My LIttle June Bug
True Story Contest6 total reviews
Comment from RodG
Wow! It's hard to believe what you went through BEFORE your son's birth--the absence of caring family and father of the child, indifferent staff workers, and just plain loneliness. I think your story would benefit from additional details of your labor, especially those last few hours (in the cab and after). I applaud your courage, Mom.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Wow! It's hard to believe what you went through BEFORE your son's birth--the absence of caring family and father of the child, indifferent staff workers, and just plain loneliness. I think your story would benefit from additional details of your labor, especially those last few hours (in the cab and after). I applaud your courage, Mom.
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Dear RodG, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
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My pleasure. Happy Mother's Day! Rod
Comment from 24chas
This was a beautiful and sad story, dovemarie. I'm glad it ended the way it did. I don't understand people and the way they act. You were obviously distraught and no one could help you. Shameful. Nice job of writing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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This was a beautiful and sad story, dovemarie. I'm glad it ended the way it did. I don't understand people and the way they act. You were obviously distraught and no one could help you. Shameful. Nice job of writing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Dear 24chas, Thank you for your comments, review and good luck wishes. Dove
Comment from JudyE
How awful that you had so little support during this difficult time. It must have been painful to recall and record these memories. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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How awful that you had so little support during this difficult time. It must have been painful to recall and record these memories. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Dear JudyE, thank you for your comments, review and good luck wishes.
Comment from Brian Taylor1
Wow! Glad to see that the staff was really in your corner. Joke of a halfway house. That guy could have sprung into action and gave you a ride and not only sponged up all the excitement but give out words of encouragement, words of wisdom words of....nothing as he sat and drove in silence as the world was about to get better. Babies have that power. He obviously doesn't get the beauty of human depth. Your story could spin off into a bunch of other one's. I write this with compassion. Their is a ton of heartfelt humor in your description of probably one of the greatest times of yours and little Junebug's life. From the born again christian [where was he? The bar? lol!] Your mother, if she gave you a ride. Just that raw funny way of showing tough love as your sitting there like a beached whale about to burst [please, no red lights] Also the lady at the halfway house. Harsh words but there's honest expression in that that made the story more interesting. It had, all in the matter of hours, a movie, a show, a book chapter written all over it. Great job. Oh, and the end result, the reason for that awesome unique write/read [the birth] another inspiration for the reader to visualize and be inspired. A pleasure to read. Keep writing
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Wow! Glad to see that the staff was really in your corner. Joke of a halfway house. That guy could have sprung into action and gave you a ride and not only sponged up all the excitement but give out words of encouragement, words of wisdom words of....nothing as he sat and drove in silence as the world was about to get better. Babies have that power. He obviously doesn't get the beauty of human depth. Your story could spin off into a bunch of other one's. I write this with compassion. Their is a ton of heartfelt humor in your description of probably one of the greatest times of yours and little Junebug's life. From the born again christian [where was he? The bar? lol!] Your mother, if she gave you a ride. Just that raw funny way of showing tough love as your sitting there like a beached whale about to burst [please, no red lights] Also the lady at the halfway house. Harsh words but there's honest expression in that that made the story more interesting. It had, all in the matter of hours, a movie, a show, a book chapter written all over it. Great job. Oh, and the end result, the reason for that awesome unique write/read [the birth] another inspiration for the reader to visualize and be inspired. A pleasure to read. Keep writing
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Dear Brian, Thank you for all your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a heartfelt write filled with fear and uncertainty and not the way to bring a child into the world, but you were brave and faced the task ahead with strength and I enjoyed your story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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This is a heartfelt write filled with fear and uncertainty and not the way to bring a child into the world, but you were brave and faced the task ahead with strength and I enjoyed your story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your comments and review. Love, Donna x
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
So sorry for the situation behind the story, but it was gently written and joyful in the end. I remember that particular look so well. I interpreted it just as you did. The use of the unfolding flower in the artwork is quite lovely and evocative of the red hot pain that brought such beauty. Well done. - Wendy
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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So sorry for the situation behind the story, but it was gently written and joyful in the end. I remember that particular look so well. I interpreted it just as you did. The use of the unfolding flower in the artwork is quite lovely and evocative of the red hot pain that brought such beauty. Well done. - Wendy
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Dear Wendy, I was just thinking of you a day or so ago! Thanks for your comments, compliment for the artwork, and review. Hope to see some of your poetry again. Donna
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It has taken over a month to post just three new ones, but I am trying to get back into the habit. I have missed you all.
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Dear Wendy, We miss you too. Keep trying! Donna (Dove)