A 'Forever' Responsibility
A 3-5-3 Contest Offering16 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
An interesting angle I've never considered. I like it.
To me, the stars always represented pin pricks. But to see them as something else will require some adaptation.
Thanks for a new view.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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An interesting angle I've never considered. I like it.
To me, the stars always represented pin pricks. But to see them as something else will require some adaptation.
Thanks for a new view.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you for your review. ;)
Comment from Sally Law
Coolest and my vote today for the 5-7-5 contest. The sunset on your words, too. Super creative of you and adding the mystery called the night.
All my best,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Coolest and my vote today for the 5-7-5 contest. The sunset on your words, too. Super creative of you and adding the mystery called the night.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you for your review and your wonderfully encouraging comments (and for the vote!). :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
and I like the formatting.
-Effective use of
one continuous thought.
-Good use of personification
in the last line.
-I like the idea in your
poem, too, about
the night and the stars.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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-Nice image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
and I like the formatting.
-Effective use of
one continuous thought.
-Good use of personification
in the last line.
-I like the idea in your
poem, too, about
the night and the stars.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review - have a great day! :)
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You are very welcome. You have a great day, too!
Comment from fm wright
I find the words you've chosen for this 3-5-3 to be very clever and witty. Certainly you have found a new way to express this time of day. The picture goes with it wonderfully!
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I find the words you've chosen for this 3-5-3 to be very clever and witty. Certainly you have found a new way to express this time of day. The picture goes with it wonderfully!
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you so very much for your comments and those lovely stars, FM -- just a wonderful start to the week!! :) So glad you enjoyed my description of the stars' responsibility!! ;) You be sure to have a great week!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In this 3-5-3 poem the poet speaks about 'forever' responsibility of the stars as and when the night falls the stars are to catch the moon; well said, well done. Write to inspire -- DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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In this 3-5-3 poem the poet speaks about 'forever' responsibility of the stars as and when the night falls the stars are to catch the moon; well said, well done. Write to inspire -- DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you for your review. ;)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A magical and fantastical write as we gaze at the stars for hope to change our situation as stars momentarily appear visible at night, a beautiful presentation and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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A magical and fantastical write as we gaze at the stars for hope to change our situation as stars momentarily appear visible at night, a beautiful presentation and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you for stopping in for the review this evening. ;)
