Bowling on Turtle Hill
Just five friends messin' around in the snow...13 total reviews
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
I enjoyed your contest entry and your poem was lovely! It kept me amused waiting to find out how Jill survived this feat! Six cans--wow--and she was fine! Your words and pace are excellent!
My best in the contest, Deborah
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
Dear Author,
I enjoyed your contest entry and your poem was lovely! It kept me amused waiting to find out how Jill survived this feat! Six cans--wow--and she was fine! Your words and pace are excellent!
My best in the contest, Deborah
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review!!
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My pleasure and you are welcome!
Comment from Darlene Franklin
The poem is perfectly down and such an unusual story. Such an economy of words, letting us know Bill achieved the spare, The kind of craziness only kids would attempt!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
The poem is perfectly down and such an unusual story. Such an economy of words, letting us know Bill achieved the spare, The kind of craziness only kids would attempt!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Yes! Thank you for your wonderful review!!
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You're welcome
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Very innovative. Sounds like fun if it really happens. However you gleaned a good poem from your activities... composing this poem took a lot talent.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
Very innovative. Sounds like fun if it really happens. However you gleaned a good poem from your activities... composing this poem took a lot talent.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review and special comments... made my night!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
NOW we're talkin'!! I love the creativity and the fun that resulted from it. Plus, you made a wonderful contest entry from it, too. Win/win/win...and I hope you do. This brought me a wonderful smile today. xo
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
NOW we're talkin'!! I love the creativity and the fun that resulted from it. Plus, you made a wonderful contest entry from it, too. Win/win/win...and I hope you do. This brought me a wonderful smile today. xo
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Ahhh... from your enthusiasm to the voting booth!!! Thank you so much!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the bowling game on turtle hill with real life balls to take out the make-shift pins at the bottom of the hill, some empty trash cans.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
A very well-written poem about the bowling game on turtle hill with real life balls to take out the make-shift pins at the bottom of the hill, some empty trash cans.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
When we were kids, my brother and I were playing a similar game with our cousins. A strike resulted in a broken leg for my brother. No more snow bowling for us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
When we were kids, my brother and I were playing a similar game with our cousins. A strike resulted in a broken leg for my brother. No more snow bowling for us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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I am sorry to hear about your brother. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sally Law
Aw, this looks like ,my life living in New York! We would go down the hill on trash can lids and refrigerator boxes. The boxes would make it down a few times at least before we had to ditch them due to the soggy mess they had become. It was so much fun. You captured those fond memories here in your poem with the frosty blue text and white snow laden slopes.
All my best,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
Aw, this looks like ,my life living in New York! We would go down the hill on trash can lids and refrigerator boxes. The boxes would make it down a few times at least before we had to ditch them due to the soggy mess they had become. It was so much fun. You captured those fond memories here in your poem with the frosty blue text and white snow laden slopes.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the review but, more than that, thanx for sharing your memories!
Comment from Lobber
Hi,
After all the spinning and true excitement I was anticipating that one of your lines would end with the word I'll - but then since Jill was going down hill I knew she was unlikely to throw up! - Lobber
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
Hi,
After all the spinning and true excitement I was anticipating that one of your lines would end with the word I'll - but then since Jill was going down hill I knew she was unlikely to throw up! - Lobber
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Was there spinning.....? And thank you for your review!
Comment from Gail Denham
Cute - and fun - I like the helmets and shin guards. Nearby we have a resort place - lots of bike riding - whole families and often its the parents without helmets. REally? And who will take care of the kids if the parent gets hit.
Nice poem - fun and creative.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
Cute - and fun - I like the helmets and shin guards. Nearby we have a resort place - lots of bike riding - whole families and often its the parents without helmets. REally? And who will take care of the kids if the parent gets hit.
Nice poem - fun and creative.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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And you ask yourself: whatever happened to 'teaching by example'? Sigh. :) Thank you for the review - so glad you enjoyed!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well crafted poem illustrates having fun bowling in the snow. The games some people devise. Strong rhymes used throughout including "hill/spill" and "downhill/Bill". Nice touch to have a second person pick up the spare.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
Well crafted poem illustrates having fun bowling in the snow. The games some people devise. Strong rhymes used throughout including "hill/spill" and "downhill/Bill". Nice touch to have a second person pick up the spare.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for such a thoughtful and encouraging review!