Inferno
Dedicated to firemen everywhere11 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Rod. A sad story for sure. I have friends whose hubbies are/were firefighters in New York City. Present at 9/11 when all hands needed to be on deck. A dangerous job. Congratulations for winning the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Hi Rod. A sad story for sure. I have friends whose hubbies are/were firefighters in New York City. Present at 9/11 when all hands needed to be on deck. A dangerous job. Congratulations for winning the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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I am so pleased you enjoyed the story, Marilyn, though it is sad. I based it on a recent tragic incident in Chicago. I appreciate the congrats. Rod
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Horrible situation--what some have to endure.
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done - and truly a sad story - we can't afford to lose one of those brave firefighters - esp. when it's arson. Very sad story - but it help the interest for sure.
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Well done - and truly a sad story - we can't afford to lose one of those brave firefighters - esp. when it's arson. Very sad story - but it help the interest for sure.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thank you, Gail, for sharing my sad story. Glad it held your interest. Indeed firemen should be praised for putting their lives on the line. Rod
Comment from Rikki66
God is surely testing Susan and her mother and father. First a stillborn child then her husband died in a fire. God will never give you a load larger than you can carry but, the priest needs to be at her sid not just in prayer.
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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God is surely testing Susan and her mother and father. First a stillborn child then her husband died in a fire. God will never give you a load larger than you can carry but, the priest needs to be at her sid not just in prayer.
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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All you say is true. I am optimistic and think in time Susan will reach out for Father Joe and return to the Church. Thank you for sharing my story. Rod
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you are welcome.
Rikki
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This was a sweet and tender story, but it didn't answer anything. Typically a flash fiction post - or any short story - will create some questions and then answer them satisfactorily for the reader. When you leave the questions open-ended, you leave the reader unsatisfied. I wish you luck in the voting, though.
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reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This was a sweet and tender story, but it didn't answer anything. Typically a flash fiction post - or any short story - will create some questions and then answer them satisfactorily for the reader. When you leave the questions open-ended, you leave the reader unsatisfied. I wish you luck in the voting, though.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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I beg to differ with you here, Robyn. There are plenty of questions left open-ended intentionally. For example, what will happen to Susan? There is also the question of what will Farber do? He chose to fight the fire. True, the story?s sad ending might leave the reader unsatisfied..
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That's my point. When the questions are left unanswered, the reader is left unhappy. We don't have any idea what's happening. We read a story, book or post to see a world where things work out - unlike our own world. hahaha When they DON'T - then it can be too much like our lives. Why read?
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You know - even if we don't LIKE the endings, answers, solutions. We HAVE them, right?
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed your well written story.
Lots of topics covered here - faith, still birth, heroism, relationships, duty and tragedy. You've got it all going on.
Good luck in the voting booth. Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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Hello :)
I enjoyed your well written story.
Lots of topics covered here - faith, still birth, heroism, relationships, duty and tragedy. You've got it all going on.
Good luck in the voting booth. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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Thank you, Debra. I am delighted you enjoyed my story though it?s sad.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
A very beautifully written story about both personal and professional tragedy. So few people think about the sacrifices these men and women make for our benefit. They risk their lives; they are, many times, torn between home relationships/responsibility and fire-fighting. Their families sacrifice, too.
I really enjoyed the dialogue between Farber and Father Joe. Without Father Joe (and Susan), the story would not have had the same appeal.
This is an exceptional contest entry, and I wish you the very best!
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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A very beautifully written story about both personal and professional tragedy. So few people think about the sacrifices these men and women make for our benefit. They risk their lives; they are, many times, torn between home relationships/responsibility and fire-fighting. Their families sacrifice, too.
I really enjoyed the dialogue between Farber and Father Joe. Without Father Joe (and Susan), the story would not have had the same appeal.
This is an exceptional contest entry, and I wish you the very best!
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thank you so much for your enthusiastic endorsement of INFERNO. Indeed, you understand my intent to pay tribute to these brave firefighters. Thank you also for the bonus of six bright stars.
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Much deserved. It was a great read, and I love your compassion for others.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Wow, I like this. The lad had a dangerous job. I can't imagine losing a baby. I can understand that the wife would be wanting to blame him since he was always gone. Some jobs are more demanding than others with set schedules making it harder to get off. What do you do if you are him in that situation? I could have suggested a few scenarios to him. After all of the loss they suffered, then, he loses his life. So sad. I enjoyed reading this well written offering. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Wow, I like this. The lad had a dangerous job. I can't imagine losing a baby. I can understand that the wife would be wanting to blame him since he was always gone. Some jobs are more demanding than others with set schedules making it harder to get off. What do you do if you are him in that situation? I could have suggested a few scenarios to him. After all of the loss they suffered, then, he loses his life. So sad. I enjoyed reading this well written offering. Well done!
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review INFERNO, Jeffrey. I am delighted you enjoyed the story and appreciate the praise.
Comment from humpwhistle
Man, perhaps Susan's name should be Job. She's certainly being tested.
I like that you let your story unfold largely in dialogue.
Well done. And best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Man, perhaps Susan's name should be Job. She's certainly being tested.
I like that you let your story unfold largely in dialogue.
Well done. And best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thank you, Lee, for sharing INFERNO and your kind praise. Although her husband is a tragic hero, Susan is indeed the real victim here. I?m glad you liked my use of dialog.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad story and all too familiar in the fire service as they risk their lives when there is a fire, I remember in the 1970's when there was a fireman's strike in the UK and I was in the Police at the time and we had to escort the Green Goddesses to the fires, The Green Goddess was the green army fire truck, and the soldiers didn't know the area. A fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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This is a sad story and all too familiar in the fire service as they risk their lives when there is a fire, I remember in the 1970's when there was a fireman's strike in the UK and I was in the Police at the time and we had to escort the Green Goddesses to the fires, The Green Goddess was the green army fire truck, and the soldiers didn't know the area. A fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thank you, Dolly, for your kind praise of INFERNO, indeed a sad story based on the recent death of a firefighter in the Chicagoland area.
Comment from LisaMay
Oh my gosh, now you have upset me with the reality of what a firefighter's life is like... and that of his family. A dead hero for a father is not really an OK substitute. So very well written. A top contender for the contest.
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Oh my gosh, now you have upset me with the reality of what a firefighter's life is like... and that of his family. A dead hero for a father is not really an OK substitute. So very well written. A top contender for the contest.
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thank you so much, Lisa, for your wonderful praise of INFERNO and those six bright stars. I did not mean to upset you or any reader with this story based on the tragic death of a Chicagoland firefighter recently.
