teasing winds
an abc poem.5 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention from the first line to the last and the artwork you choose to go with your poem is is a perfect match
As I was reading your poem I got mixed emotion thinking of my love who gone to be with the Lord
Thank you for this heartfelt poem
Cookie
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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You captured my attention from the first line to the last and the artwork you choose to go with your poem is is a perfect match
As I was reading your poem I got mixed emotion thinking of my love who gone to be with the Lord
Thank you for this heartfelt poem
Cookie
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your heartfelt review miss cookie and sorry for your loss. This is where memories can console us, I guess. Cheers, judester
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Your very welcome, yes there is a time and reason for everything in life and death. peace God be with you and your's
cookie
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amen.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This one is SO very special. It's so tender and full of love and sadness. Your first line feels so heavy; the words have natural spaces between them when I speak them out loud --the way I ALWAYS read poems-- and it makes for such an effective start. Then the next line, which feels more hopeful and light, has words that are airier and of a naturally higher pitch. The last line is full of warm, caressing words. This really is an exceptional write, Mystery Writer. You will do really well, I am sure, in this contest. xo
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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This one is SO very special. It's so tender and full of love and sadness. Your first line feels so heavy; the words have natural spaces between them when I speak them out loud --the way I ALWAYS read poems-- and it makes for such an effective start. Then the next line, which feels more hopeful and light, has words that are airier and of a naturally higher pitch. The last line is full of warm, caressing words. This really is an exceptional write, Mystery Writer. You will do really well, I am sure, in this contest. xo
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the insightful review Rachelle. While I was pining, I should have sent in my first chapter script, argh forgot. haha. My mom and I always had such great times here, but now she is 92 and knows her limits. My cabin is rough, haha. She just stopped driving, but had the knowledge of every street in Montreal. I quizzed her once with a street call Louise Cyr (famous Montreal strongman) it is only 30 meters long in little town, she thinks for bit then says, "isn't that in St. Henri?" Love her so.
Thanks for the encouraging review, means a lot to the mystery writer. Ciao Bella, mw.
Comment from Bill Schott
This ABC poem, Teasing Winds, follows the LMNOI order and the adds an AABBB rhyme scheme to perfect the tone of a missed presence. Seems that nature tries to fill in the gaps as 'laughter' from 'some teasing wind' blows some remembered joy to you. Nice.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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This ABC poem, Teasing Winds, follows the LMNOI order and the adds an AABBB rhyme scheme to perfect the tone of a missed presence. Seems that nature tries to fill in the gaps as 'laughter' from 'some teasing wind' blows some remembered joy to you. Nice.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the review Bill. I guess that's the purpose of memories and finding solace there when we miss our loved one. Cheers, judester
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Cheeky winds, eh? :) Love the phrase even though I've never heard the two used together.... and, yes, in this case I would say they are definitely 'cheeky'... :) ;) A wonderful offering for this contest! ;) ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) ;)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Cheeky winds, eh? :) Love the phrase even though I've never heard the two used together.... and, yes, in this case I would say they are definitely 'cheeky'... :) ;) A wonderful offering for this contest! ;) ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) ;)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Yikes, I did not see that ..it sounds like a fart. Good thing I didn't use 'the passing wind' haha. I have changed it to teasing wind. Thanks for that and thanks for your insightful review. Cheers, j
Comment from Sugarray77
Good job on this emotive and descriptive poem. It is a great verse for the entry into the ABC contest. I enjoyed reading it and wish you luck.
All the best
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Good job on this emotive and descriptive poem. It is a great verse for the entry into the ABC contest. I enjoyed reading it and wish you luck.
All the best
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the thoughtful review. One reviewer pointed out the cheeky wind line and I changed it to teasing wind. Haha, the eleven years olds would have had a field day with this. Cheers j
