The Two of Me
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "No I'm Not Perfect "Chochee Medina Life and Times
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Comment from LIJ Red
There was a proverb about the man who mastered himself being an exceptional character...and flaws must be perceived to be mastered...
excellent post.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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There was a proverb about the man who mastered himself being an exceptional character...and flaws must be perceived to be mastered...
excellent post.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review and compliments on this contest offering.
Comment from WryWriter
I love this! I am definitely not perfect and this reminds me to work harder and improve, strive to become more Christlike. I am so glad you wrote this excellent work. Great photo!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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I love this! I am definitely not perfect and this reminds me to work harder and improve, strive to become more Christlike. I am so glad you wrote this excellent work. Great photo!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review, encouragement and rating. God's Blessings to you!
Comment from BrooklynnPreston
Wow! You are a very talented writer! I absolutely adore the idea behind this and your word choice is absolutely beautiful! Good luck in the contest and may God bless you.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Wow! You are a very talented writer! I absolutely adore the idea behind this and your word choice is absolutely beautiful! Good luck in the contest and may God bless you.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Thank you and God Bless you!
Comment from PriscillaAdelleCordell
Hey, best of luck in the competition. I don't see bluntness, stubbornness and bossy as necessarily being flaws. You need people to boss a bit or nothing would get done, especially in the workplace, and you need to be blunt at times, also, as there is no kind way of saying some things, and stubbornness for the right reasons is also a good quality.
I think your poem is a good one and your rhyme isn't forced. My suggestion for improvement would be to ditch all the capitals in the last stanza. They are unnecessary and distract the reader.
If you are chasing FS stars, get back to me if you edit and I will change the rating, but I am not here for days at a time so it may take some time. Life is very busy, and seems to get busier and busier for me.
Hope you are having a lovely Easter and thanks for sharing your poetry, Deb.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Hey, best of luck in the competition. I don't see bluntness, stubbornness and bossy as necessarily being flaws. You need people to boss a bit or nothing would get done, especially in the workplace, and you need to be blunt at times, also, as there is no kind way of saying some things, and stubbornness for the right reasons is also a good quality.
I think your poem is a good one and your rhyme isn't forced. My suggestion for improvement would be to ditch all the capitals in the last stanza. They are unnecessary and distract the reader.
If you are chasing FS stars, get back to me if you edit and I will change the rating, but I am not here for days at a time so it may take some time. Life is very busy, and seems to get busier and busier for me.
Hope you are having a lovely Easter and thanks for sharing your poetry, Deb.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the time, advice and rating. I Wil consider it, all advice is welcomed.