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Faerie Dust

TRIBUS OCTO ... A Children's Story Poem

13 total reviews 
Comment from juliaSjames
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I doubt I have the expertise to try something as complicated as a Tribus Octo, but I thoroughly enjoyed your whimsical write. Garden fairies are an integral part of childhood and I love reliving that experience with my grandchildren.

Kudos on your win.

I don't know if you crossed paths with the late Brooke Baldwin (adewpearl) who was a premier poet on this site. But your poem reminded me of her whimsical streak. And brought a smile!

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019
    Hello Julia! Thank you for reading and for the wonderful review. No, I did not know her...but have friends here that did. :-) I started writing about 3 years ago when I joined FS. She was well loved here...wish I had known her.
reply by juliaSjames on 06-Jul-2019
    It was my pleasure to review. Enjoy the weekend!
Comment from Ms. Snyder
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Magnificent poem SusanJohn,
It is a stunning choice and I can see why it won! What a rhyme scheme another one I need to add to the list to learn! Tribus Octo (Three on Eight) what a wonderful theme also that you threaded about the fairies! Just a beautiful and whimsical offering that I adored! As much as I would like to have given a 6 I ran out around 1 pm today. So it has to be my Virtual Six but it deserves a freaking 10! Cheers, Fonda

 Comment Written 06-May-2019


reply by the author on 17-May-2019
    Good morning Fonda! ( sorry for late reply) Thank you so much for this simply marvelous review!! I wanted to try and write something more geered towards children...and well faeries came out! lol Thanks again, I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review! :-)
Comment from Sally Law
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Way to go, sweet girl. I must have fanned you after this entry or missed it somehow. This is sweet and magical. You have grown leaps and bounds in your poetry. A daily inspiration to me! Congratulations on your deserving win!
Always my best to you and yours,
Sal xo

 Comment Written 05-May-2019


reply by the author on 17-May-2019
    Good morning Sal! Thank you for taking the time to read and review! There is always something new to learn in poetry huh? :-) Thank you for the kind words.
reply by Sally Law on 17-May-2019
    You are most welcome!
    Sal xo
Comment from Dean Kuch
Exceptional
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I don't believe I have ever had the pleasure of reading a poem written in the Tribus Octo form before now, Susan.
This entry featured a very unique rhyme scheme, wonderfully well written imagery and an interesting story about faeries and sprites as well.
It's quite easy to see why this won the contest.
Congratulations, nice work!
~Dean

 Comment Written 04-May-2019


reply by the author on 04-May-2019
    Dean!! You're here!! and with six stars!! Omgooodness! Thank you so much for this wonderful review! I have so much respect for you and your writing I am completely honored...I think I'm going to cry ( don't worry, I cry a lot lol) This form is an original by Richard Jenkins. I thought I would try it out on this litle children's poem. Thank you for stopping by and giving it a look. :-) I hope you're having a great weekend...Thanks again, Awwww.
reply by Dean Kuch on 05-May-2019
    You're welcome, Susan.
    It was a pleasure as always.
    ~Dean
Comment from Bill Schott
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This Tribus Octo, Faerie Dust, has the proper formatting and finds a moment of sprite delight as one open soul witnesses the fun had by little fairies in the midst of nature. Fun little story.

 Comment Written 03-May-2019


reply by the author on 03-May-2019
    Aw Thank you for your kind review! I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little whimsical piece. Have a great day!! :-)
Comment from Richard J
Exceptional
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Well, goodness, Susan!
What a gorgeous rendition of the Tribus Octo you've created, and what an amazing imagination one sees dancing vibrantly upon the page into our own fantasies ... you've sprinkled fairy dust and created your own little miniature world of poetic wonder.
The form is spot-on, the imagery vivid and clear, and your lines have a jaunty, happy-go-lucky feel that lifts the spirits and inspired an appreciative smile ... presentation and picture seem virtually perfect to me, as-well.
It seems you've met the contest's requirements in verse, rhyme, and story, that should either win or place nicely for you!

Excellent, Susan, truly ... big hug of thanks for the fun, the generous points, and the cents! ~ Richard : )

 Comment Written 03-May-2019


reply by the author on 03-May-2019
    Richard....these reviews are better than the poem!! But Thank you!! :-)
    I love your original forms!! Thank you for introducing it to me. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this fun little poem.
Comment from WalkerMan
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Both children and adults still "young at heart" will delight in this flawless story-in-a-poem (Tribus Octo) of faeries cavorting in a flowery meadow. Superb, and well-matched to its illustration.

 Comment Written 02-May-2019


reply by the author on 03-May-2019
    Hi Mike, thank you for this awesome review!!! I think I made the corrections. I can't use "sublime" because it's not a true line..I did change that line though. Thanks again for your kind words. Always appreciated.
reply by WalkerMan on 03-May-2019
    You are most welcome. I see your corrections, but the system won't let me alter my review accordingly because I have no spare Sixes (a programming error). I'll change it as soon as I have my next allotment.
    -- Mike
Comment from poetwatch
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Mother Nature loving her kingdom in fairyland as well as being nosey. :) This is a good story that can be read for children of all ages (like me.) You paint a picture with the words you have penned. This is a good entry for the Story Poem contest.

 Comment Written 02-May-2019


reply by the author on 03-May-2019
    :-) Thank you kindly for this smile making review! :-))))))))))))))
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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There is a magical, transformational, fantastic and colourful story of romantic faerie; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Write to inspire changes for years--DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 02-May-2019


reply by the author on 03-May-2019
    Thank you kindly for this lovely review! I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review! Have a wonderful day :-)))))))))))
Comment from Sara R.
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I love how your poem flows. I can smell the flowers. I imagine what spring truly looks like by reading your poem. It's spring now but where I live, it's either cold or hot, never an in between. Keep up the good work.

Sara R.

 Comment Written 02-May-2019


reply by the author on 03-May-2019
    Thank you for this sweet review!!!