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Comment from shaffer40
This a well written, clever response to the prompt. Your poetic excuses for keeping everything are quite funny, too. I especially like the reference to the concert shirt again fitting you and the bookends giving the place class. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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This a well written, clever response to the prompt. Your poetic excuses for keeping everything are quite funny, too. I especially like the reference to the concert shirt again fitting you and the bookends giving the place class. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra Montanino
Ok. This hit home. I have a garage so full my car spends winters outside in the snow. This is well written and I like your last line, "A bulldozer is a safe bet." Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Ok. This hit home. I have a garage so full my car spends winters outside in the snow. This is well written and I like your last line, "A bulldozer is a safe bet." Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Coco Jane
Hilarious! Many good examples that nearly any reader can relate to. I especially like "my mom made those afghans." I have oodles of those blankets!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Hilarious! Many good examples that nearly any reader can relate to. I especially like "my mom made those afghans." I have oodles of those blankets!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Wabigoon
Earl--
Trouble is the hoarding show is frightening -- like a metaphor for some of our brains. I really like this, and like your fight to maintain your "memory" until you don't in the second to last stanza. I'm of the opinion, show be damned, that your narrator is right to maintain his hoard. Don't give in to reality here is the point.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Earl--
Trouble is the hoarding show is frightening -- like a metaphor for some of our brains. I really like this, and like your fight to maintain your "memory" until you don't in the second to last stanza. I'm of the opinion, show be damned, that your narrator is right to maintain his hoard. Don't give in to reality here is the point.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you Jeff. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from moongirlwriter
This story is so funny and reminds me a little of my daughter's house, even down to the horseshoes! I want to copy it and send it to her! Can't wait to see how well this does in the competition. Aren't we ALL just a little bit horders? :) I have things I just cannot part with.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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This story is so funny and reminds me a little of my daughter's house, even down to the horseshoes! I want to copy it and send it to her! Can't wait to see how well this does in the competition. Aren't we ALL just a little bit horders? :) I have things I just cannot part with.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Comment from Sandra Leon-Gonzalez
I absolutely love this. It made me laugh out loud because I could actually identify with some of those excuses, I've used them. It is so funny how we can rationalize our collection of stuff. The funny thing is that deep down we know that this stuff must go. Thanks so much for making laugh.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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I absolutely love this. It made me laugh out loud because I could actually identify with some of those excuses, I've used them. It is so funny how we can rationalize our collection of stuff. The funny thing is that deep down we know that this stuff must go. Thanks so much for making laugh.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow! What can one say about this write. Much to consider about the poets' thoughts. Seems to be a good contest entry. Who knows, strange things happen, you just might win.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Wow! What can one say about this write. Much to consider about the poets' thoughts. Seems to be a good contest entry. Who knows, strange things happen, you just might win.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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I actually took third. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from SeanFox16
Love it. I couldn't help thinking about my mom when reading this. She is the worst hoarder in the world. 40 years of hard labour in her beloved garden and it still looks like a bomb hit it thanks to the clutter. God bless mothers!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Love it. I couldn't help thinking about my mom when reading this. She is the worst hoarder in the world. 40 years of hard labour in her beloved garden and it still looks like a bomb hit it thanks to the clutter. God bless mothers!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work,
Comment from l.raven
Hi Earl, there are people who go through parts of their lives with nothing...and when they do get something ...it's there to stay my sweet friend...I have things from the past as well...mine are a lot of collectibles...but they still pile up...and there are things I just say...I may us this one day...LOL...very well written you...I love your poem...and loveeee this picture...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Hi Earl, there are people who go through parts of their lives with nothing...and when they do get something ...it's there to stay my sweet friend...I have things from the past as well...mine are a lot of collectibles...but they still pile up...and there are things I just say...I may us this one day...LOL...very well written you...I love your poem...and loveeee this picture...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you Linda. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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your so welcome Earl...always...love xxoo
Comment from mmonaghan777
The truth be told!! We all can empathize. Your rhyming is perfect even if you join the rest of us in our faults. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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The truth be told!! We all can empathize. Your rhyming is perfect even if you join the rest of us in our faults. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.