The Sculptor's Clay
Repetition Poem Contest Entry18 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Sculpter's Clay, presented in iambic tetrameter and and ABCB rhyme scheme, brings the theme of molding words into what we see and enjoy here in this terrific example. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This poem, The Sculpter's Clay, presented in iambic tetrameter and and ABCB rhyme scheme, brings the theme of molding words into what we see and enjoy here in this terrific example. Nicely done.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Bill, for these awesome comments. I was trying to capture the birth of an idea and where writers take them. This process has always fascinated me. This review is much appreciated. Thank you! Lynda
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is an exceptionally well written entry for the Repetition Poetry Contest, Anonymous Poet.
Good, smooth flowing abcb rhyming scheme
You used the required repeating line at least three times, as required
All four of your rhymed quatrains feature carefully chosen words and great imagery.
The best of the lot, in my humble opinion.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is an exceptionally well written entry for the Repetition Poetry Contest, Anonymous Poet.
Good, smooth flowing abcb rhyming scheme
You used the required repeating line at least three times, as required
All four of your rhymed quatrains feature carefully chosen words and great imagery.
The best of the lot, in my humble opinion.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Dean! I was trying to capture birth of an idea and what happens with it after we let go of it and follow its lead. Your comments are awesome and much appreciated. Lynda
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You're welcome Lynda.
Enjoy the weekend.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written repeating poem about the words we say we will be always held accountable for. We have to be careful what we say and how we say it so that we don't have to pay the highest price.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A very well-written repeating poem about the words we say we will be always held accountable for. We have to be careful what we say and how we say it so that we don't have to pay the highest price.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Sandra! Your comments are lovely and well spoken. I appreciate your time to read and review this contest entry. Lynda
Comment from Larry5000
Very well done on this repetition poem, I have not read one in a long time. And I don't believe I have even attempted one myself. Your words were very lovely and your main line "we mold the words like sculptor's clay" paints a great picture in ones mind. Good luck on the contest for sure.
Larry
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Very well done on this repetition poem, I have not read one in a long time. And I don't believe I have even attempted one myself. Your words were very lovely and your main line "we mold the words like sculptor's clay" paints a great picture in ones mind. Good luck on the contest for sure.
Larry
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Thanks! It's called a Quatern and they are a bit tricky to write but they are also fun. Love this review! Much appreciated.
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You are welcome. Quatrain I have done before just not the repetition line in each verse. Take care.
Larry
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Rats! I thought this is what this form was called when you move one line down through the whole poem. Now I'm totally confused. I'll just call it a "poem". LOL
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Your fine. A Quadtrain does consist of 4 lines and usually has some sort of rhyme to them AABB or ABAB etc. So you have that for sure. But I believe the contest was going after a repetition type poem Where that one line in particular is repeating itself in each verse like you did it. Take care
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very skillfully-written and appealing. You created an excellent line for repetition, a simile that reinforces the theme about
the power of words and how we use them.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Your poem is very skillfully-written and appealing. You created an excellent line for repetition, a simile that reinforces the theme about
the power of words and how we use them.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Janice. These comments are lovely and I'm glad you liked this contest entry. Thanks for taking the time to read, rate and review this piece. Much appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You fulfilled the brief here with your repeated poem about moulding words like sculptors clay in your descriptions, we spell this word: (mould) but maybe you spell it differently in the US, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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You fulfilled the brief here with your repeated poem about moulding words like sculptors clay in your descriptions, we spell this word: (mould) but maybe you spell it differently in the US, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Thanks Dolly! Yes, you people across the pond just talk funny and misspell tons of stuff. LOL! Your time and comments are much appreciated. Thank you!
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Hey? The English language started in England I?ll have you know! He he he, love Dolly x
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer: one of the things I noticed about your poem was your repetition statement moved down one line in each progressive stanza. I read the contest description to see if that was a requirement for the poem. I did not see that requirement. I liked the verse and I particularly liked your structure through the stanzas. -Robert-
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Hello mystery writer: one of the things I noticed about your poem was your repetition statement moved down one line in each progressive stanza. I read the contest description to see if that was a requirement for the poem. I did not see that requirement. I liked the verse and I particularly liked your structure through the stanzas. -Robert-
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Robert. I appreciate your time to read and review this piece. This poetry form is called a Quatern. They are challenging but lots of fun. I'm glad you liked this. Thanks again.
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You're welcome
Comment from RodG
The Speaker here represents us all here on FanStory who attempt to "mold our words like sculptor's clay," not having a clue sometimes what the finished product will be. This is a fine Quatern with a refrain that emphasizes your message. Rod
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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The Speaker here represents us all here on FanStory who attempt to "mold our words like sculptor's clay," not having a clue sometimes what the finished product will be. This is a fine Quatern with a refrain that emphasizes your message. Rod
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Holy cow!!! You nailed it. I love this review. Thank you so much, Rod. I am happy that you liked this. I appreciate your time. And I also thank you for 'getting' this. Means a lot!!
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You are very welcome. Rod
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mystery Poet,
I was at a loss about writing a poem where one line repeats at least three times. You are very wise to use the Quatern poetry form. It covers the repeat requirement perfectly and throws in a fourth repeat moment. I enjoyed your theme and message, and your repeating line is lovely.
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Hello Mystery Poet,
I was at a loss about writing a poem where one line repeats at least three times. You are very wise to use the Quatern poetry form. It covers the repeat requirement perfectly and throws in a fourth repeat moment. I enjoyed your theme and message, and your repeating line is lovely.
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Joy. So it's called a Quatern? Didn't know that. I saw this form a few times and thought it was fun and challenging. Little did I know. LOL Your comments are lovely and much appreciated.
Comment from LisaMay
This is so lovely! truly a wonderful portrayal of 'the precious worth of what you say'. The repetition works well... I don't usually like a whole line repeated 4 times in other poets' verses, but there is enough 'meat' in your other lines to hold my attention so I don't notice the repeated line so much.
Uncannily, just to prove we are linked somehow, I have been working on a poem about words myself.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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This is so lovely! truly a wonderful portrayal of 'the precious worth of what you say'. The repetition works well... I don't usually like a whole line repeated 4 times in other poets' verses, but there is enough 'meat' in your other lines to hold my attention so I don't notice the repeated line so much.
Uncannily, just to prove we are linked somehow, I have been working on a poem about words myself.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Thank you sweetie! Yes, if the line you choose to repeat doesn't melt into the line before of after, then it's like hitting a speed bump. I am fascinated with the birth of creativity and tried to express my wonder with this poem. I appreciate these lovely comments. Thank you!
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I get fascinated with how ideas evolve too.
