The French Letter
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Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Who would have ever thought that John Keats and Oddjob would be mentioned on the same page of a novel?
I think Charles' physical reaction is exactly right.
And a nice little commentary about the guy and his girlfriend.
Excellent note with the church being closed, but the wine bar open.
Charles seems to bring out the worst in boyfriends.
I recommend his steer clear of them in the future.
Why does the perpetrator always want to go back to the scene of the crime?
I guess writers like to complicate situations.
Well done!
No sixes left.
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Hello Tony,
Who would have ever thought that John Keats and Oddjob would be mentioned on the same page of a novel?
I think Charles' physical reaction is exactly right.
And a nice little commentary about the guy and his girlfriend.
Excellent note with the church being closed, but the wine bar open.
Charles seems to bring out the worst in boyfriends.
I recommend his steer clear of them in the future.
Why does the perpetrator always want to go back to the scene of the crime?
I guess writers like to complicate situations.
Well done!
No sixes left.
Robert
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Robert. I've made a few changes to this chapter now - mainly to take Charles a little further away from the action before he has his delayed shock reaction.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You have done a really good
job with this chapter, Tony.
-You manage to devote most
of it to Charles's emotional state.
-I admire the empathy you create as
he is devastated by this horrible incident.
-You show how others treat him as a
worthless, drunken slob, unworthy
of any help or understanding.
-I like how he tries to seek
forgiveness in the church, but
even that is unavailable to him.
-You lighten the mood a bit
with "There was little doubt that
I was as legless as a French frog."
-I also like the inclusion of Keats,
the song, and Bond references.
-The ending is good, as Charles has
enough courage to go back to
the scene of the crime.
-We will now wait to see what
he may or may not discover there.
-This is in lieu of a sixth star:
[Glitterfy.com - *Glitter Photos*]
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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-You have done a really good
job with this chapter, Tony.
-You manage to devote most
of it to Charles's emotional state.
-I admire the empathy you create as
he is devastated by this horrible incident.
-You show how others treat him as a
worthless, drunken slob, unworthy
of any help or understanding.
-I like how he tries to seek
forgiveness in the church, but
even that is unavailable to him.
-You lighten the mood a bit
with "There was little doubt that
I was as legless as a French frog."
-I also like the inclusion of Keats,
the song, and Bond references.
-The ending is good, as Charles has
enough courage to go back to
the scene of the crime.
-We will now wait to see what
he may or may not discover there.
-This is in lieu of a sixth star:
[Glitterfy.com - *Glitter Photos*]
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much, Pam, for this very kind review and the virtual six. As foreshadowed, I've made a few changes to this chapter now - mainly to take Charles a little further away from the action before he has his delayed shock reaction.
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You are very welcome and deserving of the rating and review, Tony. It sounds like the next chapter will lead nicely from this one.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This was a good chapter, Tony, although I admit I got lost with the song Charles sang. I know he was drunk, but it seemed out of place. The cuss words were off=putting to me. However, that will not cause me to lower the rating. this shows effort, I saw no errors, and it did move the story along. Jan
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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This was a good chapter, Tony, although I admit I got lost with the song Charles sang. I know he was drunk, but it seemed out of place. The cuss words were off=putting to me. However, that will not cause me to lower the rating. this shows effort, I saw no errors, and it did move the story along. Jan
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Jan. The song is a well known one in the UK and often associated with inebriation. I'd hoped the cuss words were low level enough not to cause too much offense. Sorry!
Comment from Shirley McLain
An enjoyable read. Full of action with drama and humor. I am looking forward to reading more. I hope you have a great evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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An enjoyable read. Full of action with drama and humor. I am looking forward to reading more. I hope you have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for taking the time to review this one, Shirley, and for your supportive words. All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;A
> So the picture was armed? And he was the carrier? Must been radioactive or a timer or something because once it left his hand that went off after they walked off with it.
> Now is a stumbling bum in Paris and totally aloof to his surroundings and finding refuge on some Florida backroom to who knows where.
> But what happened in between was the most interesting were his character changed because of the disaster which made him look like a homeless person instead of a person was in a blast.
> So, just because he looked like a homeless person and then he stared at a woman, who happened to be another man's wife, And she didn't care for and let her husband know. Wow! So like society.
> Really enjoyed this one and thanks for sharing this, Tony.
> Wonder what is going to do now?
> Take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Cheers, Tony;A
> So the picture was armed? And he was the carrier? Must been radioactive or a timer or something because once it left his hand that went off after they walked off with it.
> Now is a stumbling bum in Paris and totally aloof to his surroundings and finding refuge on some Florida backroom to who knows where.
> But what happened in between was the most interesting were his character changed because of the disaster which made him look like a homeless person instead of a person was in a blast.
> So, just because he looked like a homeless person and then he stared at a woman, who happened to be another man's wife, And she didn't care for and let her husband know. Wow! So like society.
> Really enjoyed this one and thanks for sharing this, Tony.
> Wonder what is going to do now?
> Take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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I'm running a bit behind with my replies to reviews, Alx. I see that this one was written nearly a week ago. As always, your comments are interesting and appreciated. All the best to you and your family, Tony
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I know you don't worry but the concern should be that much, because we are all not that much like Penelope Prim and Proper. Chuckle!
> Take care and have a good one you deserve it.
Alx
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
After such a shock it is difficult to know what to do next. It's a pity that he was picked on like that, but we live in a curel world. I liked his difficult choice of church or wine bar! He he he. Confused and misguided I have no idea where this is going, but I dare say you do, a well written snippet, always a pleasure to read your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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After such a shock it is difficult to know what to do next. It's a pity that he was picked on like that, but we live in a curel world. I liked his difficult choice of church or wine bar! He he he. Confused and misguided I have no idea where this is going, but I dare say you do, a well written snippet, always a pleasure to read your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the review, Dolly. Church or wine bar? Well, even Jesus wasn't averse to turning the water into wine!
Comment from Pantygynt
That £5,000 is going to be harder to earn than you thought it seems. I have often thought that those Bondian techniques only worked if Ian Fleming was the script writer. Any attempt to mimic the scale inevitably heaped problems on ones head. Thank your lucky stars you only met the reincarnation of 'Oddjob' rather than 'Jaws'.
"Couchon!" - I know my French is not brilliant but I think this should be "Cochon".
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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That £5,000 is going to be harder to earn than you thought it seems. I have often thought that those Bondian techniques only worked if Ian Fleming was the script writer. Any attempt to mimic the scale inevitably heaped problems on ones head. Thank your lucky stars you only met the reincarnation of 'Oddjob' rather than 'Jaws'.
"Couchon!" - I know my French is not brilliant but I think this should be "Cochon".
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Your French is better than mine! I should always look these things up before committing myself to paper!
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I failed French 'O' level first time round. Monsieur Google n'est pas mal.
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Moi, aussi
Comment from diamondbogle
Yo this was really cool. I like the way this was written. It had imagery but yet I kinda went off with it. I also liked how it flowed really nicely. Overall really well done.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Yo this was really cool. I like the way this was written. It had imagery but yet I kinda went off with it. I also liked how it flowed really nicely. Overall really well done.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thanks for stopping by to review this one. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done with your descriptions of Charles panic at the enormity of what he'd been part of. Great scene with the young couple.This is a great chapter Tony, a few chuckles in the wine bar scene, this one had a bit of everything.
Great job,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Well done with your descriptions of Charles panic at the enormity of what he'd been part of. Great scene with the young couple.This is a great chapter Tony, a few chuckles in the wine bar scene, this one had a bit of everything.
Great job,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks for your review of this, Valda, and for the extra star. I appreciate your comments about the humour and the interaction with the young couple.
Comment from RGstar
I am glad I had a six star left for this. In terms of room, space and character, you had it here. Narrative flowed nicely, the periphery used with good balance. The scenes felt good, no over the top or tying too hard...as natural as the characters that are in them. I had a smile, for I love when something is good, especially from one of my fellow authors that I could call friend. Just a pleasure to read something good from the good here. Within 40 words it felt as if I was on scene or watching a movie...that is where you want to be when writing, allow the reader that comfort.
Bravo.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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I am glad I had a six star left for this. In terms of room, space and character, you had it here. Narrative flowed nicely, the periphery used with good balance. The scenes felt good, no over the top or tying too hard...as natural as the characters that are in them. I had a smile, for I love when something is good, especially from one of my fellow authors that I could call friend. Just a pleasure to read something good from the good here. Within 40 words it felt as if I was on scene or watching a movie...that is where you want to be when writing, allow the reader that comfort.
Bravo.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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What a wonderful review, RG. High praise indeed. I am delighted that the graphic quality impressed enough for a sixth star. I very much appreciate your friendship on this site. You are someone I greatly respect both as a person and as a writer.
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My pleasure , my friend.