.
-How wonderful that you thought of that.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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-A great image for your story.
-I liked how you organized
it, and made it like we
were right at home with you.
-It is casual and down to earth,
and the dialogue flows well.
-From the beginning, it seems
Anna has things well under control.
-But I think Merle had a few doubts!
-Then Dan'l Boone showed up, so
he went along with the ride, so to speak.
-I like how you show Merle's thoughts
after each guest appears, and you
also give great reactions from it, too.
-You keep us in suspense
regarding the last guest.
-I love the lead up to it, and
the ending is priceless.
-How wonderful that you thought of that.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Coco Jane
Fun story!
In paragraph 5, "I've" should be "I'd"--stay in past tense.
Why is Boone an actor while the others are real?
I like the moonshine detail.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Fun story!
In paragraph 5, "I've" should be "I'd"--stay in past tense.
Why is Boone an actor while the others are real?
I like the moonshine detail.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Boone was real, i didn't clarify that because I was trying to meet deadline. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
