Dead Spot
Not all weak signals are in cphones11 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your dialogue only contest. I enjoyed reading it. I like the use of the two colored font to identify speakers. Poor Mary. She lost her mind 35 years ago and now is in a home for the insane presumably. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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You did a great job with your dialogue only contest. I enjoyed reading it. I like the use of the two colored font to identify speakers. Poor Mary. She lost her mind 35 years ago and now is in a home for the insane presumably. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you, that was a repost but I enjoyed revisiting it. Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from royowen
It's so sad when "loss of memory" happens, I would surmise it might be termed "selective" memory, when yesterday is an endless succession of "today". It's very sad but it's almost becoming old hat these days. Well done Denis, excellent entry in this contest. Good luck. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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It's so sad when "loss of memory" happens, I would surmise it might be termed "selective" memory, when yesterday is an endless succession of "today". It's very sad but it's almost becoming old hat these days. Well done Denis, excellent entry in this contest. Good luck. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks Roy, these two are reposts which I enjoyed writing as I also your comments. God bless, Dennis
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Well done Dennis
Comment from Susan Newell
This is fascinating dialogue, although I don't know whether this kind of selective memory loss can really exist, or whether someone could survive 35 years and function enough to stay alive. And the persistent pursuer is sure patient. In any case, it is a short tragicomedy that held my interest, even though I don't know where to file it.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is fascinating dialogue, although I don't know whether this kind of selective memory loss can really exist, or whether someone could survive 35 years and function enough to stay alive. And the persistent pursuer is sure patient. In any case, it is a short tragicomedy that held my interest, even though I don't know where to file it.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks, it's a repost and I think it was an entry in a dialogue only contest a few years ago...and I agree 35 years is a bit of a stretch. Thanks for reviewing, much appreciated, Dennis
Comment from forestport12
Good luck with the contest. I've never had much luck with this one. I love the edgy dialogue in this installment. It really makes you take notice of the characters when there is fiery interaction. I looked for a weakness where one says something simply to explain something that wouldn't belong. Looks good to me.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Good luck with the contest. I've never had much luck with this one. I love the edgy dialogue in this installment. It really makes you take notice of the characters when there is fiery interaction. I looked for a weakness where one says something simply to explain something that wouldn't belong. Looks good to me.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thanks, brother. I appreciate your careful reviewing and approval as a result! GB,Dennis
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Really well done. Sad story of one who can't face the truth. Sometimes that's very hard to do. Very well written, I see no errors and hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Really well done. Sad story of one who can't face the truth. Sometimes that's very hard to do. Very well written, I see no errors and hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Bichon
A sad poem but with very truthful elements. It's sad that a person can just block something like that, must not be a nice way to live at all. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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A sad poem but with very truthful elements. It's sad that a person can just block something like that, must not be a nice way to live at all. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written diaogue between brother and sister who is still waiting for here loved one to return from the war for 35 years and keep blocking the news of his death in her mind for the past 35 years.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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A very well-written diaogue between brother and sister who is still waiting for here loved one to return from the war for 35 years and keep blocking the news of his death in her mind for the past 35 years.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from shaffer40
I would have given you six stars, but I've used them up. I think this is such a clever response to the dialogue-only prompt. I especially like the line about the only brush with royalty.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I would have given you six stars, but I've used them up. I think this is such a clever response to the dialogue-only prompt. I especially like the line about the only brush with royalty.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you! Very kind of you to review and comment so nicely.
Comment from Gail Denham
Most interesting - from the mind of a person ignoring the truth. And obviously living in a home for the mentally disturbed. You wrote this very well - I can see it clearly.
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Most interesting - from the mind of a person ignoring the truth. And obviously living in a home for the mentally disturbed. You wrote this very well - I can see it clearly.
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Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you! Do you think "ignoring" is the best word to describe her condition? Just curious...not trying to be defensive or argumentive.
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Hmmm - if not ignoring - is it being blocked from her memory? Or is there a problem with her memory. Perhaps I don't understand the whole thing.
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I'm looking at as a trauma so deep in her heart (the loss of the love of her life) she went into some kind of involuntary mental blocking of the truth.
In this conversation, a glimmer of light gets through but is once again blocked by the habit of denial. Thanks, just thinking out loud...Dennis
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aha - so that's it. it's a mental block - well it does affect some that way. sure get a lot of different insights here on Fanstory.
Comment from Sam Frearson-Tubito
Hi there, I loved your piece. I thought it was dynamic, engaging and concise. The tone of the piece is perfect. Really well done. I look forward to your next post.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Hi there, I loved your piece. I thought it was dynamic, engaging and concise. The tone of the piece is perfect. Really well done. I look forward to your next post.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your kind review...Dennis
