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Chip's Poetry

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Comment from flylikeaneagle
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Great awareness writing about fear and anxiety.
We can do, we can be strong and we can conquer.
I like how you stomp on fear until its dead and dance.
I'm all about dancing on the water with the Holy Father
in the storms. We can have fun, fear not. ***********
flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
    Thanks so much, flylikeaneagle!
Comment from Yvon
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Tread lightly if you dare. that would be my thoughts of this image. Syllable count is accurate. Subject is multi-diverse as many fears on the ledge of life can be stomped on. Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Yvon.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
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Such a rigid form of poetry, but I reckon you turned out a beauty! I like how you managed to incorporate a rhyme scheme as well; no mean feat in this style of poem I'd say. I don't know what else to add here - it's past 3 in the afternoon in Australia and I'm hungry. But I did enjoy this wee poem, and hope it does you proud in the contest. Good luck! I'm off to get a snack now...

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Gypsy!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Wow, that was an amazing poem. I admire those who can deliver deep messages in just a few words. I try at it, but fall short of the impact a few words can make.

And the message, timeless and needed. I am inspired!

Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Rhonda, it means a lot!
Comment from humpwhistle
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Oh, I get it. But, please, step back from the edge before you dance. All of a sudden, I sound like Woody Allen!

You make a good point, Chip, paralysis is fear manifest.

Best of luck with the Committee.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Lee!
Comment from Bill Pinder
Exceptional
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I liked it the first time I saw the title. Great poem, picture, and message! you hit the trifecta. This should do great in the contest. Have a good one.
Bill

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Many thanks, Bill, appreciate the kind words and review!
Comment from bhogg
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Chip - nice job on this. The strictness of the format didn't even slow you down. A wonderful message for all. I particularly liked, 'tiptoe on the edge'. Haven't seen your posts yet, but don't visit FS too often. Good luck on your writing! Bill

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Bill!
Comment from Mastery
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Nice four-line poetry, chip. You have taken a fear and made it into a resolve for people who fear heights for one thing. A good entry in the contest and I wish you the best of luck with it. (I think)

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Bob!
Comment from A. Willow Bends
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Hey, I am just randomly reviewing and I just read your second place poem.
This one, also very nicely done with a great photo choice as well. This is a whole different format, yet you nailed it with your very upbeat topic choice. This would be a great poster and in my opinion, marketable!
(Just so you know, I am out of sixes to award!) Sorry!
Great job and glad to spun the wheel and landed on your work twice.
Wendy

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Wendy, I appreciate the kind words.
Comment from Boogienights
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Only a few lines, but what a great message! Its not an easy thing to do, overcome fear, but it can be freeing to the soul. I love your contest entry and eish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much for the kind words and generous rating, much appreciated!