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Comment from PoemsOfDD
Gmartinez, you have done a great job in expression for the picture challenge. The victim clearly suffered badly at the hands of someone that was loved in the beginning. A sad way to end in order to find freedom.
Excellent! ~DD
Ps - my PC poem is much shorter but I hope you enjoy reading it.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Gmartinez, you have done a great job in expression for the picture challenge. The victim clearly suffered badly at the hands of someone that was loved in the beginning. A sad way to end in order to find freedom.
Excellent! ~DD
Ps - my PC poem is much shorter but I hope you enjoy reading it.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the time to review and positive encouragement. Your 5-7-5 was a powerfull statement on abusive behavior.
Blessings
Comment from Winslow
Dear gmartinez,
This is a sad poem but well written and composed. It flows nicely and your rhyming is spot on. I hope this isn't autobiographical although I am sure a lot of people could write about love gone wrong.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Dear gmartinez,
This is a sad poem but well written and composed. It flows nicely and your rhyming is spot on. I hope this isn't autobiographical although I am sure a lot of people could write about love gone wrong.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review and compliments, just a thought based on the photo prompt.
Comment from lyenochka
Great job in this picture challenge poem. I had to count to see that it really was eleven. That's a hard picture to look at. Liked your rhymes and meter and the message is clear.
One spelling issue:
"Hateful Anger, Fear, Jelousies and all other" (Jealousies)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Great job in this picture challenge poem. I had to count to see that it really was eleven. That's a hard picture to look at. Liked your rhymes and meter and the message is clear.
One spelling issue:
"Hateful Anger, Fear, Jelousies and all other" (Jealousies)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Thank you I will correct the misspelling mistake. Thank you for the review and positive encouragement.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a deeply emotional write, there is much pain in these words. In the fifth line beginning: my souls been cut, you need to say, my (soul's) been cut, it needs an apostrophe. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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This is a deeply emotional write, there is much pain in these words. In the fifth line beginning: my souls been cut, you need to say, my (soul's) been cut, it needs an apostrophe. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review, I will correct the grammatical error shortly. It's Greatly appreciated and very helpful.
Comment from kiwijenny
Eleven swords too many...I will say ...one sword would be too many
Looks very painful...
but the Love I hid deep inside has finally died,
an end to our futile cantankerous ride,
and my compassion for you has finally blown,....
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Eleven swords too many...I will say ...one sword would be too many
Looks very painful...
but the Love I hid deep inside has finally died,
an end to our futile cantankerous ride,
and my compassion for you has finally blown,....
God bless
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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It was Just my way of saying that same point in my poetic form. Thank you for the review and time to read my posting.
Comment from Tina Crute
Wow, such imagery! I can't imagine any picture and poem going better together. I enjoyed reading this although it was very emotional, praying to mine images of murder and crime and morning for lost love. It was very effective!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Wow, such imagery! I can't imagine any picture and poem going better together. I enjoyed reading this although it was very emotional, praying to mine images of murder and crime and morning for lost love. It was very effective!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review and compliments. God Bless you.
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You're welcome:)