Fingers of Mist
A 5-7-5 poem22 total reviews
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ... it poses with an image of what will the hesitation bring, hope love death ? It is solid and formative with a precise formulation on a latitude of easy thinking bringing a new question and thought in its conclusion. The layer of sentiment and imagery leaves the reader with almost a dilemma ... what will it do?
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Excellent ... it poses with an image of what will the hesitation bring, hope love death ? It is solid and formative with a precise formulation on a latitude of easy thinking bringing a new question and thought in its conclusion. The layer of sentiment and imagery leaves the reader with almost a dilemma ... what will it do?
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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What a great review. Thank you for the thoughtful and concise analysis... it even made me stop and think. Ha. Much appreciated!!
Melissa
Comment from Khurram1
Beautiful! This is to be appreciated for it is compact enough to drive your mind and the words, though sparingly used, create an enchanting effect. Thank you very much.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Beautiful! This is to be appreciated for it is compact enough to drive your mind and the words, though sparingly used, create an enchanting effect. Thank you very much.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Khurram. I am delighted that you liked it!
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the fingers of mist in the early morning over the fields make the deer hesitates with good instincts to go in any direction.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the fingers of mist in the early morning over the fields make the deer hesitates with good instincts to go in any direction.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the lovely review, Sandra.
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
I've definitely seen the five point deer lurking in the mist a few times. They can be a menace on the highway in such conditions too.
That said, this is a fine fiveseventyfive, Melissa and I wish you much luck with the contest committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I've definitely seen the five point deer lurking in the mist a few times. They can be a menace on the highway in such conditions too.
That said, this is a fine fiveseventyfive, Melissa and I wish you much luck with the contest committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Gloria!! I hope you are doing well and enjoying spring weather in BC. I am grateful for your thoughts and hope you don?t see any more deer in the mist, for as you say, that can be dangerous on the highway. At least poetically, we can keep them in the forests! Ha.
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Melissa. I think this is a beautifully illustrated and expressed poem. From what I've seen of deer they welcome the mist because it protects them from danger. Nicely done. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hi Melissa. I think this is a beautifully illustrated and expressed poem. From what I've seen of deer they welcome the mist because it protects them from danger. Nicely done. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Marilyn. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from LovnPeace
Intriguing picture. I wonder that Deere's ever get killed. They are such smart sensitive creatures, cautious even. Sneaky hunters get Bamby's. Blessings, Barbara
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Intriguing picture. I wonder that Deere's ever get killed. They are such smart sensitive creatures, cautious even. Sneaky hunters get Bamby's. Blessings, Barbara
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hi Barbara. I am glad you liked the picture of the deer in the mist. I do believe they are sensitive creatures!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
In the shadows lurks the hunter, waiting to rack this deer on the wall. Wouldn't you hesitate, Melissa. :) This is good. To bad I'm not a hunter. that deer has some pointers on him. This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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In the shadows lurks the hunter, waiting to rack this deer on the wall. Wouldn't you hesitate, Melissa. :) This is good. To bad I'm not a hunter. that deer has some pointers on him. This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much, Jose. I am glad you think this is good. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your capturing the magical moment and reinforcing it with the perfect picture. Your "fingers" metaphor is quite effective in this 5-7-5 as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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I admired your capturing the magical moment and reinforcing it with the perfect picture. Your "fingers" metaphor is quite effective in this 5-7-5 as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Joan!!
Melissa
Comment from Colin John
Nice misty 5-7-5 and I feel you hit it on the head when the deer hesitated . Nicely written and should do well . Good luck , Colin
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Nice misty 5-7-5 and I feel you hit it on the head when the deer hesitated . Nicely written and should do well . Good luck , Colin
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, Colin!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Beautiful imagery with the pale fingers of mist. You create a great sense of atmosphere in this. I can picture the place being chilly and dark. No winder the deer hesitates! Lovely picture. Your syllable count is right-on, too. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Beautiful imagery with the pale fingers of mist. You create a great sense of atmosphere in this. I can picture the place being chilly and dark. No winder the deer hesitates! Lovely picture. Your syllable count is right-on, too. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, Judi. So glad you like it.
Melissa
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You're very welcome. judi