Westward Bound
Following a dream.17 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
This gives a taste of what things might have been like back in the old west. Families fell apart and often didn't see each other for years. It was a shock to learn the two were brothers.
I like that this piece also shows how strong a woman can be. She not only saved her father's life she spared him the hurt of having to kill his own brother.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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This gives a taste of what things might have been like back in the old west. Families fell apart and often didn't see each other for years. It was a shock to learn the two were brothers.
I like that this piece also shows how strong a woman can be. She not only saved her father's life she spared him the hurt of having to kill his own brother.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this nice review. I think women in the old west had to be strong to survive. It was an interesting time. Thanks so much for taking time to read my poem. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This western-themed poem, Westward Bound, is brilliant in its processing of the man's history of failure and success, and family, both known and unknown. No six in my holster today, but I will owe you one.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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This western-themed poem, Westward Bound, is brilliant in its processing of the man's history of failure and success, and family, both known and unknown. No six in my holster today, but I will owe you one.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you! That means a lot coming from someone whose work I've admired for quite a while. Thanks so much for taking the time to read.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I REALLY love skillfully-written, well-plotted, smoothly flowing
narrative poems that make me smile while tearing up--like this one.
This is SO good.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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I REALLY love skillfully-written, well-plotted, smoothly flowing
narrative poems that make me smile while tearing up--like this one.
This is SO good.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it and took time to review. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt western poem/story. It is never a good idea to show your guns if you are not really have a plan to shoot or defend yourself another may just get an idea the one they love the most is in danger.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt western poem/story. It is never a good idea to show your guns if you are not really have a plan to shoot or defend yourself another may just get an idea the one they love the most is in danger.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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That is true! I think though, in spite of all the guns, it would have been an exciting and interesting time to live. Thank you for reading my poem.:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Boogienights with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your story told is well expressed and could be a movie.
These lines are really long and seem to interrupt the printed feel. I would make them into another verse to showcase the rhymes as I thought I missed the rhymes initially. Good job and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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You did a good job, Boogienights with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your story told is well expressed and could be a movie.
These lines are really long and seem to interrupt the printed feel. I would make them into another verse to showcase the rhymes as I thought I missed the rhymes initially. Good job and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this very nice review, I always appreciate it
Comment from poetwatch
You have the west covered as if you or those within you were living in the western time. This is very good. It reminds me that brothers are different yet they are the same. I love my brothers, we are 6 brothers and one sister. This is a good Western entry. Thank you for sharing ma'am. :)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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You have the west covered as if you or those within you were living in the western time. This is very good. It reminds me that brothers are different yet they are the same. I love my brothers, we are 6 brothers and one sister. This is a good Western entry. Thank you for sharing ma'am. :)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Having all those brothers and your sister is a blessing...keep them close in your heart. I only had one sister and one brother and they have both passed away. Thank you for reading and for this wonderful review.
Comment from country ranch writer
sadness can to the ranch one day and death stood still as it separated them. Rivals no more his daughter put an end to this jealousy once and for all.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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sadness can to the ranch one day and death stood still as it separated them. Rivals no more his daughter put an end to this jealousy once and for all.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, it means a lot to me. :)
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Comment from AprilViolet
I was on the edge of my seat the whole time! What a plot twist at the end! It was his brother the whole time. Maybe neither one would have shot. We will never know. Great poem. 6 stars!!
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I was on the edge of my seat the whole time! What a plot twist at the end! It was his brother the whole time. Maybe neither one would have shot. We will never know. Great poem. 6 stars!!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this fantastic review. :)
Comment from susand3022
Hello Boogienights, this was a truly enjoyable read. I can't really think of anything to change. The story flows well and there's a nice little twist at the end. It's too bad the two couldn't have come to each other as brothers before they drew down. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Hello Boogienights, this was a truly enjoyable read. I can't really think of anything to change. The story flows well and there's a nice little twist at the end. It's too bad the two couldn't have come to each other as brothers before they drew down. Well done. :)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this nice review. Who knows what would have happened if one wasn't shot! Thanks again for reading. :)
Comment from 24chas
This was a really good read, Boogienights. I loved the flow of it. It was very smooth and was such a great story, it was easy to read the whole piece. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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This was a really good read, Boogienights. I loved the flow of it. It was very smooth and was such a great story, it was easy to read the whole piece. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for this great review. I always appreciate it.
