Legend of the Snowy River ride
An entry for the Rhyme Horses/horses24 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
wow - your rendition is great.
The Man from Snowy River is one of my favorite movies. I've watched that "ride down the mountain" many times - in fact, now that you've reminded me, I think I'll watch it again,
good job and good luck in the contest.
pome lover
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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wow - your rendition is great.
The Man from Snowy River is one of my favorite movies. I've watched that "ride down the mountain" many times - in fact, now that you've reminded me, I think I'll watch it again,
good job and good luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Hi poem lover, Thanks you very much for your review and giving my poem a six star rating I am so honoured. Also very happy to let you know I won the contest and thank everyone who may have voted for my poem. I also love the man from snowy river grew up with my father reciting it. so I hope Banjo is also pleased. Yes watch it a great movie. Many Cheers Christine
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Christine - I decided to write you first, then go to the contest site and vote. when I got there, voting was closed, so I am delighted that you won. good for you.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from moongirlwriter
I guess I didn't know the man from Snowy River was an Aussie. :) This is a moving story that kept me thinking about the movie which I'm having a hard time remembering. Well-written with a nice flow. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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I guess I didn't know the man from Snowy River was an Aussie. :) This is a moving story that kept me thinking about the movie which I'm having a hard time remembering. Well-written with a nice flow. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Hi Moongirlwriter, Thanks for your review and yes a true blue Aussie the high mountain men can ride very well.The moview wasnt bad bit the original poem is the best. Had a win so I am thrilled Cheers Christine
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Yes, congratulations to you!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a sterling write, well presented in verse and photograph, and almost perfect in rhyming rhythm, but for a few spots, easily corrected by reading aloud several times. This is usually remedied by either deleting, or adding, a word or two here and there.
"3. Listen to your rhythm. (Or have someone listen to it.) Edward Hirsch, author of A Poet's Glossary, was quoted in an article, describing what rhythm does to poetry:
"The sense of flowing, which is so crucial to song, is also crucial to poetry. But when poetry separates from song, then the words have to carry all the rhythm themselves, they have to do all the work. One of the things that distinguishes poetry from ordinary speech is that in a very few number of words, poetry captures some kind of deep feelings, and rhythm is the way to get there. Rhythm is the way the poetry carries itself."
To apply rhythm, you need utter the lines, speak them up and read them inside as well. If something is out of tune, if there is an excess syllable, if a line does not fit the rest of the poem, change them.
Or ask someone to read it for you or read it to a friend. Be open to criticism, to suggestions or feedback."
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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In my opinion, a sterling write, well presented in verse and photograph, and almost perfect in rhyming rhythm, but for a few spots, easily corrected by reading aloud several times. This is usually remedied by either deleting, or adding, a word or two here and there.
"3. Listen to your rhythm. (Or have someone listen to it.) Edward Hirsch, author of A Poet's Glossary, was quoted in an article, describing what rhythm does to poetry:
"The sense of flowing, which is so crucial to song, is also crucial to poetry. But when poetry separates from song, then the words have to carry all the rhythm themselves, they have to do all the work. One of the things that distinguishes poetry from ordinary speech is that in a very few number of words, poetry captures some kind of deep feelings, and rhythm is the way to get there. Rhythm is the way the poetry carries itself."
To apply rhythm, you need utter the lines, speak them up and read them inside as well. If something is out of tune, if there is an excess syllable, if a line does not fit the rest of the poem, change them.
Or ask someone to read it for you or read it to a friend. Be open to criticism, to suggestions or feedback."
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Eve, Thanks very much for your review and I have taken your advice and revised it I hope it reads more smoothly now (some line I needed 10 syllables for the meter but hope they are Ok If you careca reread I would appreciate your comments Cheers Christine
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Hi, Christine,
I provided the information I hoped would be of interest and perhaps some help to you from an expert. I am not an expert and do not consider myself qualified to proceed further in this exchange. I wish you the best in your work, always, and the best of luck in the contest...Eve
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Hi Eve just to let you know I had a win with my poem so thanks for your advice Cheers Christine
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Dear Christine,
Congratulations! I cannot say how delighted I am, but not at all surprised. Please don't thank me for anything, least of all, my advice. You are a gifted writer. As I said in my review, a "sterling write"...Eve
Comment from Tina Crute
I enjoyed not only the content of this but the artistry. The poems background is brown and long and it almost looks like the rider going down the hill. I. Watch a movie by the title really enjoyed it, and I enjoyed your poem as well. I like how you wrapped up the poem in your last stanza .
Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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I enjoyed not only the content of this but the artistry. The poems background is brown and long and it almost looks like the rider going down the hill. I. Watch a movie by the title really enjoyed it, and I enjoyed your poem as well. I like how you wrapped up the poem in your last stanza .
Beautifully done!
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Tina, Thanks so much I enjoyed the challenge of writing this and hope ai did Banjo proud Cheers
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I think you did do
him proud:)
Comment from Suzie Q
Wonderful story! Your perfect rhyme made it flow well. Very descriptive and detailed. You could almost make this into a song.It was a delight to read. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Wonderful story! Your perfect rhyme made it flow well. Very descriptive and detailed. You could almost make this into a song.It was a delight to read. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi SuzieQ, Thank you for your lovely review I enjoyed the challenge and had a pretty good mise for thos one on Banjo Cheers for your good luck Christine
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I loved the movie, loved the legend and love your poem. I'm also inspired to read Banjo Patterson's poem again, it's been a while!
You wrote this with a real Aussie flavour, and incorporate the history of the bush horses along with the man from Snowy River's dare-devilish ride into a very readable and very enjoyable poem indeed. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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I loved the movie, loved the legend and love your poem. I'm also inspired to read Banjo Patterson's poem again, it's been a while!
You wrote this with a real Aussie flavour, and incorporate the history of the bush horses along with the man from Snowy River's dare-devilish ride into a very readable and very enjoyable poem indeed. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Gypsymooncat, Thanks for reading my poem for this contest and ai tried to stick with the meter and theme a little I love this poem and used Banjo for my muse Cheers for your good luck Christine
Comment from rspoet
Hello Writer,
This is a wonderful poem and entry for the rhyme/horses contest.
Marvelous rhyming, pace, and meter and story of the man
from Snowy River.
Perhaps your own version can be published, too.
Very well done
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hello Writer,
This is a wonderful poem and entry for the rhyme/horses contest.
Marvelous rhyming, pace, and meter and story of the man
from Snowy River.
Perhaps your own version can be published, too.
Very well done
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Robert, Oh I am so pleased to gain a six from you for this one I enjoyed the challenge of writing for thos contest theme and of course Banjo is one of my favourite poets I hope he would approve I am thrilled Cheers MW
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Hi Robert Jist to let you know my snowy river poem won the contest I am thrilled Cheers Christine
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, This is an interesting story, a fun read. It's well done, the rhyme is right on and the meter is pretty good... I didn't stumble as I read it... I enjoyed this read. :)
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hello Author, This is an interesting story, a fun read. It's well done, the rhyme is right on and the meter is pretty good... I didn't stumble as I read it... I enjoyed this read. :)
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Susan3022, Thanks for reading my poem and ai enjoyed writing this and your comments are very much appreciated Cheers
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-This is an excellent
poem that tells a
very good story.
-The rhyme, meter,
and imagery is very good, too.
-You kept my interest
from beginning to end,
and showed the courage
and skill of the "man from snowy river."
-A strong entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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-Very nice image
and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-This is an excellent
poem that tells a
very good story.
-The rhyme, meter,
and imagery is very good, too.
-You kept my interest
from beginning to end,
and showed the courage
and skill of the "man from snowy river."
-A strong entry; good luck!
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Pam, Thanks so much I tried to stick to the meter and flow abd pleased ypur interest was kept until the end. ai love the original Banjo poem one of my favourites so I hope he approves Cheers
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You are very welcome. I think he would definitely approve; the meter, flow, and story was very good!
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Comment from misscookie
Bravo!
I must say you captured my attention from the first line to the last and the artwork you choose is a perfect match
Reading your poem was a total awesome.
There was never a dull moment in my read.
Thank you for sharing and have a blessed week end
Cookie
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Bravo!
I must say you captured my attention from the first line to the last and the artwork you choose is a perfect match
Reading your poem was a total awesome.
There was never a dull moment in my read.
Thank you for sharing and have a blessed week end
Cookie
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Hi Cookie, Thanks for your review and I am pleased you enjoyed this one and ypu too have a blessed week Cheers
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Your very welcome
Cookie
