Beauty's Pain
Because that vow affects lives beyond herself...23 total reviews
Comment from john mallahan
Your poem made me sad. Cause it is, isn't it, often the choices we make?
I know in my life, my mother often made choices, at least in her head. Don't think there were affairs, but ya never really know the internal heart. Have gotten lots of sadnesses from all that, and look, they're still together at the assisted living, playing out the madness to the end...
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reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Your poem made me sad. Cause it is, isn't it, often the choices we make?
I know in my life, my mother often made choices, at least in her head. Don't think there were affairs, but ya never really know the internal heart. Have gotten lots of sadnesses from all that, and look, they're still together at the assisted living, playing out the madness to the end...
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Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you... your rating of four stars indicates that there is something in the poem that needs to be 'fixed' or 'corrected' ... however, you suggested neither. As I am always looking to improve, it would be helpful if you would elaborate.. thanks! :) :)
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I think the rating was really more about content, then actual writing style. That was great! Just didn't really like the poem, because of the emotional response it illicited. JM
Comment from pome lover
well, congrats to you both! You had me worried there for a minute.
A very emotional piece - wow - your muse commands a lot.
Glad it's just a figment of your imagination.
Also congrats on being recognized. muy bueno!
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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well, congrats to you both! You had me worried there for a minute.
A very emotional piece - wow - your muse commands a lot.
Glad it's just a figment of your imagination.
Also congrats on being recognized. muy bueno!
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 17-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thanx so much for the congrats and the wonderful comments, Katharine... I find the muse tends to go a bit dark when we're under lots of stress.... but the clouds are finally clearing, HOORAY! ;) ;) You take care, Beautiful Texas Friend! :) ;) Yvette
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thank you!! and I'm glad to hear things are looking netter!
Katharine
Comment from victor 66
Real people with real lives, have their ups and downs. Some survive, others not so well. I remember waking up one morning and suddenly realized that a relationship I had had for ten years was over. There were certain words and mannerisms from our last meeting that didn't click in right away. When I finally called her to confirm my suspicions, she asked if I need to talk to someone professionally. I assured her I was ok. After that conversation, I never heard from her again. Yup, I get your poem. And, trust me... I relate.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Real people with real lives, have their ups and downs. Some survive, others not so well. I remember waking up one morning and suddenly realized that a relationship I had had for ten years was over. There were certain words and mannerisms from our last meeting that didn't click in right away. When I finally called her to confirm my suspicions, she asked if I need to talk to someone professionally. I assured her I was ok. After that conversation, I never heard from her again. Yup, I get your poem. And, trust me... I relate.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Oh, Victor, thank you so very much for your wonderful and sympathetic comments, sir - although, I do hope you have some good memories of the ten years to hold onto... you know, that's what we do sometimes, hold onto those memories and maybe, just maybe look forward to making some new ones... and the sun always comes up in the morning, right?!! So good to hear from you, as always -- take care! ;) ;) Yvette
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Yvette, perhaps I was a little bit too overboard in my story. It was a great 10 years with this lady. It's just that I moved so far away and we had begun to have so very little time together that I really don't think there was a possibility of it really working out. I have no regrets just appreciation. But I honestly appreciate your concern. I wish you well.
Comment from royowen
What a sad Acrostic, the lines are wrench at the heart as if to tear it from its moorings, beautifully written friend Yvette, my admiration, I rarely write anything fictional, although recently the urgent stronger. The presentation and the rhyming are superb, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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What a sad Acrostic, the lines are wrench at the heart as if to tear it from its moorings, beautifully written friend Yvette, my admiration, I rarely write anything fictional, although recently the urgent stronger. The presentation and the rhyming are superb, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanx for your review on this one, Roy -- This was definitely not my 'usual faire' and I was amazed at just how easily my mind (my muse?) poured this one out once I started....I am so glad that you enjoyed it! :) :) Lesson here? Never argue with the muse! ;) LOL! ;)
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That's True
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, if you were to ask me I'd say you're muse certainly did you proud penning this beautifully rendered example of an acrostic, Yvette.
Although it may not be autobiographical in nature, one has to think that at least some of what you've written is drawn from having "been there, done that" at some time or another.
My best wishes to you in the contest with this stunning entry.
~Dean
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Well, if you were to ask me I'd say you're muse certainly did you proud penning this beautifully rendered example of an acrostic, Yvette.
Although it may not be autobiographical in nature, one has to think that at least some of what you've written is drawn from having "been there, done that" at some time or another.
My best wishes to you in the contest with this stunning entry.
~Dean
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Wow, Dean -- you have no idea what those stars mean coming from you -- you humble me and make me smile from the inside out...THANK YOU! ;) :) You know, I learned early on if you don't put a note to that affect, folks automatically assume anything 'bad' you write about is about you and they ask all sorts of questions and send lots of well-meaning wishes and such.... so, putting the note there just avoids all that.... :) ;) I will say, however, Sir Dean, that you are a very astute reviewer ... I would think that to write something like this required just a bit of real emotion.. :) Thank you again, and you and the Gidg-Girl have a wonderful evening. ;) :) Yvette
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My pleasure.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent portrayal of a woman with a broken heart who fulfills her vow to her family even though she is suffering. Thanks for sharing this creative writing from the muse, your alter ego.
Bill
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Excellent portrayal of a woman with a broken heart who fulfills her vow to her family even though she is suffering. Thanks for sharing this creative writing from the muse, your alter ego.
Bill
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Definitely my alter-ego, sir -- who knows where the muse draws its inspirations/ideas... ?? :) :) Thank you for stopping by, Bill -- so glad you enjoyed. ;) Yvette
Comment from Heather Knight
It's a sad but beautiful story.
It must be difficult to decide whether to leave or stay if you aren't happy...
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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It's a sad but beautiful story.
It must be difficult to decide whether to leave or stay if you aren't happy...
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you so very much for your review on this one -- know it's not my usual fare.. :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette :)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very telling and heartfelt poem. Many a heart has discovered a soul mate too late and carried on through the years not looking back but not forgetting, The present demands our attention, but cannot obliterate our memories.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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A very telling and heartfelt poem. Many a heart has discovered a soul mate too late and carried on through the years not looking back but not forgetting, The present demands our attention, but cannot obliterate our memories.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you, Raffaelina, for your review and those wonderful comments -- I do so appreciate your dropping by for this one... please know the front porch always has a place for you to make yourself comfortable! :) :) Take care and have a great week ahead! :) :) Yvette
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a beautiful poem in its even rhyming rhythm and plaintive narration - it flows easily, and is dramatic, both in verse and image - the presentation is stunning, and the verse in full compliance with the prompt. I wish you the best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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In my opinion, a beautiful poem in its even rhyming rhythm and plaintive narration - it flows easily, and is dramatic, both in verse and image - the presentation is stunning, and the verse in full compliance with the prompt. I wish you the best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Oh, Eve, you humble me with those stars and, especially, with those lovely comments! ;) This was not my usual 'topic', but I'm glad it seems to have gone as well as it has... it was all the muse as I would never have chosen to write on this topic!! :) :) LOL! Thanx for your wonderful support, ma'am -- so much appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette
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You are so very welcome, dear Lady...Eve
Comment from Bucketlist
Okay, you found me out! Your acrostic is far more creative than many. It's amazing that it could be a story in a poem. I plus you for having creative talent after emerging from your busy family and school. Nothing negative hit me, this was a delight to read. Good luck in the contest.
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Okay, you found me out! Your acrostic is far more creative than many. It's amazing that it could be a story in a poem. I plus you for having creative talent after emerging from your busy family and school. Nothing negative hit me, this was a delight to read. Good luck in the contest.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanx for your review on this one, Trisha -- you know, I didn't even look at it as a story until you and a few others pointed it out.. it was seriously one of those pieces that my muse wrote and not me: it is definitely not my 'usual' and I would never had set out to write this.... but, just as soon as I sat down, this happened! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed it, ma'am! :) :) You take care over there! :) :) Yvette
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Just tell me which contests you?re entering, and I won?t even bother to ? run against? your talent! LOL
