Poetic Treasures and Dreams
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Winds of Spring"A book on nature and feelings and spirituality.
10 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the winds of spring that starts to blow and brings the rain that make the new sprouts grow and become green so that the flowers can bloom.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about the winds of spring that starts to blow and brings the rain that make the new sprouts grow and become green so that the flowers can bloom.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from samantha0930
I like this poem. It's a good description of the gentle winds in spring when the cold dies and everything begins to warm. The line about kids going to school feels a bit weird to me though, since it isn't really a metaphor or anything like the 2nd stanza, and there isn't really a leading up to it, so to me it feels kind of random and kind of takes away from your natural descriptions.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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I like this poem. It's a good description of the gentle winds in spring when the cold dies and everything begins to warm. The line about kids going to school feels a bit weird to me though, since it isn't really a metaphor or anything like the 2nd stanza, and there isn't really a leading up to it, so to me it feels kind of random and kind of takes away from your natural descriptions.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Dear Samantha, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from kiwijenny
You know we need the fierce March winds to shake the sap in the trees and get it flowing again.i love the descriptions of children being blown away to school...what fun....
God bless
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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You know we need the fierce March winds to shake the sap in the trees and get it flowing again.i love the descriptions of children being blown away to school...what fun....
God bless
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Dear kiwijenny, Thanks for your comments and review. God bless you too. Dove
Comment from robyn corum
DM,
A perfect poem for this time of the year. *smile* We have had the craziest weather here; temps in the 40s one day and in the 80s the next. I'm ready for SPRING! haha! This was lovely!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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DM,
A perfect poem for this time of the year. *smile* We have had the craziest weather here; temps in the 40s one day and in the 80s the next. I'm ready for SPRING! haha! This was lovely!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear robyn, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Teri7
Donna, This is a very well written poem about the winds of spring. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Donna, This is a very well written poem about the winds of spring. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear Teri, Thank you for your comments and review. Love, Donna
Comment from Gail Denham
Nice poem. Right now we are sitting in an RV park in Hawthorne Nevada - experiencing winds that feel as if they're going to blow us away. It's bright an sunny right now, but...this is April ! and at home in Central Oregon, it's still snowing - good grief.
I'm ready for spring. You speak so kindly of that time, but I think this year we might "spring" right into perhaps a few days of summer - least that's how it feels.
One line of your poem stopped me: "with the winds of spring come ocean calm"
Oceans to me speak of waves and turbulence - not sure that's the right picture. Just a thought.
I did enjoy the poem. Hope you keep on with your writing. I'm sure enjoying this fan story site.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Nice poem. Right now we are sitting in an RV park in Hawthorne Nevada - experiencing winds that feel as if they're going to blow us away. It's bright an sunny right now, but...this is April ! and at home in Central Oregon, it's still snowing - good grief.
I'm ready for spring. You speak so kindly of that time, but I think this year we might "spring" right into perhaps a few days of summer - least that's how it feels.
One line of your poem stopped me: "with the winds of spring come ocean calm"
Oceans to me speak of waves and turbulence - not sure that's the right picture. Just a thought.
I did enjoy the poem. Hope you keep on with your writing. I'm sure enjoying this fan story site.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear Gail, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Wabigoon
Dovemarie--
Hard to rank this. I think "spring" is...overrated, or almost impossible to say anything fresh about or something, so a poem touting to be about spring really has to say something special to this person. I like the March winds bee's sting line but think the repeat of the word "wind" in the first and second lines needs to be avoided somehow.
Thanks. It's about 35 degrees outside and we are supposed to get snow tomorrow -- so much for spring!
Best
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dovemarie--
Hard to rank this. I think "spring" is...overrated, or almost impossible to say anything fresh about or something, so a poem touting to be about spring really has to say something special to this person. I like the March winds bee's sting line but think the repeat of the word "wind" in the first and second lines needs to be avoided somehow.
Thanks. It's about 35 degrees outside and we are supposed to get snow tomorrow -- so much for spring!
Best
Wabigoon
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear Wabigoon, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Sandra Montanino
This is a great visual for your story, but it does remind me a bit of pollen flying through the air. Spring is my favorite season. It can go either way as you say, "Warm mixed with cool." Good job!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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This is a great visual for your story, but it does remind me a bit of pollen flying through the air. Spring is my favorite season. It can go either way as you say, "Warm mixed with cool." Good job!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from 24chas
I liked this read a lot, Dovemarie. Great imagery really brought this one to life. The rhyme scheme really made it a smooth and easy read. Nice job.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I liked this read a lot, Dovemarie. Great imagery really brought this one to life. The rhyme scheme really made it a smooth and easy read. Nice job.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear 24chas, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It's almost as if winter hangs on for grim death and the March winds doth blow and we shall have snow! Spring should bring respite in April and the winds should die down, I felt the bluster here in your poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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It's almost as if winter hangs on for grim death and the March winds doth blow and we shall have snow! Spring should bring respite in April and the winds should die down, I felt the bluster here in your poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your comments and review. Love, Donna x