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Poetic Treasures and Dreams

Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Bedclothes"
A book on nature and feelings and spirituality.

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Comment from samantha0930
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I like this. :) I was confused at first, about how He could send bedclothes from the sky, but then as I got to the second half of the sentence, I thought that it was really funny. :)

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear samantha, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Great combo of those bedclothes raining down in sheets. Your selected illustration reinforces your monostitch humor entry.

Please consider using a bold type face or change text color. IMHO your current contrast is not sharp. It is your poetic style, but in my iPad view, I would prefer your second line to start with 'because ...'

I like to use FanArt for illustrations to accompany my own FS posts.

M

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear Mark, Thank you for your comments and review. I don't understand IMHO. Could you tell me what that is? Dove
reply by Mark D. R. on 18-Apr-2019
    Dove,

    Oops, apparently these word shortcuts or acronyms are not that well known. It means "in my humble opinion" so its abbreviation saves me typing time. (-:
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written humorous one-line poem about the rain that coming down in sheets and see it as bedclothes that are sent by God down to earth.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear Sandra, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a fun write with a great play on words, we say it's bucketing down among other things, like 'stair rods', he he he, best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear Dolly, Thank you for your comments and review. Donna, Love you x
Comment from James Upshaw
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This is good wordplay, but I think it need a little more description of why the rain looks like sheets. Is it blanketing the ground? I am not sure. But overall this is a great concept.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear James, I suppose you could say the rain was "blanketing the ground," but when I see torrents of rain coming down, I've heard that it is coming down in sheets. Thanks for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Good job taking a simple every day occurrence like rain and turning it into a creative poem. Hope it wasn't raining dirty sheets. Well you can just add some detergent.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear Bill, Thank you for your comments and review. I'd like to think the rain was falling in clean sheets, but your comments about if they were dirty, I could just add some detergent. Dove
Comment from HealingMuse
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Hi Dove,

Ha ha ha! This is a great humorous monostich and a super contest entry. Nothing here to revise. A great image you have displayed with your clever verse. Good luck and thanks for sharing. Jan :-)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2019

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
    Dear Jan, Thank you for finding my monostitch so funny. Thanks for your comments and review. Donna