The Passage of Time
words can never describe15 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
Wow Jimi, this poem is so powerful, heartfelt and very personal who those who have experienced such tragedy in the own lives can relate in your wonderful write You my friend are truly a wonderful wordsmith poet and friend
dip
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Wow Jimi, this poem is so powerful, heartfelt and very personal who those who have experienced such tragedy in the own lives can relate in your wonderful write You my friend are truly a wonderful wordsmith poet and friend
dip
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Dip, your review is so appreciated. Writing is so very often cathartic. I am truly humbled over your high praise. Again thank you!
Jimi
Comment from RGstar
Just lovely. The emotion and imagery transcends all thought, for we see what you see, and feel what you feel.
A journey through time that is both 100 years long as much a 100 seconds, for time has a way of hitting home a reality in which we are never prepared.
Once again a delicate delivery from a skilled writer that I love to bits.
Lovely to see you my dearest friend, and your poem of loss was unforced, clean as a mountain river, and as warm as the glow of any furnace.
My very best wishes.
Have a wonderful day.
RG
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Just lovely. The emotion and imagery transcends all thought, for we see what you see, and feel what you feel.
A journey through time that is both 100 years long as much a 100 seconds, for time has a way of hitting home a reality in which we are never prepared.
Once again a delicate delivery from a skilled writer that I love to bits.
Lovely to see you my dearest friend, and your poem of loss was unforced, clean as a mountain river, and as warm as the glow of any furnace.
My very best wishes.
Have a wonderful day.
RG
Comment Written 20-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Roy, my beautiful friend,
Your review is moving and it words pierce my heart with immense gratitude. thank you so very much..
jimi
Comment from Louise Michelle
OMG - This is so sad. I really wasn't expecting that ending and was going to tell you that it was as beautifully written as anything I've seen on a greeting card. Actually, if you shortened it and didn't have it end tragically, I'd say to try selling it to a greeting card company. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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OMG - This is so sad. I really wasn't expecting that ending and was going to tell you that it was as beautifully written as anything I've seen on a greeting card. Actually, if you shortened it and didn't have it end tragically, I'd say to try selling it to a greeting card company. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Louise Michelle, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my very personal work. I am honored..
jlsavell
Comment from Mabaker
Jimi, you never fail to please with your wonderful insight. I too lost a child however FS wasn't around then, so I suffered in silence, which all the shrinks tell us is destructive. If we want 'closure' we bare our soul to a stranger or find a great lady poet who put it all in perspective. Thank you Jimi, Love Anne
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Jimi, you never fail to please with your wonderful insight. I too lost a child however FS wasn't around then, so I suffered in silence, which all the shrinks tell us is destructive. If we want 'closure' we bare our soul to a stranger or find a great lady poet who put it all in perspective. Thank you Jimi, Love Anne
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Anne, you bring tears to my heart. I never knew, but then..there are many things we do not know about our friends..right? thank you so very much..
on another note, I will be in your port to review as soon as I answer my reviews. I am terrible about this.
again sweet friend, thank you so very much..
jimi
Comment from 24chas
This was a beautiful and powerful write, JLSavell. What an awesome picture you painted of the relationship between a mother and a son and how cruelly fate ended the early one. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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This was a beautiful and powerful write, JLSavell. What an awesome picture you painted of the relationship between a mother and a son and how cruelly fate ended the early one. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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24chas, another wonderful thank you for stopping by to review my very personal work. I know I must say it all the time, but I truly mean it..I am humbled and honored..
jlsavell
Comment from dragonpoet
Up until the end it seems the story of a proud mother and her memories of his growing up and what he is doing now. But the last line seems to say this is all he didn't get to do because he died as a baby.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Up until the end it seems the story of a proud mother and her memories of his growing up and what he is doing now. But the last line seems to say this is all he didn't get to do because he died as a baby.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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dragonpoet,
thank you fro stopping by to read and review my work. It means a great deal to me
jlsavell
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My pleasure.
Joan
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem, which has me crying, is almost indescribably beautiful and
moving. Your superb specific details have indeed created the life that never was.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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This poem, which has me crying, is almost indescribably beautiful and
moving. Your superb specific details have indeed created the life that never was.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Janice Canerdy,
Another huge thank you for taking your time to read and comment on my very personal work. I am honored once again. Thank you so veery much..
jlsavell
Comment from Cycler
Thanks for your commemorative writing - telling a tale that could be and yet is, to many. Jimi, you have wonderful eyes and a beautiful mind that's able to remember, imagine, and give - give us all a moment of remembrance and wonder ... and love.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your commemorative writing - telling a tale that could be and yet is, to many. Jimi, you have wonderful eyes and a beautiful mind that's able to remember, imagine, and give - give us all a moment of remembrance and wonder ... and love.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Cycler,
This was a difficult write, as is often the case with me. Thank you dearest friend for many things, but most of all for your encouraging words to me about my work. It humbles me.. greatly.. jimi
Comment from Randa Dayle
How true..Words can never describe the passage of time! What a great poem, I think that the picture you picked helps portray your poem well. Thanks so much!!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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How true..Words can never describe the passage of time! What a great poem, I think that the picture you picked helps portray your poem well. Thanks so much!!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Randall?s Dayle, thank you for stopping by to read and review my work. I am very honored.
jlsavell
Comment from Ronni
Oh my Jimi,
This is so achingly relatable and deeply empathized, though loss of
mine were at older age level; and yours all the more agonizing in
grief over 'newborn bones' child loss. The passage of time does indeed
imbed all the deeper the recent memories contrasted to the later or
last ones; yet mother's heart bears through them all, with no less
love and gratitude for their precious life, however brief or short.
Your abiding love in and beyond the inevitabl sorrow is no less
all the more precious epitaph and eurlogy, and legacy of irreplaceable
devotion and abidingly tender and gently caressing memory.
Thanks for sharing again. A keepsake for sure for your loved one!
Love, blessings always, Ronni
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Oh my Jimi,
This is so achingly relatable and deeply empathized, though loss of
mine were at older age level; and yours all the more agonizing in
grief over 'newborn bones' child loss. The passage of time does indeed
imbed all the deeper the recent memories contrasted to the later or
last ones; yet mother's heart bears through them all, with no less
love and gratitude for their precious life, however brief or short.
Your abiding love in and beyond the inevitabl sorrow is no less
all the more precious epitaph and eurlogy, and legacy of irreplaceable
devotion and abidingly tender and gently caressing memory.
Thanks for sharing again. A keepsake for sure for your loved one!
Love, blessings always, Ronni
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Ronni,
Dearest friend and beautiful lady,
I know this moves you. I think of you each time I write something so very personal. Our lives greatly parallel, only on a different plane of time. Your reviews astound and humble me greatly. I am always moved by your articulate words and discerning heart. My heart, also, goes out to you.
Ronni, once again a huge thank you..
I will be in your port soon..
jimi