Lest We Forget
A tribute to those who gave the ultimate sacrifice39 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Well done, author. I think overall this poem tells the story very well. Of course nothing can bring back the brave souls who sacrificed the ultimate with their lives.
"Uncommon valor was a common virtue" as it says at the base of the Iwo Jima flag raising statue.
If possible, the only change I might make would be this stanza which seems a bit off in rhythm:
"War raged in Europe,
Leaving people without hope,
Once we landed in Normandy,
Germany could barely grope."
Bless you, my friend. Salute! Semper Fi! Bob
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Well done, author. I think overall this poem tells the story very well. Of course nothing can bring back the brave souls who sacrificed the ultimate with their lives.
"Uncommon valor was a common virtue" as it says at the base of the Iwo Jima flag raising statue.
If possible, the only change I might make would be this stanza which seems a bit off in rhythm:
"War raged in Europe,
Leaving people without hope,
Once we landed in Normandy,
Germany could barely grope."
Bless you, my friend. Salute! Semper Fi! Bob
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you Bob for reading and reviewing my work.
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It is very good writing at that. :) Bob
Comment from fm wright
To me it is a poem that touches the heart and causes one to pause and think. I like the way you mentioned many wars. It is a wonderful tribute to those who made the ultimate sacrifice and I wish you the best with this entry.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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To me it is a poem that touches the heart and causes one to pause and think. I like the way you mentioned many wars. It is a wonderful tribute to those who made the ultimate sacrifice and I wish you the best with this entry.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are very much welcome!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine memorial poem and you covered the wars of recent times here and so many lives were lost collectively, we must never forget those souls lost, best wishes, love, Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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A fine memorial poem and you covered the wars of recent times here and so many lives were lost collectively, we must never forget those souls lost, best wishes, love, Dolly x
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you Dolly, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from L. A. Stanley
Well done! You wrote about just all of the US wars beginning with WW1, then came up to Afghanistan and Iraq. So, you managed to write about past and present. I think your rhymes were tight. It's hard to find good rhyming words that deal with such a difficult subject, but I think you accomplished that.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Well done! You wrote about just all of the US wars beginning with WW1, then came up to Afghanistan and Iraq. So, you managed to write about past and present. I think your rhymes were tight. It's hard to find good rhyming words that deal with such a difficult subject, but I think you accomplished that.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the wars we fight and the many lives lost cannot be for gotten. The only problem with war is that it create more problems than solving anything.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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A very well-written poem about the wars we fight and the many lives lost cannot be for gotten. The only problem with war is that it create more problems than solving anything.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much Sandra. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, kindness is not warranted with this write, but appreciation is - a stunning poem in its heartfelt tribute to those who fought and to those who fought and died. The rhyming rhythm is of little concern with such a glorious write, but it is certainly smooth enough for a lyric and emotional read. Thank you for sharing...
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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In my opinion, kindness is not warranted with this write, but appreciation is - a stunning poem in its heartfelt tribute to those who fought and to those who fought and died. The rhyming rhythm is of little concern with such a glorious write, but it is certainly smooth enough for a lyric and emotional read. Thank you for sharing...
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You're very welcome...Eve
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love the message of this. We should never forget and always remember the brave souls that sacrificed life and limb for us. I enjoyed reading this well written offering. Well done!
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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I love the message of this. We should never forget and always remember the brave souls that sacrificed life and limb for us. I enjoyed reading this well written offering. Well done!
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Thank You very much Jeffrey. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
I agree. Sometimes the words are what really matter and sometimes we really do get too hung up on all the logistics of poetry-writing. This was a cool piece and lovely way to remind us to be thankful to all who've served and given the highest and best gift of all.
Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Dear Mystery Poet,
I agree. Sometimes the words are what really matter and sometimes we really do get too hung up on all the logistics of poetry-writing. This was a cool piece and lovely way to remind us to be thankful to all who've served and given the highest and best gift of all.
Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Thank you Robyn, glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Reese Turner
A sharp salute from an old Nam-era sailor who still feels some guilt and being able to come home. Like the rhyming and the crisp points. Will think of it as my American Legion post places flags on the 25th.
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A sharp salute from an old Nam-era sailor who still feels some guilt and being able to come home. Like the rhyming and the crisp points. Will think of it as my American Legion post places flags on the 25th.
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Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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That is the greatest honor you could pay me. That's better than a six star rating to me. Thank you for your service. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
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From your writing, I assume you are a Veteran, too. For most of us, EVERY day is Memorial Day because we think of those who did not come home every day. And, my love and respect for them and America only grows.
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Amen brother!!
