Lest We Forget
A tribute to those who gave the ultimate sacrifice39 total reviews
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Excellent, a very sad commentary. We seem to be fighting someone all the time. Many young men lie in foreign graves all over the world. Yet, some of our Americans, mostly young, disrespect our fighting men and women and our great country. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Excellent, a very sad commentary. We seem to be fighting someone all the time. Many young men lie in foreign graves all over the world. Yet, some of our Americans, mostly young, disrespect our fighting men and women and our great country. Excellent post.
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Hard to attack a poem about fallen heroes so you may not be on sacred ground but at least safe ground. I agree some rhymes feel like a stretch and some lines are not well connected. Revisit this work. You can always make edits. Even after the contest ends. Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Hard to attack a poem about fallen heroes so you may not be on sacred ground but at least safe ground. I agree some rhymes feel like a stretch and some lines are not well connected. Revisit this work. You can always make edits. Even after the contest ends. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words, I took third place. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Beri Bee
This is an incredibly stirring Memorial Day tribute! Well done! Every rhyme is perfect, every stanza is moving. Thank you for penning this lovely poem! "As many will attest, we sent our bightest and best." Those lines really makes me want to cry.
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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This is an incredibly stirring Memorial Day tribute! Well done! Every rhyme is perfect, every stanza is moving. Thank you for penning this lovely poem! "As many will attest, we sent our bightest and best." Those lines really makes me want to cry.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words, I took third place. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Congratulations on a third place ribbon! (I know those are hard to come by.) In any event, it's a first-place poem!
Comment from victor 66
Memorial day has always been important to me since I was 15 and my father was killed in a car accident. He was in World War II stationed in the Philippines. When I told him before he was killed, I was planning on joining the Marine Corps, he said that it shoot me in the leg first. But he wasn't there to stop me. So I spent 22 months in Vietnam about the same amount of time he spent in the Philippines. Every chance I get I put flowers on my mothers grave and a flag on my dad's grave. I never thought I'd see the age of 20 when I was in Vietnam. Now I'm going to be 72 the first part of June. I appreciate your tribute to my my fallen brothers. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Memorial day has always been important to me since I was 15 and my father was killed in a car accident. He was in World War II stationed in the Philippines. When I told him before he was killed, I was planning on joining the Marine Corps, he said that it shoot me in the leg first. But he wasn't there to stop me. So I spent 22 months in Vietnam about the same amount of time he spent in the Philippines. Every chance I get I put flowers on my mothers grave and a flag on my dad's grave. I never thought I'd see the age of 20 when I was in Vietnam. Now I'm going to be 72 the first part of June. I appreciate your tribute to my my fallen brothers. Best wishes.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Welcome home brother and thank you for your service. This was a special write for me too. I'm third of four generations Army. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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It was my pleasure, Earl. I wish you well.
Comment from BlueTiger
Great work, I think really enjoyed reading this. I like the flow as the poem moves through history. My only critique would be to tighten up the rhyme scheme where you can, such as here;
Once we landed in Normandy,
Inevitable defeat for Germany
Sometimes it just takes the change of a couple of words to make it flow better. All in all great work though. Thanks for posting, best of luck on the contest,
-BT
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Great work, I think really enjoyed reading this. I like the flow as the poem moves through history. My only critique would be to tighten up the rhyme scheme where you can, such as here;
Once we landed in Normandy,
Inevitable defeat for Germany
Sometimes it just takes the change of a couple of words to make it flow better. All in all great work though. Thanks for posting, best of luck on the contest,
-BT
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much Blue Tiger. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from doggymad1
A very thought provoking work that details so many wars and battles. Normally I would give a four for this, as the aa,bb format is a little to light for such a serious topic.
However you have made your point well and I can see how your thoughts flowed easily
Freda
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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A very thought provoking work that details so many wars and battles. Normally I would give a four for this, as the aa,bb format is a little to light for such a serious topic.
However you have made your point well and I can see how your thoughts flowed easily
Freda
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much Freda. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from rjuselius
indeed, this does come from the heart and yes, the meter and rhyme are not that well crafted but the purpose is bigger than the actual outcome.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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indeed, this does come from the heart and yes, the meter and rhyme are not that well crafted but the purpose is bigger than the actual outcome.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much Rebekka. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Gail Denham
You've summed it up so well - would that our young people - the ones in college and a bit older could even remember history - even many older folks don't get it. We stand for a safe America. We stand for displaced persons - and against evil. And our military stand between. Thanks for all the reminders. And we thank the men and women who protected and defended.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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You've summed it up so well - would that our young people - the ones in college and a bit older could even remember history - even many older folks don't get it. We stand for a safe America. We stand for displaced persons - and against evil. And our military stand between. Thanks for all the reminders. And we thank the men and women who protected and defended.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much Gail. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LisaMay
I can see how it happened that once you started it was hard to stop, for a couple of reasons: you wrote it from the heart and got into the emotion of your topic, and also, there have been so many damn wars to mention! You have penned a fine memorial poem of respect to honour the fallen.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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I can see how it happened that once you started it was hard to stop, for a couple of reasons: you wrote it from the heart and got into the emotion of your topic, and also, there have been so many damn wars to mention! You have penned a fine memorial poem of respect to honour the fallen.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Heather Knight
I know nothing about meter and rhyme so I can't give you my expert opinion, but I like how your poem sounds and what it says.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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I know nothing about meter and rhyme so I can't give you my expert opinion, but I like how your poem sounds and what it says.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much Maria. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
