For Our Family 'Space Cadet'
Opposites don't always attract...9 total reviews
Comment from Betsy2
I appreciated your honesty here as you did not go for obvious sentimentality and warmth. Many can identify with your feelings, and the ending is one of vulnernability and hope.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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I appreciated your honesty here as you did not go for obvious sentimentality and warmth. Many can identify with your feelings, and the ending is one of vulnernability and hope.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Thank you!!
Comment from sunnilicious
Nice artwork choice. Great presentation. Sibling relationships are important especially young in life. You captured your relationship wonderfully. Well thought out. Great verbiage. Illustrative. Enjoyable to read. Great work :)
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Nice artwork choice. Great presentation. Sibling relationships are important especially young in life. You captured your relationship wonderfully. Well thought out. Great verbiage. Illustrative. Enjoyable to read. Great work :)
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you for your review and wonderful comments. ;)
Comment from nancyjam
This is a great entry in the family poem contest.
No two people are the same and when it's in the case of sisters that could be hard to deal with, as evidenced by your poem.
Your rhymes are great and the meter is strong and your descriptive
images are entertaining.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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This is a great entry in the family poem contest.
No two people are the same and when it's in the case of sisters that could be hard to deal with, as evidenced by your poem.
Your rhymes are great and the meter is strong and your descriptive
images are entertaining.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments -- much appreciated. :)
Comment from moongirlwriter
So very sweet. . .but I do understand, from a mother's point of view. My two youngest daughters, even at the age of 49 still has feelings of anger for her older sister. Yes, they are different in almost every way I can imagine but I do long for the day when the baby of the family knows how much she is loved by her older sister.
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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So very sweet. . .but I do understand, from a mother's point of view. My two youngest daughters, even at the age of 49 still has feelings of anger for her older sister. Yes, they are different in almost every way I can imagine but I do long for the day when the baby of the family knows how much she is loved by her older sister.
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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As a mother, I agree! Thank you for your review and have a great evening. :)
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Comment from Brian Taylor1
clap, clap, clap etc., etc.{applause} Great poem! From the story to the flow mixed with the rhyme. You nailed it and stuck the landing. Excellent motivator for discussion,. Which I'm having with the other side of my brain while noticing the on point similarities with me and my brother. I kind of disagree though with the title. I think your relationship is ultimate science. The metal to the magnet. Her spacey ways awoke your differences forming a motivating tool to strive and achieve. As you for her. The ultimate family love, deep and sometimes annoyingly to hard to handle{and definitely to hard to figure out} so we ride the waves into some sea of maturity in this world that is in denial. I think she brought out the depths in you. Both love and hate just by being herself and is party, probably more then that, responsible for you writing powerful poetry. Sorry for going on and on. A testament to a great read. Keep at it.
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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clap, clap, clap etc., etc.{applause} Great poem! From the story to the flow mixed with the rhyme. You nailed it and stuck the landing. Excellent motivator for discussion,. Which I'm having with the other side of my brain while noticing the on point similarities with me and my brother. I kind of disagree though with the title. I think your relationship is ultimate science. The metal to the magnet. Her spacey ways awoke your differences forming a motivating tool to strive and achieve. As you for her. The ultimate family love, deep and sometimes annoyingly to hard to handle{and definitely to hard to figure out} so we ride the waves into some sea of maturity in this world that is in denial. I think she brought out the depths in you. Both love and hate just by being herself and is party, probably more then that, responsible for you writing powerful poetry. Sorry for going on and on. A testament to a great read. Keep at it.
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you for your wonderfully detailed comments - I appreciate your stopping by today. ;)
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love the message of this. I think that for the most part, their aren't any two children in a family that are alike. We were all different in my family. Like you've stated so eloquently, the differences and being opposite many times brings an attraction and closeness. I like the effortless flow of this along with the spot on artwork selection. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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I love the message of this. I think that for the most part, their aren't any two children in a family that are alike. We were all different in my family. Like you've stated so eloquently, the differences and being opposite many times brings an attraction and closeness. I like the effortless flow of this along with the spot on artwork selection. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful review and sympathetic comments, Jeffrey - both are greatly appreciated. ;)
Comment from Heather Knight
This poem is beautiful, but also bittersweet for me. My kid sister and I had a very similar relationship... unfortunately she passed away last summer at the age of 48.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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This poem is beautiful, but also bittersweet for me. My kid sister and I had a very similar relationship... unfortunately she passed away last summer at the age of 48.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you for your review -- your 'musings' write certainly hit home with myself.... :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Brother's attitude, ideals and philosophy of living do not likely to be appreciated by his sister who opposes ever, but when brother goes away from family understands the essence of love; well said, well done. Write to inspire -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Brother's attitude, ideals and philosophy of living do not likely to be appreciated by his sister who opposes ever, but when brother goes away from family understands the essence of love; well said, well done. Write to inspire -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you for your lovely comments - much appreciated. ;)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a wonderful tribute to your sister and your growing up together and he love hate relationship all sisters have that end in complete devotion to each other in adulthood. Great rhyming and metre throughout, she joy to read and a great entry for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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What a wonderful tribute to your sister and your growing up together and he love hate relationship all sisters have that end in complete devotion to each other in adulthood. Great rhyming and metre throughout, she joy to read and a great entry for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. :)
