Seasons
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9 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful and active collection of rhyming couplets, Trisha -- love the action in your gif that carries through your words and into our outlook on life and interaction with others! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019
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Such a wonderful and active collection of rhyming couplets, Trisha -- love the action in your gif that carries through your words and into our outlook on life and interaction with others! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) :) Yvette
Comment Written 29-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019
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You are welcome ma?am, Yvette! Thanks to you for reviewing kindly
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love the finishing couplet with comparison to our lives, if you put down roots your life could bloom. Lovely rhyming couplets and the fluttering flowers are gorgeous. Makes me feel I'm sitting amongst them.
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Love the finishing couplet with comparison to our lives, if you put down roots your life could bloom. Lovely rhyming couplets and the fluttering flowers are gorgeous. Makes me feel I'm sitting amongst them.
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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That?s a lovely reaction, I?m glad you enjoyed the poem, thanks for your review,
hugs, Trisha
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the waving flowers in the breeze, we call these little flowers 'cosmos' that seems to start blooming here in the fields just before autumn and originates from the British troops that bring the seeds here somehow during WWII.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about the waving flowers in the breeze, we call these little flowers 'cosmos' that seems to start blooming here in the fields just before autumn and originates from the British troops that bring the seeds here somehow during WWII.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Interesting! Some look on them as weeds, but they help color the world .Thanks for a positive review!
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nicely done rhyming couplets and it is so true we can bloom but first we have to realize we are planted. Love the rhyming endings and the message given to us
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Nicely done rhyming couplets and it is so true we can bloom but first we have to realize we are planted. Love the rhyming endings and the message given to us
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Plants are stuck, we can move, sometimes to better ?soil? Thank for your welcome review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, Bucketlist. I loved that it started as a nice piece about flowers then ended with a strong message at the end of it. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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This was a good read, Bucketlist. I loved that it started as a nice piece about flowers then ended with a strong message at the end of it. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your kind review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from LisaMay
I adore those dancing flowers. Your poem expresses lovely sentiments, and as someone who is now living in a different country to where I was born, this poem spoke to me of blooming in a different location and still flourishing, or another idea is that children leave home and settle away from the parents, as you have said in the second set.
I got a little bit troubled when reading to lose the rhythm a bit and it is because the syllable count varies, sometimes 8, sometimes 9, and even 11. Your third couplet is fine (both 9 syllables), but I have made some suggestions in the following adaption, because it would flow better if all the lines had a syllable count of 9. Your last couplet's end rhyme was not quite a match, but I can see what you were trying to describe. However, to make a better match I had to change the words more than you might like.
I apologise if you think I have overstepped your creative vision, but I started to look at your poem as if it was mine, and those were the sort of changes that I would do to my own lines.
Flowers gently waving in the breeze
Their seeds go wherever they do please
While the parent plant is rooted here
their seeds become seedlings far or near
Brighten the days with colors diverse
Live in one place, together immerse
Cycle's repeat wherever they start
We too can bloom in anyone's heart
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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I adore those dancing flowers. Your poem expresses lovely sentiments, and as someone who is now living in a different country to where I was born, this poem spoke to me of blooming in a different location and still flourishing, or another idea is that children leave home and settle away from the parents, as you have said in the second set.
I got a little bit troubled when reading to lose the rhythm a bit and it is because the syllable count varies, sometimes 8, sometimes 9, and even 11. Your third couplet is fine (both 9 syllables), but I have made some suggestions in the following adaption, because it would flow better if all the lines had a syllable count of 9. Your last couplet's end rhyme was not quite a match, but I can see what you were trying to describe. However, to make a better match I had to change the words more than you might like.
I apologise if you think I have overstepped your creative vision, but I started to look at your poem as if it was mine, and those were the sort of changes that I would do to my own lines.
Flowers gently waving in the breeze
Their seeds go wherever they do please
While the parent plant is rooted here
their seeds become seedlings far or near
Brighten the days with colors diverse
Live in one place, together immerse
Cycle's repeat wherever they start
We too can bloom in anyone's heart
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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No reason to apologize. Your opinion is allowed ! Thanks for reviewing
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Life of flowers is somewhat dispersal from the roots, unlike ours, not always and everywhere, appears free within limitations; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Life of flowers is somewhat dispersal from the roots, unlike ours, not always and everywhere, appears free within limitations; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Al! It?s nice of you to review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These wild flowers are delightful and have a gentleness about them, your poem does them justice Trisha, their seeds certainly spread quickly and often referred to as weeds, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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These wild flowers are delightful and have a gentleness about them, your poem does them justice Trisha, their seeds certainly spread quickly and often referred to as weeds, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thanks Dolly, weed has a different connotation these days. LOL Thanks for your kind review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from rspoet
Hello Trisha,
This is a very pleasant poem of rhymed couplets.
It rained here all days, but then those flowers need rain, too.
Lovely imagery of the emergence of spring flowers
and an excellent gif to match.
Nicely done
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Hello Trisha,
This is a very pleasant poem of rhymed couplets.
It rained here all days, but then those flowers need rain, too.
Lovely imagery of the emergence of spring flowers
and an excellent gif to match.
Nicely done
Robert
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thanks for a positive, complimentary review!
hugs, Trisha
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Thanks for a positive, complimentary review, Robert . Have a great weekend!
hugs, Trisha
