A Carnal Victory
Yes, nature has its cruel mistresses as well...11 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
It's just as good as the first time I've read it, perhaps better. I love the way that the flower speaks to the bee letting it know who is in charge. I love this yet again. Well done!
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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It's just as good as the first time I've read it, perhaps better. I love the way that the flower speaks to the bee letting it know who is in charge. I love this yet again. Well done!
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Wow -- your comments are just wonderful to hear this morning, Jeffrey -- I had a little fun with this one so, I'm glad you took it in the good humor in which it was written. :) ;) Thanx for taking the time and have a great weekend, sir! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This stacked 5-7-5 suite, A Carnal Victory, has the proper formatting and finds that randy bee getting Miss Blossoms 'essence' all over him. Now he'll slag to the next blushing bloom and have a go. The jokes on him, I guess.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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This stacked 5-7-5 suite, A Carnal Victory, has the proper formatting and finds that randy bee getting Miss Blossoms 'essence' all over him. Now he'll slag to the next blushing bloom and have a go. The jokes on him, I guess.
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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LOL! :) Thanx for your review on this one, Bill -- much appreciated, Sir! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Rachelle Allen
If those Helicopter Parents of yours get wind of this, Yvette - that cross-pollination is actually an act of shameless hussy-ness- all Biology textbooks will be confiscated and replaced with ones containing kinder, far more wholesome concepts! Their babies cannot be exposed to such a tawdry display as bees covered in the essence of multiple nectar. Tsk, tsk, tsk!!
VERY cool and unique slant here!! I love it. xo
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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If those Helicopter Parents of yours get wind of this, Yvette - that cross-pollination is actually an act of shameless hussy-ness- all Biology textbooks will be confiscated and replaced with ones containing kinder, far more wholesome concepts! Their babies cannot be exposed to such a tawdry display as bees covered in the essence of multiple nectar. Tsk, tsk, tsk!!
VERY cool and unique slant here!! I love it. xo
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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You are so very funny, Rachelle... you actually managed to crack the first big smile on my face for the morning, and you know what that means? That I'll be able to relax more and not be uptight about driving my brother around (and knowing I've got finals here at home waiting for me to grade them - lol!). Thank you, my wonderful special long-distance friend ... you are certainly a gift! :) ;) Thank you and have a great day, Beautiful Lady!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from judester
I believe this one was the winner. The seductive personification and flow created a vivid image of sexual intent and conquest. Bravo you, judester
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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I believe this one was the winner. The seductive personification and flow created a vivid image of sexual intent and conquest. Bravo you, judester
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Oh, Judester! I do so apologize for not responding before now, but thank you so very much for these lovely stars, ma'am -- your wonderful comments really put a positive vein into an otherwise crazy week! So glad my 'fun flower innuendos' played out with you as I had hoped they would with readers! ;) :) **My apologies -- behind again! I actually managed to post but not anything else this week! :( Final exams dominated life (taking a break from grading this morning) and the weekend of ?moving sons? is gonna be BUSY!! :) :) LOL! Take good care and have a great weekend yourself! ;) Yvette
Comment from LisaMay
This is terrific! Your poem puts the act of pollination into the realm of sensual enticement and fulfilment, assurance of the continuation of your kind. A wonderful stack featuring sweet success.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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This is terrific! Your poem puts the act of pollination into the realm of sensual enticement and fulfilment, assurance of the continuation of your kind. A wonderful stack featuring sweet success.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, LisaM! ;)
Comment from beizanten
a very beautiful picture. A short, simple yet beautifully written first stanza. a beautifully written and rather sexy first paragraph. A great third stanza. You have done great, in a way this remind me of sex, flower-sex.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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a very beautiful picture. A short, simple yet beautifully written first stanza. a beautifully written and rather sexy first paragraph. A great third stanza. You have done great, in a way this remind me of sex, flower-sex.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Wow, beizanten! ;) Your wonderful review and encouraging comments have just made my day!! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed my 'flowery innuendos' -- I was giggling a bit as I wrote it! :) ;) Thank you and have a wonderful week! ;) :)
Comment from Ogden
Your point is well-articulated, but the bee cares not, and will answer Mother Nature's requirements as instructed (praiseworthy stack notwithstanding).
Good luck in the contest.
Don
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Your point is well-articulated, but the bee cares not, and will answer Mother Nature's requirements as instructed (praiseworthy stack notwithstanding).
Good luck in the contest.
Don
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Thank you for your review, Ogden. ;)
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You're very welcome.
Don
Comment from Chrissy710
Oh this is so sensual and beautifuuly constructed in the stacked format. creative in the words that could mean many things Excellent use of metaphors and a worthy six Good luck in the contest I will be surprised if does not win Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Oh this is so sensual and beautifuuly constructed in the stacked format. creative in the words that could mean many things Excellent use of metaphors and a worthy six Good luck in the contest I will be surprised if does not win Cheers Christine
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Oh, Chrissy, you just made my entire week, ma'am!! :) Life's been so busy I've not had much time, if any, for my writing and to see those lovely stars and wonderful comments on the time I allotted myself today, is just the best sunshine-smile ever!! :) ;) Thank you! ;)
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You are so welcome🌞🌞
Comment from Earl Corp
Your last line made your poem seem ominous to me. It reminded me of the last line of a horror story that is to be continued. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Your last line made your poem seem ominous to me. It reminded me of the last line of a horror story that is to be continued. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Thank you for your review. :)
Comment from victor 66
This is a very nice play on words making a rather sensual and seductive monologue after the deed is done. This is reminiscent of an adolescent getting the story about the birds and the bees. Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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This is a very nice play on words making a rather sensual and seductive monologue after the deed is done. This is reminiscent of an adolescent getting the story about the birds and the bees. Best wishes.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Thank you for your review. :)
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You're welcome.
