Respond in kind
Watch who you cross5 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A chilling tale here of infidelity and revenge. I think you mean "brake" in your last word. I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes . . . love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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A chilling tale here of infidelity and revenge. I think you mean "brake" in your last word. I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes . . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thank you for our review I have gone back and fixed the "brake" issue.
Comment from humpwhistle
'Brake'--not break.
I know it's tough to write a complete story in 75 words. But I think you wasted quite a few in repetition. I think those words might be better used filling in the gaps, or developing characters. One man's opinion.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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'Brake'--not break.
I know it's tough to write a complete story in 75 words. But I think you wasted quite a few in repetition. I think those words might be better used filling in the gaps, or developing characters. One man's opinion.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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I fixed the misspelling, thank you. I have gotten mixed reviews on the repeating of the phrase. Some people seem to love it and others not so much.
Thank you for you review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- hell hath no fury and all that, yeah?! ;) ;) A good entry with a definite ending we did not see coming! ;) One SPAG below -- thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) :)
off the break. --> off the brake.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Wow -- hell hath no fury and all that, yeah?! ;) ;) A good entry with a definite ending we did not see coming! ;) One SPAG below -- thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) :)
off the break. --> off the brake.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review. I am glad you liked it. I will be sure to correct the "Brake" situation. Thank you for pointing it out.
Comment from Brian Taylor1
Excellent write. Leaves so much for the imagination which I love when reading. Great decision to repeat the "came into my house" line which I took as Melissa is on fire and on a mission. Perfect ending too. Leaving the door open for a possible scare of the cheater and his mistress with a quick drive at and swerve or just a straight barreling into for revenge. Even the good old wait and see could be in play. Very intense. Good work, keep writin
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Excellent write. Leaves so much for the imagination which I love when reading. Great decision to repeat the "came into my house" line which I took as Melissa is on fire and on a mission. Perfect ending too. Leaving the door open for a possible scare of the cheater and his mistress with a quick drive at and swerve or just a straight barreling into for revenge. Even the good old wait and see could be in play. Very intense. Good work, keep writin
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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I love that you got the point of her repeating the line. I am so glad you liked the piece. Thank you so much.
Comment from Mastery
Good job except for te repitition of that one line. I woul think of something else for the first time with it, were I you, Mia. Also "Revving the engine, she let off the break. (It's spelled BRAKE) Bless you and good luck, Bob
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Good job except for te repitition of that one line. I woul think of something else for the first time with it, were I you, Mia. Also "Revving the engine, she let off the break. (It's spelled BRAKE) Bless you and good luck, Bob
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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I can't believe I missed the "break" "brake". I will be sure to go and make that correction. I am glad you liked it.
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:) Bob