Hushed Revelation
A 25-Syllable Poem Contest Offering9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-five-syllable poem, Hushed Revelation, has the required syllable count and finds that total elimination of input is not what we want. It is the uninterrupted, audible reminders of what is dear that matter.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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This twenty-five-syllable poem, Hushed Revelation, has the required syllable count and finds that total elimination of input is not what we want. It is the uninterrupted, audible reminders of what is dear that matter.
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Thanx for your review on this one, Sir Bill, and I'm so glad you could relate to the meaning! ;) ;) Take care out there - Yvette :)
Comment from WryWriter
I count 25 syllables as required in writing prompt. So true! Complete silence is a curse to a human soul that craves contact. Fantastic write! Good artwork choice for theme.
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I count 25 syllables as required in writing prompt. So true! Complete silence is a curse to a human soul that craves contact. Fantastic write! Good artwork choice for theme.
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, ma'am -- it's always so good to hear from you!! :) ;) Glad someone else understood the meaning on this one -- take care out there this week! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about the people who don't reveal their inner feelings to others and keep more to themselves. They also need some form of life in their souls to remind them they are human too.
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about the people who don't reveal their inner feelings to others and keep more to themselves. They also need some form of life in their souls to remind them they are human too.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Thank you for your review here, Sandra -- and thanx for always 'getting' what I'm trying to put out there... really means a lot! :) ;)
**My apologies for being so tardy in my reply! I actually managed to post but not much of anything else this week! :( Final exams dominated life (taking some time with tea this morning before life takes over again) and the weekend of moving sons is not finished -- all my grades are in, though - hooray!! :) :) LOL! Take good care and have a great Sunday! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments here, we can't stay silent for long and crave company and to hear our own voice just to feel human again, I have a suggestion for the middle line:
(The quietest soul)
It's just a suggestion to help with the flow,
Best wishes for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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I enjoyed the sentiments here, we can't stay silent for long and crave company and to hear our own voice just to feel human again, I have a suggestion for the middle line:
(The quietest soul)
It's just a suggestion to help with the flow,
Best wishes for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for your review and your suggestion; unfortunately, it would require a complete re-write as this is a syllable-limited contest.
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These syllables match your original syllable count, but of course the choice is always that of the poet, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well first and foremost, this one meets the criteria in terms of syllable count.
It gives a nice message for the reader to ponder. I always enjoy when a poet inserts interesting and unpredictable words into a piece seamlessly.
very nice job
GMG
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Hi there,
Well first and foremost, this one meets the criteria in terms of syllable count.
It gives a nice message for the reader to ponder. I always enjoy when a poet inserts interesting and unpredictable words into a piece seamlessly.
very nice job
GMG
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Indeed it does.
A very wise poetic offering with careful, wise and powerful word choices to add impact and depth to the subject.
The pensive, somewhat sad image is a perfect complement to the words.
The last two lines hammer the first two home.
Good luck.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Indeed it does.
A very wise poetic offering with careful, wise and powerful word choices to add impact and depth to the subject.
The pensive, somewhat sad image is a perfect complement to the words.
The last two lines hammer the first two home.
Good luck.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for your review and your lovely comments, Shirley. ;)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, what a fabulous poem! It evokes layer after layer of deep thought and possible meanings -- true silence would mean no heartbeat I guess, but then, if a tree falls in the forest and no one is there to hear it...
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Wow, what a fabulous poem! It evokes layer after layer of deep thought and possible meanings -- true silence would mean no heartbeat I guess, but then, if a tree falls in the forest and no one is there to hear it...
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Oh, Dawn! You have put a smile on my tired face this morning, ma'am!! :) ;) I'm so glad you seem to have found what I was trying to say here... makes me smile on the inside, too, just to know that!! :) See? You and I are really on the same wavelength! :) ;) You take care up there, O Lady of the North, and tell Miss Priss I said hi! Oh, and know that I'm sending some of my shiny stars back to you both! :) :) Yvette
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Being considered on your wavelength is a high compliment to me, Yvette. :))
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Quite the contrary, I have enjoyed my anathema - just joking it is my way of saying I have made the lemonade of my lemons. I am however a loner and I enjoy silence. But a great 25 cent word ma'am - and that is what I look for! I love my vocabulary! You find that I am a mischievous person when it comes to words in FS. This was a great entry for the contest! Good luck! Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Quite the contrary, I have enjoyed my anathema - just joking it is my way of saying I have made the lemonade of my lemons. I am however a loner and I enjoy silence. But a great 25 cent word ma'am - and that is what I look for! I love my vocabulary! You find that I am a mischievous person when it comes to words in FS. This was a great entry for the contest! Good luck! Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for your review, Fonda -- glad to join the 25 cent club. ;) ;)
Comment from moongirlwriter
Wow, this very short poem is filled with profound meaning, beautifully written. The artwork goes well with the writing too. . .the very best of luck to you in this contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Wow, this very short poem is filled with profound meaning, beautifully written. The artwork goes well with the writing too. . .the very best of luck to you in this contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Oh my goodness, MoonGirl -- your review made me smile with just a bit of a tear in my eye this morning with those truly awesome comments... so glad you seem to have really gotten out of this one what I had intended! :) ;) Thank you, THANK YOU! :) ;)
**My apologies for being so tardy in my reply! I actually managed to post but not much of anything else this week! :( Final exams dominated life (taking some time with tea this morning before ?life? takes over again) and the weekend of ?moving sons? is not finished ? all my grades are in, though - hooray!! :) :) LOL! Take good care and have a great Sunday! ;) Yvette
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