Lost in a Cave
Nonet Poetry contest24 total reviews
Comment from Tina Crute
Somehow I missed this! In my youth, I opted out of a cave exploring expedition because I couldn't stand the thought of being so enclosed. Your poem made me think of poetry about fear. You have definitely painted a picture of the fear that grows the longer you are in a cave without seeing light. This is very well done, and scary, lol!
Blessings,
Tina
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Somehow I missed this! In my youth, I opted out of a cave exploring expedition because I couldn't stand the thought of being so enclosed. Your poem made me think of poetry about fear. You have definitely painted a picture of the fear that grows the longer you are in a cave without seeing light. This is very well done, and scary, lol!
Blessings,
Tina
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Tina... I was trying to include the reader in the angst and tension of the moment. I am so glad you ?got it?. I really appreciate your review.
Melissa
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You are welcome...yes, I felt angst and tension:)
Have a good week:)
Tina
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
A very dramatic and powerful Nonet poetry contest entry.
There is something about being trapped in darkness that takes your breath away, never leaves you, and is palpable on reading of a similar
experience.
Your poem did just that to me.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Wow!
A very dramatic and powerful Nonet poetry contest entry.
There is something about being trapped in darkness that takes your breath away, never leaves you, and is palpable on reading of a similar
experience.
Your poem did just that to me.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 17-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Hi Shirley. I really appreciate your review and overall insight. I was writing to evoke emotions and I am so glad that you think it did. Thanks.
Melissa
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Oh Melissa, this is really very good. Perfect enjambment throughout and the syllable count is spot on. Very well written with a very colourful cave picture - beautiful. If ever I am lost in a cave I'd like it to be this one LOL. A good entry to the contest. Good Luck....... and Congratulations on your recent placing in the Lune contest. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Oh Melissa, this is really very good. Perfect enjambment throughout and the syllable count is spot on. Very well written with a very colourful cave picture - beautiful. If ever I am lost in a cave I'd like it to be this one LOL. A good entry to the contest. Good Luck....... and Congratulations on your recent placing in the Lune contest. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Hello Dorothy... I am thrilled by your words. I was trying to convey emotions and angst. I am glad you thought that I had done that. I appreciate your well wishes. Thank you!!
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent. I can feel the cave closing in on me and the damp drip with crawly things coming to get me. Yikes! Great job and I wish you much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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This is excellent. I can feel the cave closing in on me and the damp drip with crawly things coming to get me. Yikes! Great job and I wish you much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Haha... thanks Marilyn. I appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from Loren .
I can hardly think of anything more oppressive than being lost in a dark, wet, dank cave. You've expressed it so well. And, the thought that one cannot find one's way out, makes it even more oppressive. Does on go left, right, up or down to find the light? Goodness know, Best of luck int he contest. Loren
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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I can hardly think of anything more oppressive than being lost in a dark, wet, dank cave. You've expressed it so well. And, the thought that one cannot find one's way out, makes it even more oppressive. Does on go left, right, up or down to find the light? Goodness know, Best of luck int he contest. Loren
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Hi Loren... thanks for commenting on this dark poem. It turned out a little heavier than I intended, but I was trying to bring the reader into a moment that was full of angst and tension. I appreciate your review.
Melissa
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Hi Loren... thanks for commenting on this dark poem. It turned out a little heavier than I intended, but I was trying to bring the reader into a moment that was full of angst and tension. I appreciate your review.
Melissa
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Wow, what brought this to mind to write a nonet on it? Oppressive darkness and being lost in a cave - that certainly is one nightmare I would not want to live. All syllables are correct on this effective entry for the Nonet poem contest. Well done and best of luck. ~DD
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Wow, what brought this to mind to write a nonet on it? Oppressive darkness and being lost in a cave - that certainly is one nightmare I would not want to live. All syllables are correct on this effective entry for the Nonet poem contest. Well done and best of luck. ~DD
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanks, DD... my aim was to write in a way to draw the reader into a tense moment full of angst... It turned out rather darker than I intended. Thanks for your comments.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
What a mesmerizing picture and poem to match. I enjoyed your selection of the Nonet as your vehicle--the shape echoes a cave! Your description is dramatic and intensified by the "blanket" simile. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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What a mesmerizing picture and poem to match. I enjoyed your selection of the Nonet as your vehicle--the shape echoes a cave! Your description is dramatic and intensified by the "blanket" simile. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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I really appreciate your review, Joan. I was hoping to share with the reader the angst and tension of the moment. Thanks for your comments.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
It must be terrifying to be entombed in a cave with nothing but darkness as you companion, Melissa. I find you poem chilling for you penned a Nonet with the feeling of one that feels overwhelmed. Pretty good descriptive words. :)
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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It must be terrifying to be entombed in a cave with nothing but darkness as you companion, Melissa. I find you poem chilling for you penned a Nonet with the feeling of one that feels overwhelmed. Pretty good descriptive words. :)
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much!! I wanted to convey to the reader the angst and tension of the moment. Thanks so much for your comments. :)
Melissa.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Nonet poem with a perfect triangular shape. It must be terrifying to get lost in a cave in complete darkness and no idea which way to go to find the light.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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A very well-written Nonet poem with a perfect triangular shape. It must be terrifying to get lost in a cave in complete darkness and no idea which way to go to find the light.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I?ve never been lost in a cave... this was just my imagination... I was trying to draw the reader into the angst and tension of the moment. Thanks for your comments.
Melissa
Comment from Chip Kuzborski
Very dark and dire, Melissa- I love it! I felt palpably chilly reading it, such wonderful imagery. I hope it's not where you find yourself...I suspect not. Just good writing.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Very dark and dire, Melissa- I love it! I felt palpably chilly reading it, such wonderful imagery. I hope it's not where you find yourself...I suspect not. Just good writing.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for your intuitive review, Chip. I wanted to draw the reader into the tension and angst of the moment... I?m glad you commented and let me know what you think.
Melissa
