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Comment from rspoet
Hello Earl,
Paladin, Paladin, where do you roam
Paladin, Paladin far, far from home
A knight without armor in a savage land
a soldier of fortune is the man called Paladin
Or at least, that's how I remember the theme song
of my favorite western.
But Paladin was too smart to be caught by a posse
and hanged. He was on the "right" side of the law.
Excellent, fun poem, though.
Robert
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Hello Earl,
Paladin, Paladin, where do you roam
Paladin, Paladin far, far from home
A knight without armor in a savage land
a soldier of fortune is the man called Paladin
Or at least, that's how I remember the theme song
of my favorite western.
But Paladin was too smart to be caught by a posse
and hanged. He was on the "right" side of the law.
Excellent, fun poem, though.
Robert
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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You're right Robert, Paladin was too smart to get caught by a posse. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from misscookie
The artwork you choose to go with your poem is a perfect match
Not only did you captured my attention but brought back remember of the passed
that was one of my favorite show to watch.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie from the first line to the last
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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The artwork you choose to go with your poem is a perfect match
Not only did you captured my attention but brought back remember of the passed
that was one of my favorite show to watch.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie from the first line to the last
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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It was my pleasure.
Cookie
Comment from Lance S. Loria
I loved Have Gun Will Travel. Appropriate artwork to compliment your poem. The prompt says the poem must rhyme.
In the third stanza dodge and watch don't rhyme. Maybe replace "Had to watch" with "hides in a lodge"?
In the eighth stanza "end" and "friends" don't rhyme. Maybe replace "the end" with "how it ends"? Just a few ideas. Hope you have time to edit it. Good luck!!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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I loved Have Gun Will Travel. Appropriate artwork to compliment your poem. The prompt says the poem must rhyme.
In the third stanza dodge and watch don't rhyme. Maybe replace "Had to watch" with "hides in a lodge"?
In the eighth stanza "end" and "friends" don't rhyme. Maybe replace "the end" with "how it ends"? Just a few ideas. Hope you have time to edit it. Good luck!!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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When I looked up words that rhyme with dodge, watch was the first one that came up. I did change the end to ends. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the contest. It was definitely an ode and a great poem of tribute. I for one remember Paladin, his ways, his actions and the shows, your words presented him correctly. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Good luck in the contest. It was definitely an ode and a great poem of tribute. I for one remember Paladin, his ways, his actions and the shows, your words presented him correctly. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are so welcome Earl
Comment from nomi338
Congratulations. It rhymed, it had a Western theme, it entertained and it was a pleasure to read. I can't believe that there any more to be asked of this writer. I did not notice any flaws grammatically nor with punctuation either. Good job.
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Congratulations. It rhymed, it had a Western theme, it entertained and it was a pleasure to read. I can't believe that there any more to be asked of this writer. I did not notice any flaws grammatically nor with punctuation either. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much for the six star rating. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Poor guy. I guess being a fast gun didn't help him this time. Very good rhyme, understandable and enjoyable.
I have a poem/story very similar but have not posted it yet. Can't see any need for changing any of this writing.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Poor guy. I guess being a fast gun didn't help him this time. Very good rhyme, understandable and enjoyable.
I have a poem/story very similar but have not posted it yet. Can't see any need for changing any of this writing.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I'd like to see your poem,. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Janilou
Love it! You did a great job.
Loved these lines:
Hanging tree ain't where it's at,
It's time for me to scat,
Too bad it didn't last!
No errors found.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Love it! You did a great job.
Loved these lines:
Hanging tree ain't where it's at,
It's time for me to scat,
Too bad it didn't last!
No errors found.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Jan. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Earl,
I really like your entry. You take us fromm gettin' outta Dodge to meeting Wild Bill, then fleeing and the hanging. Very nicely written. Good luck and thanks for a great read. Jan :-)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Hi Earl,
I really like your entry. You take us fromm gettin' outta Dodge to meeting Wild Bill, then fleeing and the hanging. Very nicely written. Good luck and thanks for a great read. Jan :-)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Jan. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Glowplug
I am a fan of westerns, Louis La'mour mostly. This piece had my attention from the start and I loved reading it. Flow was nice and it didn't disappoint at the end, enjoyed thanks for writing it.
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I am a fan of westerns, Louis La'mour mostly. This piece had my attention from the start and I loved reading it. Flow was nice and it didn't disappoint at the end, enjoyed thanks for writing it.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I'm a big La'mour fan also. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow it was tough back then ..Paladin...
Love the rhymes ...jangle dangle..pursuit moot..at ...scat...buffoon saloon...unravel travel...tall tales got taller in the Wild West
God bless
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Wow it was tough back then ..Paladin...
Love the rhymes ...jangle dangle..pursuit moot..at ...scat...buffoon saloon...unravel travel...tall tales got taller in the Wild West
God bless
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
