Chip's Poetry
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Comment from Debbie Pope
This is really good, Chip. I like the part about dancing on your conquered fears. Interestingly, my four line poem is about fear as well. It's about monks overcoming their fear of death. Fear is clearly a good topic, huh? Your poem's better though. It should do well in the contest. You know that I like the way that you write.
Great job with this one.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This is really good, Chip. I like the part about dancing on your conquered fears. Interestingly, my four line poem is about fear as well. It's about monks overcoming their fear of death. Fear is clearly a good topic, huh? Your poem's better though. It should do well in the contest. You know that I like the way that you write.
Great job with this one.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Debbie, I will look for yours!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
When you cross the discomfort zone, you can proceed with confidence, as when you find it is dead; strategy for survival; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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When you cross the discomfort zone, you can proceed with confidence, as when you find it is dead; strategy for survival; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Holly Buss
I really love how this poem captures what it's like to defeat fear. I think adding punctuation would help, too, to show structure and show emphasis. The picture shows directly what you are talking about in the poem. Have a blessed day!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I really love how this poem captures what it's like to defeat fear. I think adding punctuation would help, too, to show structure and show emphasis. The picture shows directly what you are talking about in the poem. Have a blessed day!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Holly! I can't get my hands around how to use punctuation in my poetry (a new medium for me). When I punctuate some of my shorter pieces I hear that it would be better served without any capitalization or punctuation, then when I don't punctuate I sometimes hear that I should. I suppose there are no hard rules about it in poetry, hopefully it will come naturally the more I write. I want to emphasize without distracting, sometimes a fine line. Thanks again!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Perfect!! :) ;) Love the exuberance you are able to portray in just these few syllables, Chip -- great job! :) Together with your pic, your presentation makes a strong contender! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette ;)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Perfect!! :) ;) Love the exuberance you are able to portray in just these few syllables, Chip -- great job! :) Together with your pic, your presentation makes a strong contender! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette ;)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks, as always, Yvette!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I agree, but it takes courage to make that first step. Fear tends to stick and cling on. But, you are right in saying this, we must try to stop fear interfering with our lives, we lose so much when we do. Well done, a really excellent poem. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I agree, but it takes courage to make that first step. Fear tends to stick and cling on. But, you are right in saying this, we must try to stop fear interfering with our lives, we lose so much when we do. Well done, a really excellent poem. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Sandra!
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi ,
I really enjoyed your clever 1559 contest entry.
The meaning is clear and concise and complemented with a supporting image.
Every word has a place and fits into the place perfectly .
Well done.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Hi ,
I really enjoyed your clever 1559 contest entry.
The meaning is clear and concise and complemented with a supporting image.
Every word has a place and fits into the place perfectly .
Well done.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Shirley. I appreciate the kind words and generous rating!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
I am giving five stars because I agree with the message of the poem. Based on my own life, I understand walking on the precipice. The louder and harder you stomp on the edge the more debris you kick loose. walking lightly in those situations is generally best. The last line is the one I agree with the most. Sometimes you need to be fearless and do what you believe is the right thing. There have been times I have stomped on my fear and unfortunately it stomped back. I like short stories and poems with real message. I like this one. -Robert-
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I am giving five stars because I agree with the message of the poem. Based on my own life, I understand walking on the precipice. The louder and harder you stomp on the edge the more debris you kick loose. walking lightly in those situations is generally best. The last line is the one I agree with the most. Sometimes you need to be fearless and do what you believe is the right thing. There have been times I have stomped on my fear and unfortunately it stomped back. I like short stories and poems with real message. I like this one. -Robert-
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Yes, I would advise tiptoeing on the ledge and wait until on terra firma to stomp. Thanks for the read and review, Robert! Is that your real name, or pen name for a big Bob Dylan fan?
Comment from Hitcher
A Nice little four lined poem for the contest Chip... and one we all should be able to relate to. For we have all had to overcome fears at some point in our lives and we will all have to overcome new fears as our lives progress. Stomp away!!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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A Nice little four lined poem for the contest Chip... and one we all should be able to relate to. For we have all had to overcome fears at some point in our lives and we will all have to overcome new fears as our lives progress. Stomp away!!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Hitcher.
Comment from godlucifer
i was always fear of speaking in public. i must say to conquer fear it takes practice. practice,practice,practice,and fear not. sometime a little practice can take the fear out of you. your poem was created with creativity. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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i was always fear of speaking in public. i must say to conquer fear it takes practice. practice,practice,practice,and fear not. sometime a little practice can take the fear out of you. your poem was created with creativity. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you! So, do you speak in public now?
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Oh gee, I really need to do a lot of this. Chip, this is so necessary... But why am I so afraid to begin with? One day, soon, I'll step into this zone.
This is a brilliant write. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Oh gee, I really need to do a lot of this. Chip, this is so necessary... But why am I so afraid to begin with? One day, soon, I'll step into this zone.
This is a brilliant write. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Sandra, and good luck! One of my favorite quotes is from Paolo Coelho: "?If you think adventure is dangerous, try routine; it is lethal.? And it doesn't have to be death-defying adventure, just trying something new is adventurous in my mind.
