Rightful Heir
Contest Entry10 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This unfortunately was the way the crown passed from one to another in years gone by and now a more subtle approach is used but the same sharp painful sword still rules, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This unfortunately was the way the crown passed from one to another in years gone by and now a more subtle approach is used but the same sharp painful sword still rules, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Dolly. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from LeannaP
I thought your entry was interesting. You managed to follow the guidelines well. Great job at sentence structure as your paragraphs flowed.
This was a great entry for the contest.Good luck
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I thought your entry was interesting. You managed to follow the guidelines well. Great job at sentence structure as your paragraphs flowed.
This was a great entry for the contest.Good luck
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Leanna. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Your most welcome
Comment from Gail Denham
Sounds as if you fulfilled the poem prompt - I didn't try that one. But your poem came out fine. And it told a story as well. Seemed very smooth and structured. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Sounds as if you fulfilled the poem prompt - I didn't try that one. But your poem came out fine. And it told a story as well. Seemed very smooth and structured. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Gail. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from victor 66
An interesting Fantasy story you have here. It tells a story about power, leader ship and a need to do what you feel is right. It was a fun read and a fun fantasy. I wish you well.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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An interesting Fantasy story you have here. It tells a story about power, leader ship and a need to do what you feel is right. It was a fun read and a fun fantasy. I wish you well.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Victor. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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You're most welcome. It was my pleasure.
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent Ottawa Rima true to the form
with excellent rhymes and meter.
A solid fantasy story in only eight lines.
Perfect picture to match the poem
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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You've written an excellent Ottawa Rima true to the form
with excellent rhymes and meter.
A solid fantasy story in only eight lines.
Perfect picture to match the poem
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Robert. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from James W. Reynolds
Well done. This is a tight, well-crafted poem. The rhythm nicely propels the story forward. Finally it is a compact story that is told well. I can't think of any suggestions.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Well done. This is a tight, well-crafted poem. The rhythm nicely propels the story forward. Finally it is a compact story that is told well. I can't think of any suggestions.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review and the big sixer, James. I like to try to tell whole stories in a few lines as possible. It gives my brain more of workout. Lol. I really appreciate the generous rating, friend. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Have a great weekend. Thank you again.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Ottawa Rhima about the rightful heir born from the King's mistress. The bastard child built her own dynasty and kill the king before his rightful heir.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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A very well-written Ottawa Rhima about the rightful heir born from the King's mistress. The bastard child built her own dynasty and kill the king before his rightful heir.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Sandra. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from LyndaS
I always study the pic that's included with a post before I read anything. This was a stunning picture. That and the title "Rightful Heir" goes far to wet the appetite. Your poem tells a great story in limited space. Nearly impossible to do. These three elements of this post warrant top rating. A+ on a difficult assignment. Trifecta win for you today. Just beautiful. Good luck to you. Lynda
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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I always study the pic that's included with a post before I read anything. This was a stunning picture. That and the title "Rightful Heir" goes far to wet the appetite. Your poem tells a great story in limited space. Nearly impossible to do. These three elements of this post warrant top rating. A+ on a difficult assignment. Trifecta win for you today. Just beautiful. Good luck to you. Lynda
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Lynda. I only wish this site would let us see the pictures as they are when we find them. This little picture doesn't do it justice. It's actually a lot bigger and I had to crop off the edges just to make it slightly large enough to see the few details you can. It's a fantastic piece of art when viewed in its original size. But what can you do? Take what we can get, I guess. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating, Lynda. I'm glad you liked my little offering. Have a great day. Thank you again.
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It's the least I can do. Well... maybe not.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the story of losing everything, family and kingdom under the conspiracy, before the rightful heir; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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This speaks the story of losing everything, family and kingdom under the conspiracy, before the rightful heir; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Dr. Al. I'm glad you liked this short piece.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Powerful writing that has happened throughout history when a child decides to rebel against her own father and in this case kill him to take the crown. Thanks for sharing this story within a short poem. Bill
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Powerful writing that has happened throughout history when a child decides to rebel against her own father and in this case kill him to take the crown. Thanks for sharing this story within a short poem. Bill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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I really appreciate the generous stars and great review, Bill. I'm glad you liked this little piece.
