Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Your verse is filled with wonderful imagery. the rhymes are spot on. Your selected illustration is a perfect companion to your words. The last nine syllables are a great conclusion to your overall presentation.

' ... journey's ride' might morph into '... journeys' rides' but that may change your poetic intent

Strange, but in my (!) iPad view, your poem has funny looking centering issues and it seems that a different font size was used for the text starting with 'earth...' and ending with '... sun'

None of these 'appearance' looks affects the value of the essence in your verse.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019

Thanks for the wonderful review. Appreciate all your comments. I don't have an iPad, but everyone who does notices centering issues. It looks fine on my computer. Glad you liked the last stanza as the conclusion. I'll take another look at 'Journeys' rides' option.
Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

I truly feel this write intent, given flow creates its suspense, capturing its reader attention, bring me at least to a less appealing close. Suggest:written through time all in pen its words: if appropriate all in my opinion.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019

Thanks. Appreciate your comments and suggestion ... ;o)

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very outstanding!!!
very well thought out and this piece really draws ones in,
you have a good imagination and a very good writer.
I love the artwork
I enjoyed this very much
I hope the very best in the contest
donette1914 4/10/2019

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed this piece and the artwork. Appreciate all your thoughts. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Starkat, you sound like you're an Archaeologist. ;) In tune to all of the history written in the Earth throughout the millennia. Things like that have always fascinated me. Not just what is here, but what is out in the universe as well. The things they discover in space, sometimes overwhelm me. A nice write. :)

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks! Glad you liked it. I do study Archaeology and I'm fascinated by the history of the earth and the amazing amount of information we learn from stars, galaxies and such. Appreciate all your thoughts. Cheers ... ;o)

reply by susand3022 on 11-Apr-2019

You must have been over the moon yesterday with the pictures of the Black Hole!!!

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019

yes - very exiting to see that awesome pic and how they took it!

Comment from Josh Carey

Good

Definitely intrigued by the cosmic mysteries this poem proposes that we perhaps may never fully understand. There's a special beauty in what we don't understand and that tethers us to reality and philosophy. Keep up the good work!

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks. Glad you found this poem thought-provoking. Appreciate your thoughts. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

A very clever and creative piece that includes all the cycles of life: the tides ebbing and flowing every month depending on the moon, the changing of the seasons that revolves around the sun and histories' mysteries that pass from one generation to the next. I enjoyed this. well done.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this piece. Appreciate all your comments.
Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words flow and connect well. The words of this
poem are clear, interesting and thought provoking. The reader
thought about the theme of this poem. The artwork is perfect
and compliments this poem.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks for the wonderful review. Glad you liked this poem and artwork.
Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from LG Wolfe

Excellent

This is a great example of 3-6-9 for the contest. I was trying to visualize how it would look and sounds and - you definitely have it. But beyond the technical elements, your imagery is fantastic. Well done!

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed this entry and the imagery. I was curious myself since I haven't tried this form before. Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Star,

Lovely piece you have penned here, my friend. This is a great contest entry that should fare well. I really like the ending. That stanza speaks volumes. Thanks for sharing. Jan :-)

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks Jan,

Glad you enjoyed this piece, especially the last stanza. I was curious about this form and how it might work. Appreciate all your comments.

Cheers,
Star

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 3-6-9 trio about the world that keeps turning without end. Everything happens when it is supposed to happen and we should just stay with the changes or fall off.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2019

---

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. Hope we don't fall off. Appreciate your thoughts.
Cheers ... ;o)